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Mysteria
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25 posted 08-20-2002 01:19 PM       View Profile for Mysteria   Email Mysteria   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Mysteria

Oh no you don't - I waited too long to have you disappear on me now so up you go for more to savor.
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26 posted 08-20-2002 03:01 PM       View Profile for bsquirrel   Email bsquirrel   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for bsquirrel

YES YES YES YES YES YES YES YES YEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEES!!!! You're writing poetry again!!! *Great* poetry!

Hi.
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27 posted 08-20-2002 03:20 PM       View Profile for Midnitesun   Email Midnitesun   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Midnitesun

JM, I'm sitting here, in awe and speechless admiration. I will come back to this again tonight, while the stars are twinkling and calling out your name, in thankfulness.
This is so beautiful presented, so expertly written!
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28 posted 08-20-2002 03:45 PM       View Profile for Munda   Email Munda   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Munda's Home Page   View IP for Munda

JM - Once more you left me in total awe! Fabulous writing!
Mark Bohannan
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In the winds of Cherokee song


29 posted 08-20-2002 07:25 PM       View Profile for Mark Bohannan   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Mark Bohannan

'Bout dang time ya posted somethin'.  Working late getting signs up on all the stores but will be back to give ya a proper reply....ohhhhhhh around 1 am or so!( I just love making a moth wait!) ROFL.  
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30 posted 08-20-2002 08:11 PM       View Profile for Kethry   Email Kethry   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Kethry

Amazingly real this write of feel
Keth

Here in the midst of my lonely abyss, a single joy I find...your presence in my mind.  Unknown


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31 posted 08-20-2002 08:18 PM       View Profile for hoot_owl_rn   Email hoot_owl_rn   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit hoot_owl_rn's Home Page   View IP for hoot_owl_rn

Smiling...this is an oatmeal poem if I've ever seen one

~ Ruth
  

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32 posted 08-20-2002 08:23 PM       View Profile for Magnus   Email Magnus   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Magnus

You just sit back....read, read, critique,
comment...not bother anyone....THEN....

YOU DROP SOMETHING LIKE THIS IN OUR LAPS!!!

Truly a beaut. if ever was one.....
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33 posted 08-20-2002 08:34 PM       View Profile for Marge Tindal   Email Marge Tindal   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Marge Tindal's Home Page   View IP for Marge Tindal

JanetMarie~
Now ain't this a purty thang ?
Yes it is !

You even sprinkled it with ...'s ~
That's my gal !

Beautifully done, poetess~
Truly~
*Hugs*
~*Marge*~

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34 posted 08-20-2002 10:27 PM       View Profile for Gemini   Email Gemini   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Gemini

JM-This is soo beautiful and the flow of your words are something to behold.
ethome
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35 posted 08-20-2002 10:36 PM       View Profile for ethome   Email ethome   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit ethome's Home Page   View IP for ethome

Janet

What can I say that hasn't already been said...Usually I'm never at a loss for words but this is simply exquisite writing and has me speechless for a change....So much soul and beauty combined and what a fine texture those two allies are painting from your mind......Excellent dear poet lady just excellent!

This is a beautiful ending...

"You are my day's begin and end ...
my sun's descent ... my moon's ascend.
Without you the stars turn to dust and are just pretend.
You are my heart's healing amend ...
my inspire's intend ... my rhyme's transcend.

Ask the stars all that I wish for
and they will tell you true ..."

However, it's hard to pick out any one verse that's more outstanding than another.....great work!
Bye for now poet pet!

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36 posted 08-20-2002 11:30 PM       View Profile for Greeneyes   Email Greeneyes   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Greeneyes

so fly me through the sky

you touch every fiber of my emotional understanding....knowing always knowing how peaceful I feell  after reading your heart...more then once, more then twice....I know the musing talks...tis such a beautiful sight to experience how words come to life through your eyes....luv ya sweet butterfly....


Lauren~

The ocean looks like a thousand diamonds strewn across a blue blanket
I lean against the wind pretend I am weightless and in this moment I am happy

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37 posted 08-21-2002 12:06 AM       View Profile for Janet Marie   Email Janet Marie   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Janet Marie

Sharon....you spoil me...Im gonna have to start paying ya agent fees  LOL
thank you for your support.

Mike....HI back atchaya thank you for your enthusiasm groovy guy!!!

Kacy...hey you...welcome back girlie!!! How cool to see your name here again...
I see ya made your location change, hows the weather *L*...thank you truly for such a wonderful encouraging response..you humble me.

Munda- hey to you too...So nice to see you here with us..thank you for your kind words and high praise and for coming by to read. TY!!

Mark.... paybacks are hell baby...ya know the price for making a moth wait
I look forward to seeing this one thru your eyes.

Keth...thank you for feeling this!! thanks for stopping in.

Ruth... LOL....thank you girlie BUT..is it HOT or COLD oatmeal??? I know the effect it has on you rofl  

Barry.... LOL --- ya just never know what me moody muse will do for attention!
thank you muchly for your clever and kind reply poet sir.

Marg....well we cant have the stars and not have the sprinkles can we..you know me...always mixing eclipses with ellipses *S*
thank you so much for the praise and the hugs!!

Gemini...hey you...welcome back...so nice to find your name here....thank you for this lovely reply!!

E-babes...your "speechless" is more than enough!! thank you my poet pal for all your wonderful words of encouragement. Youre too good to me. TY!!

Lauren...thank you sweet poetess for always just knowing...thank you for the things shared in the words...and forthe connection found in between them..love ya back L-girlie
Thank you ALL for your kindess and support.
jm
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38 posted 08-21-2002 01:00 AM       View Profile for Balladeer   Email Balladeer   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Balladeer's Home Page   View IP for Balladeer

Well, it appears every superlative in the English language, with a couple of foreign ones thrown in for good measure, has been used to describe this poem and yanno what? It still ain't enough!!

Beautiful writing, Mizzou Mama....thank you for the treat
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39 posted 08-21-2002 07:22 AM       View Profile for Tracey   Email Tracey   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Tracey

What a treat to see you posting JM. And what a beautiful poem you’ve written. I can really feel the yearning, the longing, woven into this wonderful piece. I love the rhyme scheme too…just makes the words dance down the page.
(hey, now that your muse is working again….want to send her over here and teach mine how it’s done??? Mine’s gone on strike and won’t get off her butt for any amount of pleading. Lol)

You can never win or lose
If you don't
Run the race

Psychedelic Furs - Love My Way

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40 posted 08-21-2002 11:15 AM       View Profile for suthern   Email suthern   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for suthern

This is a beautiful presentation... so very well crafted. *S* It flows with a soft rhyming elegance that's as easy on the mind as the graphics are on the eyes. *S* The declarative ending could easily stand alone... but forms a fitting finale. Excellent work.
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41 posted 08-21-2002 11:22 AM       View Profile for Janet Marie   Email Janet Marie   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Janet Marie

Michael...your superlatives are more than enough...just having you come by and read me is my reward...thank you so much dear deer... Spammy smooches to ya!!

Tracey.... hey you!! -- thank you girlie-girl...yeah...I got the yearning & longing down to a mothy art by now....maybe someday I will get the rest right....as for me moody muse...Im not sure shes up to teaching anyone else...I have the feeling her stay was brief...she's smart enough to leave before I wear her down. Thank you for this kind reply and stopping in to see me.


thanks guys...very much.
jm
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42 posted 08-21-2002 11:25 AM       View Profile for Janet Marie   Email Janet Marie   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Janet Marie

Ruth...ya snuck in while I was left handed peck pecking .. thank you for your generous reply...good to see you back...we miss your poetry loving presence around here...tell that werk monster  I said so
thank you girlie for coming by.

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43 posted 08-21-2002 11:43 AM       View Profile for Nightshade   Email Nightshade   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Nightshade's Home Page   View IP for Nightshade

Perfection!! Into my library this awesome write goes. Chris

Life is not measured by breaths you take, but by moments that take your breath away.

Mark Bohannan
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44 posted 08-21-2002 05:27 PM       View Profile for Mark Bohannan   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Mark Bohannan


====================
Hey you......been waiting long enough?  LOL  Okay, so I read this a few times already and last night I
kept asking the stars just as you suggested in your lovely poem, but all they would do was "wink" at
me.  ALL OF 'EM!!  It's as if they were trying to keep it a secret or something, so of course you know
what I did........I went to MY book of insight.........got my answer.........gotta tell ya girlie.........you are
WEIRD!!!!!!!!!!!   Jon Bon Jovi??????????  Come on now........well okay, maybe I can give ya that one.

Seriously though;  I love how you laced the entire piece in inner rhyme by splitting your lines with all
those wonderful "...'s"  And then of course your end line rhymes really sing out.  You used some very
cool words (verbage) to convey your points and yes, some of the images and such YOU may say are
cliche' , but the way you wrapped it all together keeps them from sounding that way.  

I also loved the way you took us from night to day and to night again using some of my favorite settings
but of course that wasn't a surprise at all now was it?  What I liked most of all however is the totalness
of your aspire to get your feelings across throughout the entire piece.  You left no stone unturned and
you show the devotion to what you KNOW to be true so vividly that no-one could doubt it.  Some of my
favorite lines would have to be..............

By midnight's light ... my heart in flight
Sort of brings to mind, a heart with wings beating outside an open window facing the moon
in hopes of an answer.

Ask the endless skies ... where my heart lies
for the clouds know the promises kept.
Really cool thought here as clouds do tend to wander but maybe that is because they are in
search of the fulfillment to the promises!  

Then of course there is this whole verse.........
Ask the evening sun ... as another day is done
you're the whispered prayer I pray.
In dusking twilight ... as the sky gives way to night
I swear on stars above this love is here to stay.
  Whispering prayers in calm desires while inside you are about to explode
in the overwhelming want........then "swear" on the stars sort of gives that last bit
of nudge as if to say....ARE YOU PAYING ATTENTION? DO YA GET IT?
Very cool sweetness................Loved the entire piece and of course love seeing
your name here finally again.  love ya my bestest of  friends.....your cocoon seems
to have gotten a little bit brighter on the inside and I am loving it.
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45 posted 08-21-2002 06:30 PM       View Profile for Bill Charles   Email Bill Charles   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Bill Charles

Janet Marie - I stand in awe of your writing. Amazing piece of poetry...

BC
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46 posted 08-21-2002 07:10 PM       View Profile for EagleScorpion   Email EagleScorpion   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for EagleScorpion

cool i just got inspired.. thanX!!
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47 posted 08-21-2002 11:57 PM       View Profile for Janet Marie   Email Janet Marie   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Janet Marie

Chris... thank you for the honor of being in your library...so good to have you back in the blue pages..thanks!!

Mark....ya cant blame a moth for trying...yeah...you guessed it...but the stars said I havent been good enough for JBJ ...so whats a moth to do? Thank you seems to little to say for this generous, supportive reply....thank you for letting me see the poem thru your eyes...as always I learn from your insight...thank you for giving this so much time and this in depth reply...even if ya did make me wait
If me cocoon seems brighter it must be the stars...especially the green ones
thank you MC...love you too.

Bill ... thank you poet sir..your reply is humbling....thank you for coming by and reading.

EagleScorpion ... Cool back at ya and your welcome and thank you!!


thank you all for your kindness.
jm

In the space between now and then
I lost the fire, lost a friend
and Ill never be the same again
Still, I believe in the innocence
we gave away.

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48 posted 09-01-2002 01:20 AM       View Profile for GOlDsparklESS   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for GOlDsparklESS

WOW - This is amazing.
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49 posted 09-01-2002 01:33 AM       View Profile for Duncan   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Duncan

Ask the stars
what will come of this
they'll smile amongst themselves
at your heart
(and mine)
on sleeve
whatever it may bring
relativety is ours to decide
enjoy yourself
try not to think
too much
 
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