Member Rara Avis
In the winds of Cherokee song
Hey you......been waiting long enough? LOL Okay, so I read this a few times already and last night I
kept asking the stars just as you suggested in your lovely poem, but all they would do was "wink" at
me. ALL OF 'EM!! It's as if they were trying to keep it a secret or something, so of course you know
what I did........I went to MY book of insight.........got my answer.........gotta tell ya girlie.........you are
WEIRD!!!!!!!!!!! Jon Bon Jovi?????????? Come on now........well okay, maybe I can give ya that one.
Seriously though; I love how you laced the entire piece in inner rhyme by splitting your lines with all
those wonderful "...'s" And then of course your end line rhymes really sing out. You used some very
cool words (verbage) to convey your points and yes, some of the images and such YOU may say are
cliche' , but the way you wrapped it all together keeps them from sounding that way.
I also loved the way you took us from night to day and to night again using some of my favorite settings
but of course that wasn't a surprise at all now was it? What I liked most of all however is the totalness
of your aspire to get your feelings across throughout the entire piece. You left no stone unturned and
you show the devotion to what you KNOW to be true so vividly that no-one could doubt it. Some of my
favorite lines would have to be..............
By midnight's light ... my heart in flight
Sort of brings to mind, a heart with wings beating outside an open window facing the moon
in hopes of an answer.
Ask the endless skies ... where my heart lies
for the clouds know the promises kept.
Really cool thought here as clouds do tend to wander but maybe that is because they are in
search of the fulfillment to the promises!
Then of course there is this whole verse.........
Ask the evening sun ... as another day is done
you're the whispered prayer I pray.
In dusking twilight ... as the sky gives way to night
I swear on stars above this love is here to stay.
Whispering prayers in calm desires while inside you are about to explode
in the overwhelming want........then "swear" on the stars sort of gives that last bit
of nudge as if to say....ARE YOU PAYING ATTENTION? DO YA GET IT?
Very cool sweetness................Loved the entire piece and of course love seeing
your name here finally again. love ya my bestest of friends.....your cocoon seems
to have gotten a little bit brighter on the inside and I am loving it.