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Gentle Spirit
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0 posted 2002-08-18 07:42 PM




Lullabye Of Autumn

That smell, damp
the leaves upon the autumn
after an evening rain.

Oh! Can you hear her singing?

The rustle of the wind
in sweet lullabye.
Leaves in golden array
crackling in the wind.

Snap.

Drifting down in soft land
upon beds of dew drops
fallen from the sky.

Oh! Can you hear her singing?

Hidden among the trees
comes the trilling,
sounds of winged birds
broken out in song.

Softly a mother in melody
lulling babies off to sleep,
tranquill in dreams.

Oh! Can you hear her singing?

In harmony the dusk spreads
her blanket crossed the earth
in sweet surround of peace.

Oh! Can you hear her song?


somebody tell me, please help me....
understand.......(as sung by Trace Adkins)

{on the wings of words are spirits fly...and our souls are free~me

[This message has been edited by Gentle Spirit (08-18-2002 07:43 PM).]

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1 posted 2002-08-18 07:44 PM


Yes...I hear her song...
Beautiful Donna...perfectly beautiful.
~Hugs~

~ Time has cast a spell on you
  So you won't ever forget me ~

VAS
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2 posted 2002-08-18 07:45 PM


I don't hear it just yet, but you have rekindled the joy that lies ahead for us, soon

Whether on the shoal or on the shore,
I'll seek the lighthouse evermore.

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3 posted 2002-08-18 07:48 PM




(smiles) Awwwwwwwww, I just love this, sweet friend, this is breathtaking, autums colors always dazzle me as the soft chill in the wind is like music to my ears, I LOVE IT!!! (kiss on cheek) This is gorgeous, sweet friend, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Donna, thank you for sharing!



May love and light always shine upon you!

Love,
Noah Eaton

"Underneath your clothes there's an endless story..."

Shakira

Madame Chipmunk
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4 posted 2002-08-18 07:49 PM


I can hear her, Donna... I can even catch a glimpse of her...
but I wish it would cool off just a bit, so that I could feel her breath.
I love autumn, and you portrayed her beautifully.
~ hugs from the autumnal chipmunk

Lyra

copyright2002 Lyra Nesius

"poetry is life distilled"  Gwendolyn Brooks

Martie
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5 posted 2002-08-18 08:17 PM


Donna

I love autumn, time of changing...it always takes me changing too.  Your poem is a sweet reminder of what's to come.

ThisDiamond
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6 posted 2002-08-18 09:22 PM


A beautiful portrayal of my favorite time of year...looking forward to the song.
ThisDiamond

Gentle Spirit
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7 posted 2002-08-19 06:21 AM


Nancy, good morning and thank you for the beautiful.  Tis a gift to treasure.

Vas, the fall here in PA can be rather beautiful at times and it is that time
of year that is endearing to me.  There is so  much inspiration in nature.
Thank you.

YES Noah, dazzle is the word!  Aren't the colors splendid??  Thank you sweetie.

Oh Lyra, you and I both.  Sometimes listening to her breath is just about
the best sound there can be.  Hugs to you.

Martie, yes.........a time of change.  So much changes and although it would
seem that many things are dying, it is really a time of living .......a start.  
Thanks hon.

ThisDiamond, so glad you stopped by to listen.  Hopefully we all will hear soon.
Thanks.

somebody tell me, please help me....
understand.......(as sung by Trace Adkins)

{on the wings of words are spirits fly...and our souls are free~me

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8 posted 2002-08-19 09:21 AM


YES!! and so beautifully.... lovely you...thank you sweet lady....for this...


Lauren~

The ocean looks like a thousand diamonds strewn across a blue blanket
I lean against the wind pretend I am weightless and in this moment I am happy

Seymour Tabin
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9 posted 2002-08-19 09:26 AM


Gentle Spirit
A lovely write and read, enjoyed.

NewEnglandlazurlu
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10 posted 2002-08-19 09:47 AM


There are no sounds like this yet. But I am anxiously waiting as I'm so over this unbearable heat.

Your words leaving me longing for the next season. Beautiful poem.

Hugs, Marti

"Even if life is full of thorns,
I still embrace it, for I know
that in between those thorns,
there is a rose worth all the pain."

Chanson
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11 posted 2002-08-19 09:48 AM


Very pretty! *s

When you think you have heard it all,
listen more closely.
~Dorene

vandana
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12 posted 2002-08-19 11:32 AM


nice
Janet Marie
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13 posted 2002-08-19 11:37 AM


That smell, damp
the leaves upon the autumn
after an evening rain.

Oh! Can you hear her singing?

The rustle of the wind
in sweet lullabye.
Leaves in golden array
crackling in the wind.

==================================


this is lovely Donna...I am so ready for those sights, sounds and smells...this summer has been so hot and dry...
love the way you made this be a melody and a portrait of fall.

If all the tear drops went to heaven
And if all the pain was confined ...
Would I be your salvation
could I make your spirit shine.

KWSB

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14 posted 2002-08-19 11:50 AM


GentleSpirit~
You have quilted the anticipation of the season that falls in beauty~
Lovely gal~
Just lovely~
*Hugs*
~*Marge*~

~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~
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Bill Charles
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15 posted 2002-08-19 02:16 PM


Gentle Spirit - fall is coming soon, and I can hear its song. Very well told...

BC

Bill Charles
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16 posted 2002-08-19 02:16 PM


sorry, hit the wrong button again...
BC

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Duncan
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17 posted 2002-08-19 02:32 PM


Oh! Can you hear her singing?

The rustle of the wind
in sweet lullabye.
Leaves in golden array
crackling in the wind.


Now I can, and I'm certainly ready!

ShadowRider
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18 posted 2002-08-19 09:16 PM


her voice of heart
with two timbers
one that mates
one that nurtures
Fall sounds
are night songs of mothers
cooing softly to their beloveds


Donna:  you met Lauren's challenge and added a new sunset to the world of poetry.  My original reply
was written in a fog, i apologize for that.  
You have such versatility in writing styles.
Be well and enjoy the day!

jeff

[This message has been edited by ShadowRider (08-20-2002 07:40 AM).]

mycafe
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19 posted 2002-08-19 09:33 PM


sigh...this is so good!!

mycafe

Keep counting your blessings

SimplyGold
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20 posted 2002-08-19 09:40 PM


I hear her too! She is a welcome visitor and I do hope she will stay a little longer this time!

Electra

Why is Autumn personified as a she? Why not he?

Dulcinea
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21 posted 2002-08-19 11:50 PM


Wonderfully done ~D~! It is like a lullabye, when all things go to sleep for the long harsh winter. Though I love autumns brilliant display of color, I feel a bit of sadness knowing that all that glory will fade and be replaced by that empty gray void until spring arrives...loved this!
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22 posted 2002-08-20 02:58 AM


Ah, but you supplied the words to her song so well!  Beautiful.  As for me - I can't wait to greet her and sing her song.

The most valuable thing you own is a smile, wear it, and share it.
Sharon    

Gentle Spirit
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23 posted 2002-08-20 08:39 AM


Lauren, thank you for such a wonderful challenge.
Sending something special your way soon hon. Hugs.

Sey, glad that you enjoyed and thank you.

Marti, I think we are all ready to get past the heat.
Thank you.

Chanson, glad that you liked the pretty.  Hugs.

Vandana thanks much.

Janet, I am glad that you enjoyed the
sights and sounds and I thank you greatly.

Marge, thanks for the lovely.  Hugs back at ya.

Bill, lol....no problem.  Glad you could hear the songs.

Duncan, I think most of us are ready.  Thanks.

somebody tell me, please help me....
understand.......(as sung by Trace Adkins)

{on the wings of words are spirits fly...and our souls are free~me

Gentle Spirit
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24 posted 2002-08-20 08:47 AM


Jeff, no apology needed.  You were correct
Lauren does rock!  thanks....

My cafe     thanks much!

Elcetcra, I hope she gets here soon too.  Not
really sure why I used she, it just seemed to fit.

Dulcy, yes but there is also a certain
beauty in the pureness of the snow
freshly fallen.  Thank you.

Sharon, I bet you sing along in
wonderful harmony with nature
Thanks hon.

sigheyes
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25 posted 2002-08-21 06:03 AM


The sights and sounds seem to come to life through your eyes in this delightful
read that you have gifted us with.  The fall is one of my favorite times of year with
the trees in all there splendor.  IWIHWT.  

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26 posted 2002-08-21 06:47 AM



I don't like it when I think I've missed a poem, so luckily, some fine soul popped this one back up for me to see!  That's exactly how Autumn comes in...like a siren on the wind!

Muys
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27 posted 2002-08-21 06:54 AM


Wunderfull~~~*Donna*~~~
I like it
Muys  

Blue Kitty
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28 posted 2002-08-21 09:48 AM


A wonderful poem, I can hear it, unfortunately the song of Autumn means the end of summer.  But the days will stay warm for a while longer.

P.

Sudhir Iyer
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29 posted 2002-08-21 09:52 AM


This is beautifully written...

Regards to you,
Sudhir

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30 posted 2002-08-21 09:52 AM


Thank you for evoking feelings of my favorite time of year, just around the corner now, but can't get here fast enough.

Oh, I CAN hear her singing!

Gentle Spirit
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31 posted 2002-08-21 05:09 PM


SE, I am glad you enjoyed the sights and sounds.  You know how beautiful
PA can be in the fall.  Thanks and hugs.

Sunshine, I miss poems alot so I go back and flip through the pages that are
past frequently to find the lil gems that got hidden along the way.  I am glad
you didn't miss this.  Like a siren....yes.....

Muys, I am glad you enjoyed it.  Thanks!

Kitty  I enjoy the summer but I won't miss the extreme heat we have had around
here lately.  Thanks for stopping by.  

Sudhir, I am pleased that you enjoyed it, and thanks for taking the time to read.

Magician I am so glad you can hear her song!  Thank you.  *s*

somebody tell me, please help me....
understand.......(as sung by Trace Adkins)

{on the wings of words are spirits fly...and our souls are free~me

texasrose
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32 posted 2002-09-19 06:20 AM


this circles all of the elements of autumn and is extremely well crafted.  the sights and sounds so vividly captured.  a keeper!
Elizabeth Santos
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33 posted 2002-09-19 08:11 AM


A poetic lullaby, very pleasing to the mind. A splendid vision of autumn. Thank you
Liz

Elizabeth Santos
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34 posted 2002-09-19 08:11 AM


A poetic lullaby, very pleasing to the mind. A splendid vision of autumn. Thank you
Liz

Earth Angel
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35 posted 2002-09-19 08:44 AM


Your words need no music to accompany them. The melody is already intricately woven through them.

~ smiling all the while ~
EA

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