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misery_made_beautiful
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0 posted 2002-08-18 12:20 PM


I see the naked backs of those before they pass,
side by side -- marked and numbered respectively.
A calendar of flesh; each day stretched without separation.
Hidden behind the perceived more important,
the audience, a starved suckling,
puckered,
to suck the cultural pap.

The days hunching then pass; giving light to the next.
Each day falls to the past; pestilence now holds.
Backs continue to bend within the darkness of common place.
Over each day's head so sickly the light glows.
The shadows detail the spine which forms their shape.
Still hidden behind the gapping mouths of housewives,
subscribers,
patrons of the great escape.

Salivating eyes applaud a standard; the regarded higher.
Everyday mishaps scatter unaware, weeded, and UN-watered.
Bestowing reverence; Throwing roses; Wishing to be them endlessly.
Channels flicker the blatent ignorance due to media policies.
Neglect the nights quietus outside your window
a simple man's back breaks,
not unlike the worshiped,
they follow.

Why broadcast only the days marked with significant remembrance?
Is it possible to directly cable every mans last day of signal?
When we spew our sympathy remember the many.
The moms, dads, and the ones we pass in the hall.
The simultaneous deaths that surround us all.
Unfortunately, its always ongoing.
The ones with opened mouths,
stretching to taste,
the corporate by-product,
the celebrity waste.


"www.miserymadebeautiful.com"


"Aging keeps life interesting"

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VAS
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1 posted 2002-08-18 12:41 PM


Yep, see what you're saying and believe I've had some of the same feelings but not in such articulate words/thinking.

Interesting form and perchance is a statement in itself, as well.

One thought I had as I finished reading...everyone is a 'celebrity' to someone, in other words their presence and their loss is of great impact and of great import to someone, at least at one time in their lives. Yet the more people that no an individual the greater the potential for having an impact upon their lives.

Whether on the shoal or on the shore,
I'll seek the lighthouse evermore.

brian sites
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since 2002-06-25
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usa
2 posted 2002-08-18 12:43 PM


excellent!
confused at first
but through reading
got it!
love the calendar metaphor
because though their days are numbered
(planned obsolescence)
there is always a tommorrow
though I will say this
we ALL need escapism
no one can bear to live in the here and now 24/7
so the almighty gods of entertainment industry figured a way to make a truckload of the long green?
we can just
tune what we don't want to run to
out
BS

I never aimed at reality; I aimed at truth. --Orson Welles

misery_made_beautiful
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3 posted 2002-08-18 12:45 PM


Interesting take...
Thanks for reading it!

misery_made_beautiful
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4 posted 2002-08-18 12:47 PM


Hey BS
Thanks for the life preserver, again...
I'm happy you got it, thought I was hiding the content and meaning with all the metaphors just a bit.

Later

wranx
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5 posted 2002-08-18 10:43 PM


m_m_b,

This very, very good. Thoughtful in content and construct.

Impressed!

~wranx

In reply to "which way do we go?", the answer was never "straight", but, "progressively forward".      

~wranx~

misery_made_beautiful
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6 posted 2002-08-18 11:03 PM


Hi wranx!
Thank you for taking the time to read my poem and post a thoughtful reply.

Later

Mistletoe Angel
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7 posted 2002-08-18 11:24 PM




(big hugggsssssss) Oh my gosh, I couldn't agree with you more, I think it is selfish and cruel for big corporate powers to try and cabel us all together as robots and accord us to a mono-destiny when we should all be breaking loose and celebrate our dreams and differences with free-will! (sigh) This is very powerfully said, sweet friend, I love it, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet friend, thank you for sharing!



May love and light always shine upon you!

Love,
Noah Eaton

"Underneath your clothes there's an endless story..."

Shakira

misery_made_beautiful
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since 2002-08-10
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8 posted 2002-08-18 11:32 PM


Hey, thanks
Thank you for reading my poem and sharing your thoughts on the subject.

"Aging keeps life interesting"

Krawdad
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since 2001-01-03
Posts 2597

9 posted 2002-08-19 12:09 PM


ah . . .
the bourgeois decadence.
funny how it just seems to keep growing . . .

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