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Krishankins
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0 posted 2002-08-17 11:21 PM



You play with my heart as a flower
To love me or love me not
When all I can do is to hope
It's an uneven daisy you've got

A bird never flies so high that it can't hit the ground

© Copyright 2002 Kristopher Hankins - All Rights Reserved
Bill Charles
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1 posted 2002-08-17 11:57 PM


Krishankins - you write these short ones very well...

BC

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2 posted 2002-08-17 11:58 PM




(sigh) Oh Kristopher, this is so powerfully said, sweet friend, it is indeed kind of dangerous to love someone like that and I wish for your heart to forever be filled with flowers of daisies left basking in trust and joy and comfort! (big hugggsssss) This is wonderful, sweet friend, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Kristopher, thank you for sharing!



May love and light always shine upon you!

Love,
Noah Eaton

"Underneath your clothes there's an endless story..."

Shakira

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3 posted 2002-08-18 01:00 AM


Superb!!! Another fantastic, fantastic piece.

Sincerely,
Titus

"I'll prepare myself, and one day my time will come."
            -Abraham Lincoln

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4 posted 2002-08-19 12:11 PM


*bump*




1slick_lady
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5 posted 2002-08-19 12:21 PM


sad but hopeful...helen
Krawdad
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6 posted 2002-08-19 12:27 PM


Don't think of yourself as a blossom
There's more than one bud that you've got
And if she's just counting your petals
Then tell her the plan's gone to pot

passing shadows
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7 posted 2002-08-19 04:51 AM


like this one lots!
catalinamoon
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8 posted 2002-08-19 07:12 AM


Oh yes, this is just how I feel, many days.
Excellent write, Kris.
Sandra

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9 posted 2002-08-19 09:09 AM


Nature, in all its imperfections and breathtaking glory, is captured so well here, krishankins. *s

When you think you have heard it all,
listen more closely.
~Dorene

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10 posted 2002-08-19 09:19 AM


Krishankins
Short and sweet, well done.

Neeraja
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11 posted 2002-08-19 11:45 AM


Smile.... well done Kris!!!

Neeraja

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12 posted 2002-08-20 06:02 PM


well done Kris and very enjoyed.  *s*

somebody tell me, please help me....
understand.......(as sung by Trace Adkins)

{on the wings of words are spirits fly...and our souls are free~me

Suetang
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13 posted 2002-08-21 02:08 AM


Absolutely fabulous, as usual.

Take care.....Sue

I am in motion
I am blue
Love is an ocean
I'm anchored in you
- Shawn Mullins

Duncan
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14 posted 2002-08-21 02:18 AM


When all I can do is to hope
It's an uneven daisy you've got

Now, that is a cool line!  Love brevity.  Ya do it VERY well.

passing shadows
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15 posted 2002-08-30 10:51 PM


gotta send this one through again....sorry
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16 posted 2002-08-31 08:36 AM


Concurrng with Duncan - good brevity. That's one of the things I do, squeeze emotion into sparse lines, or lines that seem to lack emotion - it isn't all that easy is it?

Hmm...haven't read you before...I'll be keeping my eye out..

K


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