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Krissy
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since 2002-02-22

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kent England

0 posted 2002-08-16 09:55 AM

It Was All Of That

A liquid light moment
That’s what she called it
That breathless gasp
That slip of sublime rhyme
Oh yes it was that
It was all of that

The diving into
The pool of your tomorrows
While bidding a fond
Farewell to yesterdays
That first taste
First touch of magic
That flows
Simply flows past
The stream of
What is
To what will be

She said it was a
Kite flying moment
Where the
Being that was more
Than some sticks and paper
Flew and cavorted
With the air
Dancing prancing
Flirting and almost singing
Springing into the sky
As it flew wild and free
Only tethered to the
Ground by a slender
Cord of aspiration

It was that
Oh yes it was all of that
A kite flying
Heart stopping
Breathtaking
Moment
Of such incredible
And sweet
Surprise

It was that
Oh yes much more than that

Krissy

And while thy willing soul transpiers
at every pore with instant fires
Andrew Marvell 1621-1678

Seymour Tabin
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Tamarac Fla

1 posted 2002-08-16 10:04 AM

Krissy,
A palatte knife painting of a moment, delightful.

Marsha

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since 2000-07-10

Posts 7423
Maidstone Kent England

2 posted 2002-08-16 08:57 PM

My little Krissy NOW this I like, this has a lyrical quality to it, flows beautifully my darling daughter.

Huge kisses for this one, I’ll make a poet out of you yet my love. Great writing darling I love it

Love you always
and forever
Mum

Breathe through the heat of our desire
Thy coolness and they balm
Let sense be dumb let flesh retire
Speak through the earthquake wind and fire

Madame Chipmunk
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since 2001-12-05

Posts 8296
Michigan

3 posted 2002-08-16 09:01 PM

Oh what a poetic feel this one has, Krissy...
Very good!

~ hugs from a chipmunk across the big pond

Lyra

copyright2002 Lyra Nesius

"poetry is life distilled" Gwendolyn Brooks

Sunshine

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since 1999-06-25

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Listening to every heart

4 posted 2002-08-16 09:07 PM

For all of this,
to come from all of that!
Who inspired you, Krissy...
for this is wonderful, and it
simply bubbles with delight!

Balladeer

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Ft. Lauderdale, Fl USA

5 posted 2002-08-16 11:11 PM

Krissy, this is great! The kite is not the only thing flyin g high, I see

suthern

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since 1999-07-29

Posts 20723
Louisiana

6 posted 2002-08-20 03:14 PM

The diving into
The pool of your tomorrows
While bidding a fond
Farewell to yesterdays
That first taste
First touch of magic

I fear my view of such moments is through my rear view mirror... but I read your words and remember and a smile involuntarily lights my face. *S* This is wonderful, Krissy... I like it very much!

mycafe
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since 2002-05-23

Posts 584

7 posted 2002-08-21 02:36 AM

You took my breath away with this so very special and beautiful poem. Love it!

mycafe

Keep counting your blessings

Marge Tindal

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since 1999-11-06

Posts 42384
Florida's Foreverly Shores

8 posted 2002-08-21 09:05 AM

Krissy~
Dearest poetess ...
I'm gonna take this one 'real personal'~

It is exquisite ... yeah ... it is 'all of that'~

You are just working the thoughts so beautifully~
Keep flying~

Love you to pieces~
Hurry September ! !
*Hugs*
~*Marge*~

~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~
noles1@totcon.com

passing shadows
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displaced

9 posted 2002-08-25 05:35 AM

nice lines, nice concept, and yes, it is all that!

ShadowRider
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since 2001-07-14

Posts 1038
USA

10 posted 2002-08-25 12:29 PM

Such a moment of poetic paradise
you write of, krissy.  And what was
special about this:  you told of feelings
so well, sweet friend, without the banality
of detail of 'what the moment was.'

You are getting there, into the realms of
making the reader reach themselves,
which is what a good poet should do,
instead of 'telling' them everything!

I am duly impressed!
Be well, and love on your siblings and Mom
once in a great while  *smile*
jeff

wranx
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since 2002-06-07

Posts 3689
Moved from a shack to a barn

11 posted 2002-08-25 12:34 PM

Beautiful, lyrical, playful, sweet...Yes it was "all of that"

(Tell your Mom, that you are already a poet, then thank her)

I hope that this (lovely vein) continues for you.

~wranx

In reply to "which way do we go?", the answer was never "straight", but, "progressively forward".

~wranx~

Nightshade

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since 2001-08-31

Posts 13962
just out of reach

12 posted 2002-08-25 12:47 PM

Krissy - I loved the lightness of being in this poem. Well done. Chris

Life is not measured by breaths you take, but by moments that take your breath away.

Midnitesun

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Gaia

13 posted 2002-08-25 04:24 PM

It was all that, and more! Well done, Krissy, this has a great flow, and left this reader flying high with a smile.

WhiteRose
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since 2002-07-23

Posts 3208
somebody's dungeon

14 posted 2002-08-25 10:01 PM

WOW! To say I am speechless would be understating it. This is fabulous. A great write!

Martie

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California

15 posted 2002-08-25 10:04 PM

Wonderfully done, krissy!

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