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RSWells
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0 posted 2002-08-15 10:43 PM



There's a hole somewhere on this graven earth
and it's curse'd name is Love,
wise would we to give it berth
but unknown's it's placement of.

Is it underneath Spring's verdant lawn,
does it front the flower bed
where desire's sight and scent is drawn
to a fruitful promise spread?

Does it decoy with a Summer moon,
does it wear in heated day,
where the latter causes us to swoon
while the former fades away?

Is it luring with it's Autumn leaves
us like tourists to it's hues
assuring that the browser grieves
when the forest color's lose?

Does it hide beneath the Winter snow
like a pure and virgin gift
to then bequeath a chilling woe
when it smothers in the drift?

To a parched and blistered man it's waters
though a drop, seems a barrage,
the single minded lamb to slaughter
found at trail's end a mirage.

© Copyright 2002 Richard S. Wells jr. - All Rights Reserved
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1 posted 2002-08-15 11:09 PM


Yes, Mr. Wells, love is everywhere...
hiding in every season.
I don't know why, but this gave me the sense that you,
or perhaps others, should shy away or be afraid of love...
as though you have perhaps been hurt.
But, you are quite correct..it is right there..
waiting for you to reach out and take it.
Hummm, you hesitate sir..and, I am beginning to ramble..lol
Therefore, let me just say, this is now one of my favourites of yours,
which I shall tuck away in my library.
Well said poet sir.
~Hugs~

~ Time has cast a spell on you
  So you won't ever forget me ~

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2 posted 2002-08-15 11:23 PM


"Is it underneath Spring's verdant lawn,
does it front the flower bed
where desire's sight and scent is drawn
to a fruitful promise spread?

Does it decoy with a Summer moon,
does it wear in heated day,
where the latter causes us to swoon
while the former fades away?"




(big hugggsssssss) Oh Richard, this is wonderful, I love it, I believe love can indeed be such a baffling feeling and it can feel so heartaching trying to believe where we can find it but I feel it is everywhere and its biggest blessings are inevitable, inevitable as spring, inevitable as a rainbow from a storm, inevitable to you! (sigh) This is outstanding, sweet friend, your words are always so influentially exciting, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Richard, thank you for sharing!



May love and light always shine upon you!

Love,
Noah Eaton

"Underneath your clothes there's an endless story..."

Shakira

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3 posted 2002-08-16 12:34 PM


When it comes to giving and receiving LOVE, you're damned if you do, but more damned if you don't. It is ubiquitous and omnipotent, and I cannot understand how any human could possibly avoid it, even if they tried.
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4 posted 2002-08-16 01:09 AM


There's a hole somewhere on this graven earth
and it's curse'd name is Love,
wise would we to give it berth
but unknown's it's placement of.
====================================
To a parched and blistered man it's waters
though a drop, seems a barrage,
the single minded lamb to slaughter
found at trail's end a mirage.
=====================================

that last verse is worth its weight in poetic gold....
I guess like the lamb...I'll walk right off the cliff every time....I keep thinking I'll get it (love) right sooner or later...or die trying I guess.

If all the tear drops went to heaven
And if all the pain was confined ...
Would I be your salvation
could I make your spirit shine.

KWSB

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5 posted 2002-08-16 01:16 AM


This is wonderful, good, old fashioned poetry.  Joyce
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6 posted 2002-08-16 02:11 AM


Richard, sadly this is one of your very best emotional poems yet. I don't agree with this poem inasmuch as I think any love at all, lost or found, is still love, and worth having experienced.

The most valuable thing you own is a smile, wear it, and share it.  
Sharon

Samantha G Kennedy
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7 posted 2002-08-16 06:16 AM


Does it decoy with a Summer moon,
does it wear in heated day,
where the latter causes us to swoon
while the former fades away?


the tempo to this is breath takingly perfect!!

your description awesome, love the questioning to each stanza...

and your final stanza, well....it completes a wonderful piece!!


good to read you again

Sammie

^i^

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land of flora and fauna
8 posted 2002-08-16 07:56 AM


Sometimes, when lost in the desert and the thirst is unbearable, we drink the sand.  May you find your oasis.
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