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brian sites
Senior Member

since 2002-06-25

Posts 1475
usa

0 posted 2002-08-14 12:19 PM

downhill ice
takes the car
from me
to play with
futile uphill others.
my frozen lake mind
too thin to take
the weight
and splinters.
one stays,
calmly skating
through crowd.
one curls around
closed eyes
dreaming of safety.
one joins daughter
in back, caressing
golden hair whispers.
the last?
unclasps hands,
stands,
prayer finished.
he smiles sheepishly
and introduces
himself.

I never aimed at reality; I aimed at truth. --Orson Welles

bsquirrel

Member Rara Avis

since 2000-01-03

Posts 7855

1 posted 2002-08-14 12:41 PM

Smart, sweet and full of BS.

Brian Sites, that is.

Great one, bri!

brian sites
Senior Member

since 2002-06-25

Posts 1475
usa

2 posted 2002-08-14 12:45 PM

thanks, mike

VAS
Member Rara Avis

since 2000-11-16

Posts 7450
Oregon

3 posted 2002-08-14 12:48 PM

I think I slipped in a hole in the ice...cuz I just plain got lost.

Of course, I'm hungry right now and I can't think when my stomach's gnawing at me from the inside out.

Whether on the shoal or on the shore,
I'll seek the lighthouse evermore.

bsquirrel

Member Rara Avis

since 2000-01-03

Posts 7855

4 posted 2002-08-14 12:52 PM

I dunno -- I picture it as a car sliding onto thin ice while skaters blissfully/ignorantly skate around it, or try to climb an ice hill ... all of them thinking of comfort, but not finding it.

That's my take, anyway. Before coffee, even!

wranx
Member Elite

since 2002-06-07

Posts 3689
Moved from a shack to a barn

5 posted 2002-08-15 10:46 AM

The slip ice slide and crash, perhaps, is just down around it.
Must needs to put in my wood.

Thanks for the 'minder

~wranx

The shortest distance between two points...
is sometimes, intolerable.

Bukowski

misery_made_beautiful
Junior Member

since 2002-08-10

Posts 36

6 posted 2002-08-15 04:01 PM

I luk-it-aluht...
you, prayer?

Good work BriSci

Madame Chipmunk
Member Rara Avis

since 2001-12-05

Posts 8296
Michigan

7 posted 2002-08-15 09:45 PM

I think you must have been driving in the winter in Kalamazoo, Michigan...Brian...
Thats what happens here whenever it snows...
The streets are so icy, especially the steep hills, that the cars seem to go downhill without trying...
I know that when I am driving on the ice and my car does that....I do lots of praying...and introducing myself to God...
I especially worry about kids in the back seat....OH MY!!!!!!!!!!
And winter isn't even close yet....
An interesting perspective ......I think.

~ hugs from a critter who should be hibernating

Lyra

copyright2002 Lyra Nesius

"poetry is life distilled" Gwendolyn Brooks

Mistletoe Angel

Member Empyrean

since 2000-12-17

Posts 32816
Portland, Oregon

8 posted 2002-08-15 09:57 PM

(big hugggsssssss) Oh Brian, this is excellent, I love it, you always have a great use of imagery that paints beautiful pictures, this is outstanding, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Brian, thank you for sharing!

May love and light always shine upon you!

Love,
Noah Eaton

"Underneath your clothes there's an endless story..."

Shakira

passing shadows
Member Empyrean

since 1999-08-26

Posts 45577
displaced

9 posted 2002-08-16 06:12 AM

welp, I'm sure glad I live in Florida! Rather have hurricanes any day!

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