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WhiteRose
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since 2002-07-23

Posts 3208
somebody's dungeon

0 posted 2002-08-14 09:33 AM

I look upon the night
the black curtain of sky
the sparkling stars
that reflect in my eyes,
the moon playing shadows
a trick of the light
a haze from the clouds
how eerie the night.

Down by the lake
moss hangs from the trees
more shadow shapes
what the eye sees.
Creatures it appears
dangling o'er the lake
awaiting their feast
before the day break.

The trees in the lake
also bare now of green
naked and stalking
amongst the reeds.
I look upon the night
with my eyes open wide
to see what mysteries
the night time does hide.

WhiteRose

In truth, what defines us is our poetry.

VAS
Member Rara Avis

since 2000-11-16

Posts 7450
Oregon

1 posted 2002-08-14 12:56 PM

ooooooh, eerie, really liked it...don't want to stand out there alone though, might be fun to look at through a window while sitting in a darkened house

love many lines espcially in this, but these most especially:

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    since 07-23-2002
    Posts 541
    Menopausal Flux


                              0 posted 08-14-2002 09:33 AM

                                                              I look upon the night
                                                             the black curtain of sky
                                                               the sparkling stars
                                                             that reflect in my eyes,
                                                            the moon playing shadows
                                                               a trick of the light
                                                             a haze from the clouds
                                                              how eerie the night.

                                                               Down by the lake
                                                            moss hangs from the trees
                                                              more shadow shapes
                                                               what the eye sees.
                                                              Creatures it appears
                                                              dangling o'er the lake
                                                              awaiting their feast
                                                              before the day break.

                                                              The trees in the lake
                                                             also bare now of green
                                                               naked and stalking
                                                               amongst the reeds.

Whether on the shoal or on the shore,
I'll seek the lighthouse evermore.

Magician
Member

since 2002-08-14

Posts 126

2 posted 2002-08-14 06:01 PM

how eerie the night... i love that line. Sets a tone that i like so much.

alterego
Member

since 2002-02-23

Posts 113
Toronto, Ontario, Canada

3 posted 2002-08-16 09:21 PM

This poem also didn't get much of a fair chance when the Forum changed to #22, and I think it is a beautiful poem that needs to have more people look at it - so here goes........

UP, UP AND AWAY TO THE TOP

Sheila

Create something infinite today - Smile!!!

WhiteRose
Member Elite

since 2002-07-23

Posts 3208
somebody's dungeon

4 posted 2002-08-17 08:07 AM

Thank you for the *bump* Sheila. :-)

Thank you also Magician and Vas for your comments.

I fried my computer in the storm so now I'm just waiting on People PC to save the day.

*HuGs* to all.

Gabriel Frost
Member

since 2002-08-15

Posts 216
Between midnight thoughts

5 posted 2002-08-17 09:38 PM

I can't tell u how much i appreciate this poem.Coming from someone who absolutely loves the night..this is brilliant imagery.
Well done!

Mistletoe Angel

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since 2000-12-17

Posts 32816
Portland, Oregon

6 posted 2002-08-17 10:35 PM

(smiles) Oh Anne, this is beautiful, sweet friend, I love it, such a mysterious beauty fills your atmosphere of this, yay, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Anne, thank you for sharing!

May love and light always shine upon you!

Love,
Noah Eaton

"Underneath your clothes there's an endless story..."

Shakira

Bill Charles
Member Patricius

since 2000-07-11

Posts 10619
highways, & byways, for now

7 posted 2002-08-17 11:18 PM

WhiteRose - the night, calm, serene, romantic...

BC

Magnus

Member Laureate

since 2001-10-10

Posts 14135
South Carolina, USA

8 posted 2002-08-17 11:42 PM

This poem feeeeeels eeeeeeerie....

Yuh dun gud..... Very nice.... I could
see it all in my mind and that says a
lot for your poem....very good imagery...

chitsank
Member

since 2002-08-13

Posts 88

9 posted 2002-08-17 11:46 PM

A beautifull description of the night. Lovely use of words; good flow.

Madame Chipmunk
Member Rara Avis

since 2001-12-05

Posts 8296
Michigan

10 posted 2002-08-17 11:47 PM

Beautifully worded with a slight edge of the eery...
I liked it a lot.

~ hugs from the underground burrow

Lyra

copyright2002 Lyra Nesius

"poetry is life distilled" Gwendolyn Brooks

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