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Magnus
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0 posted 2002-08-11 08:56 AM


My Lord…

Thy words fall upon my shoulders
heavy with the shame of my love.
Love of a lady,  my Lord…
One thee and I both know.

Can this man forget the beauty
of one who shares my soul?
Can this man leave this lady
and walk till darkness holds?

My Lord….

I dare sayeth to thee I canst.
For in this heart,  in this fragile shell
a flame burns brighter than a
thousand suns.

This heat,  my grace,  a heat the
oceans cannot consume and cool.
This heat comes from the bowls of
my earth,  volcanic and hot.

Banish me…
Cast me far into the abyss of loneliness
Give me but a mere crumb,   a drop of rain.
For I will leave this love to thee…
Knowing that my kiss has been felt
That my love has traced her very soul
That…..My lord….even as she sleeps at night
her dreams will be filled with me

And tho I shall not see the light of day
or hear the words of  human life fall
upon my ears,   I shall smile ….

For I have this love,  beyond all that
can be.  Beyond all that is.  
And thee,  my Lord…cannot take
this from me…even with my
death,   for as I die,  she dies with me,
And lives as my love
till time is no more…

(This is a fictional write of a knight confronting
the king with his feelings of love toward the
queen)

[This message has been edited by Magnus (08-11-2002 02:21 PM).]

© Copyright 2002 Barry J. Tackett - All Rights Reserved
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1 posted 2002-08-11 09:03 AM


For I have this love,  beyond all that
can be.  Beyond all that is.  
And thee,  my Lord…cannot take
this from me…even with my
death,   for as I die,  she dies with me,
And lives as my love
till time is no more…
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Very powerful write Barry!
You do this so well....also maketh me to swoon, ya know?
~Hugs~

~Somewhere in my heart I'm always
dancing with you in the summer rain~

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2 posted 2002-08-11 09:12 AM




…as the maiden lifts her thoughts
to the soul most dear
perchance to hear a tender step
that he again draws near

…but tis just leaves
under wind’s harsh breath
she wonders, if hand been tendered
would he have stayed, never left

…the highway ‘twas his call
his steed to carry him away
but doth his heart carry
her thoughts, this day…

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3 posted 2002-08-11 09:30 AM


it is a form of living dying:
not having the love that is craved
even though we may feel starved
Hope is sustenance enough
and like the pleasure of reading your work:

Bon Apetite'!
great work Barry!
jeff

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4 posted 2002-08-11 10:22 AM


Nancy....thanx M'lady...I know how well you
enjoy the write of the Knight...

LIW...Perhaps if for just a moment
the touch of finger would have told
a endless story of love...unfolding
even as he rides into the abyss...

Jeff...I always accept the comments of one
for whom I have great poetic respect...
Thanx...

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5 posted 2002-08-11 01:56 PM


"My Lord….

I dare sayeth to thee I canst.
For in this heart,  in this fragile shell
a flame burns brighter than a
thousand suns.

This heat,  my grace,  a heat the
oceans cannot consume and cool.
This heat comes from the bowls of
my earth,  volcanic and hot."




BRAVO!!! Oh Barry, this is wonderful, sweet friend, you always make me smile with your words of knighthood, chivalry always shines in your heart, I love it, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Barry, thank you for sharing!



May love nand light always shine upon you!

Love
Noah Eaton

"Underneath your clothes there's an endless story..."

Shakira

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6 posted 2002-08-11 02:04 PM


Barry, an eternal love, and portrayed as only you can. When I read this I know it comes from deep within your heart. Wonderful writing.

In truth, what defines us is our poetry.

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7 posted 2002-08-11 02:21 PM


Barry - thanks for the ride with this Knight - thoroughly enjoyed this - well written - wonderfully said - great poem - Paul
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8 posted 2002-08-11 03:48 PM


Magnus,
This is a very good write. You just keep geting better and better.

Bill Charles
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9 posted 2002-08-11 07:02 PM


Barry - like these ones of the knights...

BC

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