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serenity blaze
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0 posted 2002-08-10 05:00 AM


Tell me there's a man alive
who perceives the delicate
intricate
in map of crack--
a journey's egg
of hard-boiled life

understanding
birth in shout...
knowing there is life
within
a shell--a tiny vein
of lark--
a freedom
mapped within fine line--

tell me there's a man alive
who could take the birth of me--

tell me there is life--
outside...

"tell me."

I'll kick me alive.

*     *     *
*smile? I just HAD to captilize the "I"....I wanted the empowerment, yanno? okay...I'll STOP NOW. not-bloody-likely...*



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Sunshine
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1 posted 2002-08-10 06:32 AM



And not bloody likely that they
would ever know...
and therein lies the difference...
but I know...you know!

serenity blaze
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2 posted 2002-08-10 09:41 AM


see what I mean?


*gotta chuckle*

Sunshine
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3 posted 2002-08-10 10:51 AM



yep!

Mark Bohannan
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4 posted 2002-08-10 11:11 AM


Now wait a minute!!  Some of us do know how to cook an egg.......it's the shell thing that confuses us sometimes.  Your look this morning is that of soft boiled instead of hard and it tastes good with my second pot of coffee.
VAS
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5 posted 2002-08-10 11:14 AM


Interesting analogy!

Whether on the shoal or on the shore,
I'll seek the lighthouse evermore.

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6 posted 2002-08-10 12:47 PM


I think there is no man who could understand any of us.
Sandra

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7 posted 2002-08-10 12:57 PM




(big hugggsssssss) Oh Karen, this is wonderful, sweet friend, I too am not sure there is yet in words such as these you always make these thoughts and possibilities come true! (sigh) This is excellent, sweet friend, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Karen, thank you for sharing!



May love and light always shine upon you!

Love,
Noah Eaton

"Underneath your clothes there's an endless story..."

Shakira

Madame Chipmunk
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8 posted 2002-08-10 01:04 PM


A beautiful poem, Karen.....
But...
I am sorry to crack your pristine shell here...
I have a husband who understands...
He definitely understands that map and he can read it perfectly no matter how many cracks it may have...
but...
He is mine!  all mine!
sorry to be so selfish........
I absolutely loved your poem...its very special.
~ hugs from hard boiled chipmunk

Lyra

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"poetry is life distilled"  Gwendolyn Brooks

WhileIWasGone
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9 posted 2002-08-10 03:49 PM


serenity ...I love this. And I understand what you mean...

DeaDiAmore

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10 posted 2002-08-10 03:58 PM


well,
I am just StupidGuy
and I'm sure my wife would share a knowing look with you
but,
I know a beautiful bird when I see one
sunny side up, you
scrambledBS

I never aimed at reality; I aimed at truth. --Orson Welles

WhiteRose
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11 posted 2002-08-10 04:00 PM


Boy could I get myself in trouble with this one. Men! That's all I'm saying. I delighted in the poem. It's enigmatically cute.

In truth, what defines us is our poetry.

Enchantress
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12 posted 2002-08-10 04:05 PM


YOU said it ever so well serene one!
Men don't know!
~Hugs~

Seymour Tabin
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13 posted 2002-08-10 04:14 PM


serenity,
He is born of fantasy and the William Tell of wile.

serenity blaze
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14 posted 2002-08-10 04:20 PM


funny thing......there's this pain in me tummy...it seems to happen every 24 hours...

HEY! um...can anybody here crack an egg?


(gawd but I love you people...)

Honeybee
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15 posted 2002-08-10 09:27 PM


"Tell me there's a man alive
who perceives the delicate
intricate
in map of crack--
a journey's egg
of hard-boiled life"
__________________________

Girl, you can work any metaphor and make it your own...and even then, I relate.  I believe it's Janet Marie who says 'mirrors baby' well I'm copying her line   This is cool in it's scream for understanding and introspection.  This is yet another keeper!

Take care,
Melissa~

"Poetry is not an opinion expressed...
it is a song that rises from a bleeding
wound...or a smiling mouth"

~Kahlil Gibran~

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16 posted 2002-08-10 09:53 PM


Well, if you're cracked enough to come out of your shell, I'll have you for breakfast...are you fit to be fried?
serenity blaze
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17 posted 2002-08-10 10:49 PM


sigh...yearning to be peeled....

hugs all.

Thank you.

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