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I Estrogen

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Martie
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       I Estrogen

I remember when I first saw you
curving around like your mother with vermilion,
then writing on small pieces of paper with pencil.
I took your hand and traced a thought that you hid
in the dry shingles outside our bedroom window.

You were my history and my beginning
and I was a road you would take,

hot,

under the trees to seek shade from my hold,
and even there I made your fantasy
with lipstick and tweezers
and the sweet smell of dirt.

Naked you were a circle within a circle,
because I was your instrument of energy and life
playing something about beloved
and I taught you the words
although you couldn’t say them outloud.

Ask me how I know so much,  I said into your dream
where you road horses
and wept for loss of blood.

I am your woman…I whispered back, knowing the untruth
but saying it anyway.

When you moaned I mentioned I’d only be with you for a while
and made a path within your heart that said hurry,
hurry,  for the time you know…it ticks.

You hurried for me like a perfect host
and pre-teened into a blossom of beguile.

I know I didn’t tell you or help you along with this,
for you see I enjoy the effect I have on play.

I bore your children with you, felt the milk drop,
listened endlessly
for a change in voice…the nuance that tells what’s under
the thought of the men you loved.
I was your eyes that saw all directions of your children.

And now you curse me with your moody down.  
Be thankful I was there, as I am for you, the teacher of this
small place where I gathered..

I miss holding the sweet tenacity that let me see your soul,
and how you loved within your heart…not your heat,

and now

when I see you dancing with bare feet, I wonder
if you ever needed me at all.

[This message has been edited by Martie (08-08-2002 08:59 PM).]

© Copyright 2002 Martie Odell-Ingebretsen - All Rights Reserved
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1 posted 08-08-2002 09:06 PM       View Profile for serenity blaze   Email serenity blaze   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for serenity blaze

omigod/dess?

smile.

Oh yes.

OH YES.

(yes, people, that's sorta how I sound...)

But Martie? Don't you just LOVE being a woman? It's true, we are in sync with the moon and the tides, and something for more pulsates so hard within us, it resonates...

This is sooooooooo... beautiful.

(chuckling, you almost made me appreciate my period...) and hey? THAT MAKES YOU AN ARTIST.



hugs you, and of course you produce works of art--YOU ARE ART.

*damnilovethispoem*
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2 posted 08-08-2002 09:07 PM       View Profile for Mistletoe Angel   Email Mistletoe Angel   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Mistletoe Angel's Home Page   View IP for Mistletoe Angel

"I miss holding the sweet tenacity that let me see your soul,
and how you loved within your heart…not your heat,

and now

when I see you dancing with bare feet, I wonder
if you ever needed me at all."




(sigh) Awwwwww, I hope this is just a fictional feeling to your own heart, sweet friend, this is sadly beautiful and I wish for your love to always be there to dance with you in destinys same rhythm! (kiss on cheek) This is absolutely spellbinding, sweet friend, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Martie, thank you for sharing!



May love and light always shine upon you!

Love,
Noah Eaton

"Underneath your clothes there's an endless story..."

Shakira

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Way too many things that hit from so many angles of womanhood..sisterhood..motherhood..goodness lady you are awesome in all..

Poetic prescription of feminine transition and truth..

Wow..

Sincerely,
Reg
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How cool is this?  Not cool enough for the hot that it is...so dang good, girl, that not only is it a but it's something that should be handed out in all the schools when they teach all the stuff that moms don't take time to teach...

one of your best, ever!
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5 posted 08-08-2002 09:42 PM       View Profile for Marge Tindal   Email Marge Tindal   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Marge Tindal's Home Page   View IP for Marge Tindal

DearestSister~
You know that I know the inner beauty of this one~
You are WOMAN - WIFE - MOTHER - POETESS ...
and one of the most complete women I'll ever have the pleasure of calling sister~

I love you~
*Hugs*
~*Marge*~

~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~
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Oh Martie!
This made me feel so good
to be a woman...
I can't even put into words
what I am feeling at this moment.
Just so many emotions.
THIS has got to be your best write yet.
And it truly is a keeper...
~Estrogen Hugs to You Sweet Poetess~
Kit McCallum
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I was truly moved by this piece Martie, in more ways than I can express, so I will just say ... thank you, for the depth of thoughts you have captured here.

Best wishes and hugs,
/Kit
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Martie,

what a wonderfully original poem and so lovingly told - I'm sure that I will miss mine too, but I won't miss this damned PMS!

This poem made me smile.

Cor
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Standing ovation! (or ovulation)

What a wonderful mind in such a beautiful form.  Absolutely amazing write. ThisDiamond
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estrogen..that is the stuff they put in the gas in california right...ok, now I get it...(babe, you are something else...amazing for sure, enjoyed this much)
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Martie - how wonderfully you write!  this is so good and gives such insights - WOW what a powerful statement of feminity!  Loved it - Paul
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Wow....needless to say,  this is a girl's
thing here....something us guys are not
really too hep on...but....I caught on,
took me a little while...and you know what..

I do believe that somewhere inside that
complete woman is a little girl that is
having a ball....
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Oh yes, Martie....or shall I call you Madame Ovary...
This was a wonderful write...
and I do miss my period, believe it or not...
It just used to keep reminding me that I was a woman, but I have now come to terms with the missing because I still have the memories and some of them are a bit less than pleaseant.....and PMS!!!!!! Whats that?
I never had any of that stuff! LOL *wink*

all in all...this is a totally beautiful and highly metaphoric piece...and I can still tell that you love being a woman...as do I.
~ hugs from a female chipmunk

Lyra

copyright2002 Lyra Nesius

"poetry is life distilled"  Gwendolyn Brooks

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Can't say anything that's not been said, I'll just sit here gaping with my eyes popped out of my head.

Whether on the shoal or on the shore,
I'll seek the lighthouse evermore.

[This message has been edited by VAS (08-09-2002 03:35 PM).]

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You were my history and my beginning
and I was a road you would take,

=================================
Naked you were a circle within a circle,
because I was your instrument of energy and life
playing something about beloved
and I taught you the words
although you couldn't say them outloud.

Ask me how I know so much,  I said into your dream
where you road horses
and wept for loss of blood.

I am your woman I whispered back, knowing the untruth
but saying it anyway.

===========================

I miss holding the sweet tenacity that let me see your soul,
and how you loved within your heart not your heat,

and now

when I see you dancing with bare feet, I wonder
if you ever needed me at all.

=========================================

YES she is a GODDESS... a Poetry Goddess ...

This is one of the coolest and most original poems a woman could ever read...What a gift this moment of inspire was...how rare is this kind of poetic union with muse and poet. Did ya get the tingles when you were writing this...did ya know when ya finished it that it was one of those poetic justice moments? Yeah...I bet ya felt the tingles..gawwwd I love the tingles
This needs to be sent to Woman's magazines..it needs to hang in GY-OB offices...it needs to be shared with girlfriends...Im sending it to several now.
Kiss your "moody" muse for this one...its very special.

If all the tear drops went to heaven
And if all the pain was confined ...
Would I be your salvation
could I make your spirit shine.

KWSB

Mark Bohannan
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Careful...Your ponytails are showing and they look mighty cute on ya.  Okay, I know that I said it was a timing thing for this one then I read another one and then said.......hey she already knew so then I thought~"self, does she need a playground built or no"  The answer of course is no as the world is your playground and the gate to it lies in your "beware eyes".  Loved the inside look from the outside but I am thinkin' that I am glad to be a man right about now.  
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17 posted 08-10-2002 11:23 AM       View Profile for serenity blaze   Email serenity blaze   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for serenity blaze

"one of those poetic justice moments"

yeah.

grin.
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Awesome Martie. Beautifully descriptive.
Sandra
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WOW Martie....this is brilliant. I can't believe I missed this... I just can't.

going into my library it is.

M

Beauty of the world which is soon to perish has two edges, one of laughter and one of anguish, cutting the heart asunder.
(by Virginia Woolf)

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