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Soleil Noir
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since 2001-12-19
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0 posted 2002-08-08 04:48 PM



To Sir, with Affection

true honesty...

is an answer to the question
when you asked, what it was
I would need…

to see in one man
the look that
he has found everything
in me...

knowing it goes beyond trust...

you asked,
what would faze me

that would be
to see
in one man
that he could live with,
or without me,
but that he chose me
above all others

that he would know enough
to treasure every day
for the gifts that they are...

together...

that he would want
as much as I…
to impart no less
than total acceptance…
no matter what mistakes
might occur...

you asked, what could I go without…

harsh words...

what I couldn’t do without,

being mindful of sensitivities

and here you are,
asking questions of my mind,
now that
you have made me tear up
in thinking
about what it would take to
make me
glaze over....
and you have made my chest
pull in tight,
knowing what I am lacking now...


it goes beyond, and
encompasses fully
all those thoughts
you think you have

places them in proper shadows
where there is never fear...

but total love...

that sir, would be the beginning of the glazing...

and you, Sir,
you are the first man
ever to ask
in such a way

that I have found within me
what it means to go
beyond the lines...

because this feeling that must be met...
would take me to the sheets,
willingly...

and right now...
I feel very, very empty...
but so very pleased, and honored,
that you cared enough
to ask...

and to tell you,
you have affected me
with your affection

© Copyright 2002 Soleil Noir - All Rights Reserved
Kethry
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Victoria Australia
1 posted 2002-08-08 04:55 PM


Loved the last bit, It rounded off a perfect piece.
Kethry

Here in the midst of my lonely abyss, a single joy I find...your presence in my mind.  Unknown



Dark Stranger
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since 2001-03-19
Posts 13631
West Coast
2 posted 2002-08-08 05:06 PM


ms noir, this is a lovely view
can hear the soundtrack
to sir with love
playing in the background

lovely work ms

Magnus
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3 posted 2002-08-08 05:08 PM


In the art of chivalry and the day of
noble knights....there stood a man, tall,
of great honor and truth.  Within this
man,  a heart...large as the kingdom itself,
beat silently within a chest covered in
silver mail,  the mantle worn gallantly.

Desiring only that he be given but the chance to say,   I care....

I would hope that such a man exists for
this lady of the realm....

Martie
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4 posted 2002-08-08 05:50 PM


Soleil

It only takes one word, to change the way a heart feels; one deed to change the world.

Bill Charles
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highways, & byways, for now
5 posted 2002-08-08 07:15 PM


Soleil Noir - touching your words of what's in your heart. Lovely they are, with honesty... I commend you...

BC

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6 posted 2002-08-08 07:48 PM


What Magnus said...
plus I am speecheless...
for every woman
who wants and needs and deserves
to feel cherished.
~Hugs~

Mistletoe Angel
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7 posted 2002-08-08 08:21 PM


"and right now...
I feel very, very empty...
but so very pleased, and honored,
that you cared enough
to ask...

and to tell you,
you have affected me
with your affection"




(smiles) Oh Soleil, this is sooooooo beautiful, I believe for a woman to feel special is the feeling every woman deserves to feel who is special herself! (sigh) This is breathtaking, sweet friend, I love it, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Soleil, thank you for sharing!



May love and light always shine upon you!

Love,
Noah Eaton


"Underneath your clothes there's an endless story..."

Shakira

Bridget Shenachie
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since 2002-01-23
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Kansas USA
8 posted 2002-08-08 08:31 PM


Dear Soleil Noir,

This is a beautiful verse and I wish you the more true affection and sensitivity and an end of harsh words.

Shenachie

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9 posted 2002-08-09 11:36 AM


Sounds like your needs are the expectations of anyone truly loved and in love

Fool, said my Muse to me, look in thy heart and write.

Sven
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10 posted 2002-08-09 04:47 PM


more and more I'm finding that your voice is coming from a place that's new. . .

excellent work. . .

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To the world, you may only be one person. But to one person, you may be the world.

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