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MIdsummerRain
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0 posted 2002-08-08 04:55 AM


Broken

Make Me Lose my Will
Come on, Make Me Burn
Beg for Me to come Undone
Make Me Stay for You in Return

Ahhhh make it Ecstacy
She'll be Merely Envoius, Love
Come, just Dance for Me Once
Bring Me Rapture to Write of

Save My Foolish Reflections
Beneath your Wanderings
Succumb to Me, Love
& I'll Hide Beneath your Wings

I'll not Bleed for You ,Love
Tho, I'll Plead for You to Her
Must I Jest with You, Love
This is Not what I'd Prefer

So, then make your Choice
I Wish to Wait for No One
All of This will Finish Me
For It seems with Her, Im Outdone




One day Men will look back & say
that I gave birth to the 20th Century
            
             Jack the Ripper ~1888

© Copyright 2002 Rayne Leigh - All Rights Reserved
Kethry
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1 posted 2002-08-08 09:59 AM


very intense poem,
Kethry

Here in the midst of my lonely abyss, a single joy I find...your presence in my mind.  Unknown



Sunshine
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2 posted 2002-08-08 12:00 PM



The way you have laid this out
in format
makes every line a title
of its own making...

well done!

Mistletoe Angel
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3 posted 2002-08-08 01:45 PM




(big hugggssssss) Awwwww, I hope these thoughts are fictional to your own heart, sweet friend, this is sadly beautiful, yay, I agree too that every line can be its own title, I love it, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiufl heart, sweet Rayne thank you for sharing!



May love and light always shine upon you!

Love,
Noah Eaton

"Underneath your clothes there's an endless story..."

Shakira

MIdsummerRain
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St. Louis, Missouri
4 posted 2002-08-09 02:15 AM




Kethry ~ Thank you for you words of Compassion, my friend

Sunshine ~ Your words Humble me

MistletoeAngel Inspiring as always Sweet Noah


~Rayne


One day Men will look back & say
that I gave birth to the 20th Century
            
             Jack the Ripper ~1888

[This message has been edited by MIdsummerRain (08-09-2002 02:17 AM).]

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