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Deep entry (Sven's 'E' challenge, part B)
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Deep entry (Sven's 'E' challenge, part B) |
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bsquirrel
since 2000-01-03
Posts 7855
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Sven's E challenge, part B (still working on part A). To use the letter e in every word of the poem. Deep entry The sea races me before evening's purple blaze. The sea traces me between stirred pines' simple shade. The sea faces me, empty countenance unmade. The sea erases me. Dream extinguished. Swell-stilled jade. "Oh you've got green eyes. Oh you've got blue eyes. Oh you've got grey eyes." -New Order [This message has been edited by bsquirrel (08-07-2002 05:18 PM).] |
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WhiteRose Member Elite
since 2002-07-23
Posts 3208somebody's dungeon |
Deeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeelightful. There are a million messages, |
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WhileIWasGone Member
since 2002-07-18
Posts 486 |
Beautiful work... DeaDiAmore |
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bsquirrel
since 2000-01-03
Posts 7855 |
 Thanks to both of you."Oh you've got green eyes. Oh you've got blue eyes. Oh you've got grey eyes." -New Order |
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Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. |
BEautifully pEnnEd! EnjoyEd EvEry E! ~SmilEs, NancylEE/EnchantrEss~ |
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Mistletoe Angel
since 2000-12-17
Posts 32816Portland, Oregon |
 Yay!!! Wow, I love this, sweet friend, this is wonderful, this surely is a treeeeeeeeeat, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Michael, thank you for sharing!  May love and light always shine upon you! Love, Noah Eaton "Underneath your clothes there's an endless story..." |
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Anvrill Senior Member
since 2002-06-21
Posts 710in the interzone now |
How're you gonna stand to live away from the ocean, baby??? It's in all yr poems... *pout* Is this what you wanted me to be? |
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wranx Member Elite
since 2002-06-07
Posts 3689Moved from a shack to a barn |
I like it squirrel, your mind is alive. ~wranx The shortest distance between two points... |
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Krishankins
since 2002-06-23
Posts 972Texas |
I think you have written about my ex! Nice piece Mike! |
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mycafe Senior Member
since 2002-05-23
Posts 584 |
Excellent! Mike! mycafe Keep counting your blessings |
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Goodknight Member Elite
since 2002-06-15
Posts 2386Ohio, USA |
excelent - weeeeeeell done Mike - great poem and clever too - Paul |
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bsquirrel
since 2000-01-03
Posts 7855 |
Everyone -- extended especial .... phew, I can't go on with this "e" in everything thing. Glad you all enjoyed. And Lori, for someone who writes a lot about the sea, I almost never visit it. (I don't need to -- it's inside )Mike Oh you've got green eyes. |
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Jason Member
since 2002-07-31
Posts 72Macon, GA |
Mike, Hey there fella, excellent entry for the all E endeavor. Jason |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Excelling withe examples, aren't we?  |
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bsquirrel
since 2000-01-03
Posts 7855 |
Thank you, Jason and Sunshine. |
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Madame Chipmunk Member Rara Avis
since 2001-12-05
Posts 8296Michigan |
Mr.Squirrel... I think this poem is an excellent example it was really greeeeeeeat!  ~ especially neat rodent hugsLyra |
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bsquirrel
since 2000-01-03
Posts 7855 |
Thanks, Lyra. It's true testament to the fact that I need more work to do at work. Heh heh. |
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Sven
since 1999-11-23
Posts 14937East Lansing, MI USA |
every line excels Mikey. . . you've really taken the challenge well. . . ------------------------------------------------------ To the world, you may only be one person. But to one person, you may be the world. |
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bsquirrel
since 2000-01-03
Posts 7855 |
Yes, except here problems brew . I can't do it for extended periods in replies. Glad you enjoyed, Sven. |
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