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Slow Thoughts |
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Soleil Noir Senior Member
since 2001-12-19
Posts 688USA |
Slow Thoughts  In slow mo it glazed the glass Escargot in spree I watched it on that rainy day Thought of it, and me. How fragile is its brownish shell Yet hide in it, it will How fragile is a shell at all That holds its tears from spill In its ever searching way It leaves a glistening trail And in wondering, I ask of it If it looks for its own grail Or does it have any thoughts at all As it carries its fragile shell No strife in life, no, none at all Less left a salty hell So let the raindrops be alone in fall No tears you’ll find from me For mine are salty on my lips, They’d harm your destiny Travel on, my escargot Under protective gaze And I shall tend to my own shell And write of you my praise. |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Soleil Noir Excellent write, a keeper. |
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Alicia Member
since 2002-03-22
Posts 279 |
~Very nice. A pleasure to have read. Think the first stanza is superb, love that, spreeing escargot. All of it, enjoyable. *Peace. |
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Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. |
Soleil, Beautiful poem and pic. Many many thoughts here....lots for one to ponder. Enjoyed ever so much! ~Hugs~ ~Somewhere in my heart I'm always |
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vandana
since 1999-10-22
Posts 10463USA |
enjoyed  |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Soleil To fine such pieces of self and truth of life in the little things, is a blessing. Thank you for sharing it. |
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Sven
since 1999-11-23
Posts 14937East Lansing, MI USA |
to find thoughts wherever they might be. . . excellent work. . . ------------------------------------------------------- To the world, you may only be one person. But to one person, you may be the world. |
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Nan
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-20
Posts 21191Cape Cod Massachusetts USA |
Ahhhh... Enjoyed this - at a snail's pace, though..  |
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bsquirrel
since 2000-01-03
Posts 7855 |
As long as the grail it's searching for isn't the garden, I'l be fine. I like yr words. Mike "Oh you've got green eyes. Oh you've got blue eyes. Oh you've got grey eyes." -New Order |
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Mark Bohannan Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-21
Posts 7269In the winds of Cherokee song |
Somehow I don't think I will ever look at a snail in the same light again. This was not only a beautifully composed piece but the thoughts and perspecitive as given over to life are amazing. Then there are these lines....... No tears you’ll find from me For mine are salty on my lips, They’d harm your destiny ..................... Now that is total awareness caught in the simplest but most complex realizations. Truely a remarkable piece. Loved it truely. |
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Mistletoe Angel
since 2000-12-17
Posts 32816Portland, Oregon |
 (smiles) Oh Soleil, this is soooooo beautiful, sweet friend, I love the metaphoric feel of this like you now travel seperate paths but in your shell you always think of the memories! (sigh) This is touching, sweet friend, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Soleil, thank you for sharing!  May love and light always shine upon you! Love, Noah Eaton "Underneath your clothes there's an endless story..." |
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mycafe Senior Member
since 2002-05-23
Posts 584 |
Very very IMPRESSIVE!!! mycafe Keep counting your blessings |
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Goodknight Member Elite
since 2002-06-15
Posts 2386Ohio, USA |
a very well written poem - lots to ponder - liked it - Paul |
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Madame Chipmunk Member Rara Avis
since 2001-12-05
Posts 8296Michigan |
Imagine that, Soliel... an ode to a lowly snail!!!! So very beautifully done.  ~ hugs from a lowly woodland rodentLyra |
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ecrivan Member Elite
since 2001-12-10
Posts 3923my own state |
enjoyed the image of this slow creature put to words..bravo Soleil, |
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Dark Stranger Member Patricius
since 2001-03-19
Posts 13631West Coast |
MS Noir, time strums the moments inside a bottle with the seal unbroken and we are outside sometimes holding the glass so carefully enjoyed this |
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Interloper
since 2000-11-06
Posts 8369Deep in the heart |
You captured the essence of the "original" mobile home Fool, said my Muse to me, look in thy heart and write. |
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Kethry Member Rara Avis
since 2000-07-29
Posts 9082Victoria Australia |
Soleil Noir, how soft and slow is the essence of this poem. Kethry Here in the midst of my lonely abyss, a single joy I find...your presence in my mind. Unknown |
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