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Claim and Flame
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Claim and Flame |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla 
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Claim and Flame Caressed by the velvet of love Flown on wings of a snow white dove Placed a garden of daffodils By the common of youthful frills Set an altars periphery Put horizons Eternity Forever’s pillow under their head While fantasy kindles the spread And bells sing with a golden chime The Gods smile on a timeless time. The winds are soft the sands are warm This moment, a lifetime of norm A firefly and endless think A spark of light an endless wink A king and queen upon a throne Another world and all alone The Pentecost of a claim The holocaust of a flame |
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Sudhir Iyer Member Ascendant
since 2000-04-26
Posts 6943Mumbai, India : now in Belgium |
foreverly impressed by your word power, and grasp of the language... and of course great poetry... Regards, sudhir |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
You are magickal...I wish I could hire you to script my dreams! sigh, sy...and? g'mornin'!  |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Sudhir, And I am impressed by your writing, my friend. Serenity, You are a delight to write for and a delight to read, poet.  |
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HopeS Member Elite
since 2000-12-22
Posts 4596Perth Western Australia |
seymour your words are like magical charms glowing pleasures, forever written treasures Hope |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
HopeS, From one treasure to another, thank you. |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
Set an altars periphery Put horizons Eternity Forever's pillow under their head While fantasy kindles the spread And bells sing with a golden chime The Gods smile on a timeless time. The winds are soft the sands are warm This moment, a lifetime of norm A firefly and endless think A spark of light an endless wink A king and queen upon a throne Another world and all alone The Pentecost of a claim The holocaust of a flame ==================================== You KNOW you had ME from the title!!! How am I supposed to pick fave lines in this when each one is so poetically smooth and each one is a companion with the other to form these couplet of rhyme divine and phrases of praises. COUPLETS OF WAAAAAAY COOL How you master personification and imagery is only matched by your vocabulary and sense of internal rhymes: Set an altars periphery Put horizons Eternity Forever's pillow under their head While fantasy kindles the spread the idea behind Forever's Pillow is so clever all I can do is smile at you and as for the whole intend of that closing summation couplet.... The Pentecost of a claim The holocaust of a flame Those two lines encompass more poetically and philosophically than my small moth mind will ever fully comprehend...but then thats what I have you for. *L* and as for these lines.... A firefly and endless think A spark of light an endless wink Yeah...endless *winkiewinkies* works for me      |
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Gentle Spirit Member Patricius
since 2000-10-09
Posts 13989 |
Sy again your words have left me speechless. Do you know just how cool this write is. Perfect my friend!! Enjoy life, this is NOT a dress rehearsal. |
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Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. |
Wonderful morning read Sy! Love your work...just love it!! ~Morning hugs~ ~Somewhere in my heart I'm always |
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Interloper
since 2000-11-06
Posts 8369Deep in the heart |
I loved it, Sy. Well done, indeed |
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WhiteRose Member Elite
since 2002-07-23
Posts 3208somebody's dungeon |
When I read your work, I find I am without the proper words to describe the way they make me feel. You have mastered the art of poetry in a way I wish I was capable of. Truly each one is a delight. Love Seduces Joy From The Heart |
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Sunshine
Administrator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Shucks. Everyone said what I feel... so you'll just accept  yes? |
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Kethry Member Rara Avis
since 2000-07-29
Posts 9082Victoria Australia |
The chimes of your words ring out in my head long after the page is gone and the word is dead. Keth Here in the midst of my lonely abyss, a single joy I find...your presence in my mind. Unknown |
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Dark Stranger Member Patricius
since 2001-03-19
Posts 13631West Coast |
sir wordsmith, you are an artist here and I am face down in cellophane breathing the softcore of your art. |
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Kit McCallum
Administrator
Member Laureate
since 2000-04-30
Posts 14774Ontario, Canada |
"A king and queen upon a throne Another world and all alone" Beautiful phrasing throughout Sy ... (I'm with JM ... it's hard to pick a favorite couplet, but I forced myself, lol) Very much enjoyed! Best wishes and hugs, /Kit |
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Madame Chipmunk Member Rara Avis
since 2001-12-05
Posts 8296Michigan |
And bells sing with a golden chime The Gods smile on a timeless time. The winds are soft the sands are warm This moment, a lifetime of norm This sounds so wonderful, Sy... For some reason, it reminds me of a long soak in a warm tub.  ~ hugs from a garden pestLyra |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
JM, You picked a bouquet of symboled flora and made a lovely aura. That is the magic of your mothy quick. WWRS Gentle Spirit, You are truly a gentle spirit. Enchantress, Good morning dear. Interloper, Thank you friend. WhiteRose, You do well enough, thank you. Sunshine, Love you too. Keth, Could any comment be nicer. Dark Stranger, Flattery has wings. Kit, You are one of my loveliest and prettiest butterflies. |
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Mistletoe Angel 
since 2000-12-17
Posts 32816Portland, Oregon |
(big hugggsssssss) Wow, I love this, sweet friend, I too felt all the flame reading this, thisn is powerfully and poetically intense, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Seymour, thank you for sharing! May love and light always shine upon you! Love, Noah Eaton "Underneath your clothes there's an endless story..." |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Noah, Thank you and glad you felt the flame. |
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suthern
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana |
This is a treat to read, Seymour... and sits softly on my heart, leaving it smiling. *S* |
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VAS Member Rara Avis
since 2000-11-16
Posts 7450Oregon |
You do this form so well, what's it called? Whether on the shoal or on the shore, |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Suthern, Your enjoy is my pleasure. VAS, A sonnet sweet thing. |
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