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0 posted 2002-08-04 11:18 AM


All through the night
I moved with wizzing lights,
Just trying to keep on moving,
With the world that night,

And when I stopped it carried on,
Lights whizzed along all but one,
I found myself so still in time,
While I did the world still carried on,

And as I complated night turned to day,
Day turned to night, I lost my way,
When time stopped in me I froze still,
Until I moved on from this day.

If your afraid of the dark, then why did you come?

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1 posted 2002-08-04 11:22 AM



Maria, I had the sensation of being
in a star shower while reading this piece...
very lovely...

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2 posted 2002-08-04 11:33 AM


Cool didnt imagine it that way but cool thanks

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3 posted 2002-08-04 11:37 AM


Sounds like the hustle bustle routine of a very busy city at night to me.  All the lights wizzing by in fast forward when all we are searching for is a moment of peace.

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When time stopped in me I froze still,
Until I moved on from this day.

Sometimes all we can do is await the dawn of a new day.  I hope I didn't miss completely on this one but if I did then at least you gave me some very vivid visuals in my screwed up mind. LOL  Either way........I enjoyed it much.  

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4 posted 2002-08-04 11:42 AM


No you read it right Mark thanks for reading

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5 posted 2002-08-04 12:00 PM


Moon Dust - it's funny how time flys away to quickly. Doesn't seem like it at times, but it does...

BC

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6 posted 2002-08-04 12:03 PM


Yeah I know or how slowly it passes too thanks for replying

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7 posted 2002-08-04 12:09 PM


We can be a part of life or we can watch it pass us by... Nicely done, Maria..
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8 posted 2002-08-04 12:15 PM


Moon Dust
Good thoughts, good write, good read.

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9 posted 2002-08-04 12:19 PM


Nan - but sometimes I like watching

Sy - Thank you 4 reading

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10 posted 2002-08-04 01:54 PM




(smiles) Oooohhhhh...I love this, sweet friend, this made e feel like I was in a Matrix scene going fast-forward! LOL! Kind of an interesting way to look it, but I truly love the feel of this, sweet friend, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet friend, thank you for sharing!



May love and light always shine upon you!

Love,
Noah Eaton

"Underneath your clothes there's an endless story..."

Shakira

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11 posted 2002-08-04 05:53 PM


Oh i so love that film

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