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Dark Stranger
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0 posted 2002-08-02 06:02 AM


where walks the solo sung utterance
of concurrence in unison of coincidences
two or three legged on galloped wheels
down the uphill side of progression's drift
without keel side familiar to sea tide lifting

bring it salty sanded to harmonize consonance
unfreezed, unthawed, melting danced perhaps
with panting gasps of respire effed at glancing stance
billow puffed with whoop bang pensive
and do we jazz our songs with indifference

wistful wasteful rumination in gimcrack pants
we water the lawns of our cheeks by hand
and talk to winds of dry unconsciousness
simitranced we garble the god of word in chant
we bucket our solace from the well of repentence

and our indicisions are on callused cleavage spent.


©Dark

[This message has been edited by Dark Stranger (08-02-2002 09:01 AM).]

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Toerag
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Ala bam a
1 posted 2002-08-02 08:15 AM


I had to read this a couple of times but once I figured ya out...I liked it strange one...
Dark Stranger
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2 posted 2002-08-02 08:19 AM


humble thanks toz'...just saying that not doing stuff..and spending lot of time thinking about it is usless as ....well anyway
Enchantress
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Canada eh.
3 posted 2002-08-02 09:01 AM


Tanfastic stuff here Dark!
Superb writer you are!!
For sure..
~slow morning hugs~

~Somewhere in my heart I'm always
dancing with you in the summer rain~

Dark Stranger
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4 posted 2002-08-02 09:04 AM


enchantress..thanks lil lady, damn prozac and viagra are acting up again...guess I should stop them for a bit especially if I am gonna smoke that darn hemp after the jack dan runs out....
Sunshine
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Listening to every heart
5 posted 2002-08-02 09:41 AM



Get thee back
to the heart pound sounds
and hammer metal moon
till it shines...

Seymour Tabin
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Tamarac Fla
6 posted 2002-08-02 09:53 AM


Dark Stranger
An amalgamation of fragile, enjoyed.

Martie
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7 posted 2002-08-02 10:01 AM


DS

Your words are a work of art to read,
spoken, a song.


Janet Marie
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8 posted 2002-08-02 10:31 AM


where walks the solo sung utterance
of concurrence in unison of coincidences
two or three legged on galloped wheels
down the uphill side of progression's drift
without keel side familiar to sea tide lifting

bring it salty sanded to harmonize consonance
unfreezed, unthawed, melting danced perhaps
with panting gasps of respire effed at glancing stance
billow puffed with whoop bang pensive
and do we jazz our songs with indifference
==============================

DOING MOTH HAPPY DANCE ... WOO HOO...
Look at you playing with your poetry.
Look at the RHYME...the alliterations, the assonance..the word play...the vocab, phrasing and verbiage...look at the
WHOOP BANG  LOL
WAAAAY COOL DS ... love this side of your poetry...me thinks ya gots lots of hidden talents

Tell me we belong together
Dress it up with the trappings of love
Ill be captivated, Ill hang from your lips
Instead of the heartache from above

Dark Stranger
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9 posted 2002-08-02 10:32 AM


sunshine, thanks to you lady....hey, just being a nerd here..k?  coffee or tea today?  good morning to ya ms.

sy, thanks for the read and reply guy, you always are a gent.


martie, slow hugs in bubble wrap shirts to you lil neighbor.  Thanks so much.


janet marie...thanks to you lil lady, waz fun to dink with dem tunez a bit.  I appreciate your appraisal with sinseared oglegoggles. (grin)

[This message has been edited by Dark Stranger (08-02-2002 10:37 AM).]

devina
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Cali
10 posted 2002-08-02 11:11 AM


This is an ode to excellence DS!!!

"we water the lawns of our cheeks by hand"

you can take so simple a thing and make it beautiful...

enjoyed this!!!

Open arms can be the most fragile in the world...



Dark Stranger
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11 posted 2002-08-02 11:24 AM


devina, big old grabby handfuls of hugs to you ms, you are sweetcakes in syrup.
rwood
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12 posted 2002-08-02 03:44 PM


Hmmmm...and I thought you were a Yes man..I guess we all question things before we leap or do we? Anyways..you better catch good!giggle~

Sincerely,
Reg

Dark Stranger
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13 posted 2002-08-02 04:59 PM


Regina
jump babe, got my catcher's face on wearin a smile.  thanks to you ms fine

Mistletoe Angel
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14 posted 2002-08-02 08:21 PM




(smiles) And this is truly an ode to another remarkable classic to be added to your golden library, sweet friend, I love this, you are an inspiration to us all, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet friend, thank you for sharing!



May love and light always shine upon you!

Love,
Noah Eaton

"Underneath your clothes there's an endless story..."

Shakira

Samantha G Kennedy
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Kent England
15 posted 2002-08-03 02:15 AM



bring it salty sanded to harmonize consonance
unfreezed, unthawed, melting danced perhaps
with panting gasps of respire effed at glancing stance
billow puffed with whoop bang pensive
and do we jazz our songs with indifference


(whispering) wow...

great write here!

Sammie

^i^

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