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baerlon
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since 2000-01-14
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Youngstown and East Liverpool, Ohio, USA

0 posted 2002-08-02 04:26 AM


Lonely and angry as I have been
I hoped for the worst for you
Killing my vengeful thoughts
Even after your heartless actions
Why did you do what you did
I have been thinking of ways to get back at you
Shelling idea after idea on a daily bases
Everything I see feeds my head on what to do

I have fought thoughts on a daily basis

Many ideas have crossed my mind
All of which I thought I like to see come to be
Kindness has been the least of my mind
Ever since you started lying about me

My heart, for your sake, does not want to go that route
Your hostile route is for you, not me

Only I can choose
What actions to take
Never again letting you in

(sorry if this doesn't flow right i made the title and experimented with this format. I am not used to writing like this)



There's a peace inside us all
Let it be your friend
It will help you carry on
In the end
There's a peace inside us all
-Creed

[This message has been edited by baerlon (08-02-2002 04:42 AM).]

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passing shadows
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1 posted 2002-08-02 04:32 AM


and you know that I have felt the same way many times, very nicely written, no matter what format this is, I can relate well.
WhiteRose
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since 2002-07-23
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somebody's dungeon
2 posted 2002-08-02 10:49 AM


I too can relate. Very well written.
Janet Marie
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since 2000-01-22
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3 posted 2002-08-02 05:24 PM


My heart, for your sake, does not want to go that route
Your hostile route is for you, not me

Only I can choose
What actions to take
Never again letting you in

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you answered your own questions within the wisdom of your last 5 lines...
this flows just poetically fine Bae...
read it aloud ... its as smooth as it is sincere.
Always good to find your name on the pages of blue.
take care
jm

Tell me we belong together
Dress it up with the trappings of love
Ill be captivated, Ill hang from your lips
Instead of the heartache from above

the_loner_23
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since 2002-06-08
Posts 5479
Jacksonville, Florida, USA
4 posted 2002-08-02 05:27 PM


Wonderfully written

Cold hands means a warm heart

baerlon
Member
since 2000-01-14
Posts 197
Youngstown and East Liverpool, Ohio, USA
5 posted 2002-08-02 10:47 PM


Thank you all for your kind words, it does mean alot.

There's a peace inside us all
Let it be your friend
It will help you carry on
In the end
There's a peace inside us all
-Creed

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