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Dreamer of Dreams
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Dreamer of Dreams |
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CSKpoet Senior Member
since 2002-07-12
Posts 845Island in Paradise 
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re-edited: You have come to me from a distant land, Dreamer of dreams, to fill my hearts desire, Sweet music flowing from your nimble hand That plays within... to light passion's fire. A symphony of word and thought you bring. Excitement builds upon crescendo's sound, Brought forth in poems to make my heart sing For all the beauty that, with you, I've found. A life is changed in just an instant's time, All darkness fled before that brilliant sun That shines from spoken words of softest rhyme And speaks of treasures, only just begun. This mystic meeting gives my heart a glow That few have seen and only you will know. version that needed to be re-done; You have come to me from a distant land, Dreamer of dreams, to fill my hearts desire, Sweet music flowing from your nimble hand That plays within... to light my passion's fire. A symphony of word and thought you bring. Excitement builds upon crescendo's sound, Brought forth in poems to make my light heart sing For all the beauty that, with you, I've found. A life is changed in just an instant's time, All darkness fled before that brilliant sun That shines from spoken words of softest rhyme And speaks of treasures, only just begun. This mystic meeting gives my heart a glow That few have seen and only you will know. Poetry is: Passion, imagination and intellect running together. Aloha with warmest regards, Cheryl Stewart Koomoa [This message has been edited by CSKpoet (08-01-2002 10:38 PM).] |
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the_loner_23 Member Ascendant
since 2002-06-08
Posts 5479Jacksonville, Florida, USA |
I like Cold hands means a warm heart |
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Mistletoe Angel 
since 2000-12-17
Posts 32816Portland, Oregon |
  (smiles) Oh Cheryl, this is beautiful, sweet friend, your gorgeous words always glitter with such romance and hope, may you always dream the sweetest dreams you can ever dream! (kiss on cheek) This is lovely, sweet friend, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Cheryl, thank you for sharing!  May love and light always shine upon you! Love, Noah Eaton "Underneath your clothes there's an endless story..." |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
This, I like! Cher, I'm still learning proper meter...you invite critiques, and I thought I would share that while reading this aloud, I stumbled a little over a couple of lines... However, I note in every third line you have an extra syllable, so it appears as if you mean to have 11 syllables in each third line... am I on track? |
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CSKpoet Senior Member
since 2002-07-12
Posts 845Island in Paradise |
Sunshine: I am still learning as well..thanks for pointing the errors out for me to work on..And I don't think I did this intentionally..This was written long ago and I did not consider these factors before post..I so appreciate your help, kind, friend...Big smiles! Noah: Thanks so much for your encouragmentthat is always uplifting. Poetry is: |
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CSKpoet Senior Member
since 2002-07-12
Posts 845Island in Paradise |
Loner: thanks so much! Poetry is: |
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