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Dark Stranger
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0 posted 2002-07-31 11:08 AM


was it the sticky side of you
that made me envelope willing
to be heartfly stamped with colors
that made new day tattoos a dream
I wanted to sleep with

or the slick side of you
too wet to have edges, but curves
seemed to be on your every corner
and my hands couldn't keep off
the grass of your meadow sounds

you dressed my up in your sighs
like a knight with a rubber sword
then took me under the bubbles
of your special place secrets
and made my armor rusty useless

so I took it off and gave you my skin
and the soft packing material inside
that kept heart parts from making noise
I rattle now when you are away
it must be the empty you leave

or maybe I just have room for more of you

©Dark


(inspired by dragonslayer)



[This message has been edited by Dark Stranger (07-31-2002 11:13 AM).]

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Krishankins
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1 posted 2002-07-31 11:17 AM


This is a very good write! I love the texture it has.

A bird never flies so high that it can't hit the ground

Sunshine
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Listening to every heart
2 posted 2002-07-31 11:21 AM



Hello Silence...
I swear! I am finding ALL the poignant
poems today!
Well done, Sir...

Enchantress
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3 posted 2002-07-31 12:03 PM


so I took it off and gave you my skin
and the soft packing material inside
that kept heart parts from making noise
I rattle now when you are away
it must be the empty you leave

or maybe I just have room for more of you
--------------------------------------------
THIS is a treasure!
And...I'm keeping it
~Hugs~

~Somewhere in my heart I'm always
dancing with you in the summer rain~

Mistletoe Angel
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4 posted 2002-07-31 12:57 PM




(smiles) Yes, there's always room for more, just believe in it with all your heart and all you desire will come true for you and stick to you like adhesive! (big hugggsssss) This is lovely, sweet friend, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet friend, thank you for sharing!



May love and light always shine upon you!

Love,
Noah Eaton

"Underneath your clothes there's an endless story..."

Shakira

Indigo
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Posts 602

5 posted 2002-07-31 02:44 PM


so I took it off and gave you my skin
and the soft packing material inside
that kept heart parts from making noise
I rattle now when you are away
it must be the empty you leave

or maybe I just have room for more of you


How much room does a dragon heart have?  

Indigo

Martie
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6 posted 2002-07-31 02:53 PM


DS

"I rattle now when you are away
it must be the empty you leave

or maybe I just have room for more of you"

Very tenderly sincere.  


rwood
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since 2000-02-29
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7 posted 2002-07-31 07:44 PM


Touche, mon de coeur dragon. Vos mots sont aussi merveilleux que votre esprit.

However..about that rattling thang...~wink*

Sincerely,
Li'l ol' me

Greeneyes
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8 posted 2002-07-31 11:49 PM


I have room for more of you...
Lauren~

The ocean looks like a thousand diamonds strewn across a blue blanket
I lean against the wind pretend I am weightless and in this moment I am happy

passing shadows
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displaced
9 posted 2002-08-01 06:11 AM


maybe more room...wow! Awesome once again.
Dark Stranger
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10 posted 2002-08-01 07:54 AM


krishankins, humble thanks for the review

sunshine, thanks lady friend, have missed our coffee's this week..darn road trips anyway.

enchantress, thanks to you sweet lady, for the review.

noah, thanks my friend

indigo, how big the heart?  how big are dreams?  thanks for the visit babe (glad you are back)

ms martie, thanks lil neighbor...tender is a nice place to visit when we can....big hugs to you hon.

Regina, stop by the store for crackers and sardines???? hmmmm maybe my romantic translator is not working right..(grin)  thanks hon, for the inspire and the slow dance smile.

Lauren, hi green treats...thanks to you babe, big hugs to ya...are you squeezable yet?

passing shadows, thanks to you for the reads and smiles...I ENJOY YOU and your replies

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