This Hour...want a better title

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Open Poetry #21

This Hour...want a better title

VAS
Member Rara Avis

since 2000-11-16

Posts 7450
Oregon

0 posted 2002-07-30 10:20 AM

This Hour

the morning
began in a luxurious cool
that washed over me
as a refreshing shower

yet
at this early hour
the cool has been
scraped away
leaving me longing
for a mint bath
or peppermint shower
beneath the bower
of rose petals raining
their scent
within gentle breezes

and a time
that eases
the pressures of need,
the litany of want,
the languor
of idleness,
the famine
of purpose

wash me
cool me
enliven me
I pray

©July 30, 2002
Whether on the shoal or on the shore,
I'll seek the lighthouse evermore.

nakdthoughts
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since 2000-10-29

Posts 19200
Between the Lines

1 posted 2002-07-30 12:18 PM

how about "Within Gentle Breezes"...
*s
M

Seymour Tabin
Member Empyrean

since 1999-07-07

Posts 31720
Tamarac Fla

2 posted 2002-07-30 12:22 PM

VAS
Interesting write, enjoyed.

Sunnyone
Member Ascendant

since 2000-07-06

Posts 5334
Staffordshire, England

3 posted 2002-07-31 04:24 PM

I think not only is the poem superb in it's style and grace, but the title fits it very well...I enjoyed it, and thank you for putting it here for our pleasure...

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