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Old Lovers Sharing Better Days
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Old Lovers Sharing Better Days |
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ethome Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858New Brunswick Canada 
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One early workday morning when the Owl was flying home and the dawn can make ya wonder I suddenly came to know. You were my special flower in the greenhouse of my soul and beyond some darker hours Once again I'd watch you grow. Chorus: Now everytime I look around I see you growing leaps and bounds and everytime you call my name I hear love in your voice again and when I see you in the evening hours the sun sets on time that's ours old lovers sharing better days. In the drive to work for freedom many long nights I left you alone I couldn't see your heart receeding while I was far away from home but I thought we were so together so I didn't feel your grief and you got lost behind my cover while I was fading from the scene Bridge When the phone lines joined us up the conversation spiraled down and the love that once bound us was starting to shatter all around In my struggle to keep winning I overlooked your worst fears but the need for a new beginning somehow unfolded bold and clear cause we were more than bedroom lovers before my world of needs appeared So on a bridge across disaster I crawled back to you in tears. Chorus: Now everytime I look around I see you growing leaps and bounds and everytime you call my name I hear love in your voice again and when I see you in the evening hours the sun sets on time that's ours old lovers sharing better days. The role of poetry is to utter the un-utterable; to open up |
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Samantha G Kennedy Member
since 2002-07-27
Posts 131Kent England |
You were my special flower in the greenhouse of my soul and beyond some darker hours Once again I'd watch you grow. the flow of your words just flew off the tongue!! i always always! read aloud, and this got me singing along! a great piece! lyrical expression, that stays with the reader long after the page is closed loved it! Sammie ^i^ |
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Alan Senior Member
since 2000-09-12
Posts 1499right next door |
ethome...this is excellent. Enjoyed it. alan |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
ethome A very good write, enjoyed it much. |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
"...the sun sets on time that's ours old lovers sharing better days." You are always penning  s |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Eric The way you hang a story from the heart is amazing....and then you fix it into lyrics so fine that I'm doing back up because I hear the tune. |
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Madame Chipmunk Member Rara Avis
since 2001-12-05
Posts 8296Michigan |
cause we were more than bedroom lovers before my world of needs appeared So on a bridge across disaster I crawled back to you in tears. I love the way you write, Eric... Your imagery is superb.  ~ chipmunk hugsLyra |
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mycafe Senior Member
since 2002-05-23
Posts 584 |
Very very beautiful love song...right from the first stanza! mycafe Keep counting your blessings |
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suthern
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana |
This is so beautiful and heartwarming... I like it very much! *S* |
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catalinamoon
since 2000-06-03
Posts 9543The Shores of Alone |
You are a wonderful songwriter Sandra |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
In the drive to work for freedom many long nights I left you alone I couldn't see your heart receeding while I was far away from home but I thought we were so together so I didn't feel your grief and you got lost behind my cover while I was fading from the scene Bridge When the phone lines joined us up the conversation spiraled down and the love that once bound us was starting to shatter all around In my struggle to keep winning I overlooked your worst fears but the need for a new beginning somehow unfolded bold and clear cause we were more than bedroom lovers before my world of needs appeared So on a bridge across disaster I crawled back to you in tears. ================================= Eric this is a beautiful bittersweet melody from you...the words flow like poetry in motion...and the beat keeps perfect time... You get in a groove and it moves us  very cool write my poet pal!! jm How she loves me, I dont understand |
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Bill Charles Member Patricius
since 2000-07-11
Posts 10619highways, & byways, for now |
ethome - now all I have to do is figure out the chords to this great song... BC |
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the_loner_23 Member Ascendant
since 2002-06-08
Posts 5479Jacksonville, Florida, USA |
I love this Cold hands means a warm heart |
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Bill Charles Member Patricius
since 2000-07-11
Posts 10619highways, & byways, for now |
ethome - now all I have to do is figure out the chords to this great song. We need to collaborate with a couple of them... BC |
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Suetang Member Ascendant
since 2001-03-07
Posts 5187Melbourne, Australia |
Hello Eric Such beautiful words of love and longing that you write so very well. Take care.....Sue I am in motion |
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ethome Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858New Brunswick Canada |
I just got back in here so I must apologize to all for not answering sooner. Sammie....So good to see you here and thanks for the wonderful comment. Thank you Alan I appreciate that! Sy always good to hear from you thanks! Karilea my favorite poetic legal eagle thanks for looking from above. Martie you're the world's sweetest flower girl and thank you for the kind comments! Lyra thank you so much for the imagery comment and I'll be looking forward to your work! mycafe I appreciate the fact you see it that way! Suthern those are very kind words and I'm glad I warmed your heart. Sandra I appreciate that comment very much! My dearest poet pet.....I always love your comments and always feel spoiled by your enthusiasm.....Thank you so very much once again! Bill it's good to hear from you and yes we will colaborate some time on one of these! I appreciate the thought! Loner...Glad you loved it! Sue I haven't talked to you for quite a while and it's so good to hear from you. Thanks for the kind words! |
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cherrypoptart Member
since 2002-06-09
Posts 109state of wordthiness |
I've got to bump this one! It's one of my favorites! |
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Magnus
since 2001-10-10
Posts 14135South Carolina, USA |
Very well done Eric.....this truly depicts part of real life and how we work our way through the tough moments... |
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ethome Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858New Brunswick Canada |
Thanks Kid and Keth....I appreciate it very much! |
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