»
Archives
»
Open Poetry #21
»
Lifting Veils
| Open Poetry #21 |
|
Lifting Veils |
|
|
Tea Lady Junior Member
since 2002-07-11
Posts 26 |
Come Twilight When even on the stillest of nights the air stirs just slightly and night wakes They enter my world and I watch Quickly, swooping and racing from one set of trees to another Wings beating a frantic pace like the pulse of a nightmare Oblivious or uncaring of me in the moments we share The flames of the candles dancing around me join their madness and I shudder slightly in silence That I have not seen them before, I know now does not mean they were not here It was only that my eyes refused to see [This message has been edited by Tea Lady (07-26-2002 10:31 PM).] |
||
| © Copyright 2002 Tea Lady - All Rights Reserved | |||
Magnus
since 2001-10-10
Posts 14135South Carolina, USA |
Loved the feel and vision of this poem... very well written... Nice to see you here at Passions... |
||
Mistletoe Angel 
since 2000-12-17
Posts 32816Portland, Oregon |
  (big hugggsssssss) Oh my gosh, this is wonderful, sweet friend, I just love the wonderful words you write, this is a somewhat eerie piece with so much honesty and heart, sweet friend, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Tea Lady, thank you for sharing!  May love and light always shine upon you! Love, Noah Eaton "Underneath your clothes there's an endless story..." |
||
|
serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
Hey tea lady...eyes that refuse to see. I ponder this often. I enjoyed the depth of this, and found it well-written and thoughtful. I look forward to reading more from you. Welcome! |
||
|
Tea Lady Junior Member
since 2002-07-11
Posts 26 |
Thank you so much Magnus and Mistletoe Angel. I really didn't mean to walk in with bats and dark emotions but, well, lookie there. I sure did. I do really appreciate the kind welcome. |
||
|
Tea Lady Junior Member
since 2002-07-11
Posts 26 |
Thank you too, serenity. After reading your poem tonight I'm positively cringing. What a cliche "Eyes that refuse to see". I'll work on that though, and will truly enjoy reading the other work here. Your poem really was outstanding. I will learn much, I am certain. |
||
|
serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
smiles to you, tea lady. Yanno? After reading my poem tonight? I AM CRINGING TOO... rofl... yer too kind, and there are many astounding poets here. Enjoy the word feast. And?  Stick around! |
||
|
R. Dean Junior Member
since 2002-07-26
Posts 37Illinois--USA |
The word pictures are very effective here. I'd like to see some punctuation, and a bit more attention to complete sentences. The piece would benefit from it, I know. Yours in peace, |
||
|
Mark Bohannan Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-21
Posts 7269In the winds of Cherokee song |
I really enjoyed the aspect of thoughts in this piece. Awakenings can be the pure definition of the word and you leave much for us to ponder with this one. Your line breaks and resistance to follow patterned verse gave much to the enjoyment of this piece as well as you place them quite well. Look forward to reading more works and please accept a belated welcome to Passions. |
||
|
Marge Tindal
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
TeaLady~ Welcome to Passions~ This is a stunning write ... enjoyed it very much~ *Hugs* ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ |
||
|
Goodknight Member Elite
since 2002-06-15
Posts 2386Ohio, USA |
very well written and I enjoyed all the thoughts it evoked - great read - Paul |
||
|
Bill Charles Member Patricius
since 2000-07-11
Posts 10619highways, & byways, for now |
Tea Lady - this is most stunning. I read it three times and liked it more and more. Waiting to read more of yours... BC |
||
|
Tea Lady Junior Member
since 2002-07-11
Posts 26 |
serenity - burst out laughing! Ah, I enjoy your humor, and your warm welcome. A delightful group you all have here. I shall enjoy getting to know everyone. R. Dean. - I appreciate your thoughts on this piece and I will think on your suggestions. I've never honestly even considered punctuation or complete sentences in my poetry. Thank you for the advice. And Marge, Goodknight, and Charles: My goodness. You are all so kind. Thank you, for this warm welcome into your group. Mark - Thank you so much for your thoughts on this poem. You've given me much to think about. It does help to have different eyes take a look at something, for what they might see that we don't. Thank you also for the welcome. |
||
|
Martie
Moderator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Tea Lady Enjoyed the visuals in this well done poem. Welcome to you! |
||
|
|
⇧ top of page ⇧ |
|
| All times are ET (US). All dates are in Year-Month-Day format. | ||
