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ecrivan
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0 posted 2002-07-26 03:38 PM



one is sited far out in space
we run around, not a moment to waste
will it strike the earth while I am here
Can I watch it hit while I drink a beer?

sarcasm has the best of me
of other worldy, we are not to flee
pick your choice how to view one in a million chances
look around quickly as the earth escapes
your glances.

monuments will continue to rise in the image of man
cities rise and fall as do life spans
and the asteroid can hit at any while
to bring man back to his prehistoric piles.

does it matter if you invest in bricks
or build a house of mud and sticks
asteriods are lonely rocks
human kind is a lonely stock.




[This message has been edited by ecrivan (07-26-2002 10:23 PM).]

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ecrivan
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1 posted 2002-07-28 12:38 PM


Keep up your distinctive work Martin..so distinctive you're the first to comment
passing shadows
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2 posted 2002-07-29 10:24 AM


hmmmm, it's not something I worry about much, loved the poem, nice.
ecrivan
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3 posted 2002-07-30 10:51 AM


I don't either but the temporariness of all of this is bothersome to me..or is it at all temporary

Martin


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4 posted 2002-07-30 12:09 PM


nothing lasts forever, and that's a good thing I think
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5 posted 2002-07-30 12:18 PM


ecrivan
Worry wont help anything. Enjoyed the read.

ecrivan
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6 posted 2002-07-31 03:15 AM


Passing shadows

the nothing lasts forever we associate to trends, civilizations when you talk about a total wipe out, that doesn't faze you..even a little. By the way a nuclear holocaust is more likely and  you never know when and how... part of life in a bizarre way... thanks for sharing

Sy,

oh yes, why worry ...won't be around none of my direct descendants either..thanks for sharing


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7 posted 2002-07-31 07:41 PM


I like your thoughts on this. It is unnerving, especially consdering the one that passed very close recently, that the astronomers never saw till JUST before.
Another great escape I guess. And yeah, what is the meaning of life, anyway.
Sandra

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8 posted 2002-07-31 07:46 PM


In Viet Nam I became a true believer in fatalism.If it's going to happen it will and if it's not it wont.So why worry about it?

paladin

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9 posted 2002-07-31 07:53 PM


Great write Martin...leaving lots for the reader to ponder..
But, I can't sit around and worry about it...I have a worry list a mile long now.
Love your unique style of writing.
~Hugs~

~Somewhere in my heart I'm always
dancing with you in the summer rain~

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10 posted 2002-07-31 08:02 PM


does it matter if you invest in bricks
or build a house of mud and sticks
asteriods are lonely rocks
human kind is a lonely stock.

I love the metaphor, Martin...
Do you remember back in the late seventies when that space station fell from the sky, and they kept telling us to keep our kids inside...
Well, it took 2 weeks and I was so paranoid about letting my kids play outside...and this was in the summer when they had no school.
Finally it fell into the Indian Ocean or somewhere remote like that...and my kids were so mad that they never let me forget how crazy I was.
~ hugs from a frustrated old mom.

Lyra

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11 posted 2002-07-31 09:14 PM




(big hugggssssssss) I heard recently that scientists discovered an asteroid that at first was projected to hit the Earth in 2017 but now they report that it won't hit the Earth after all! (sigh) Whew!!! This is wonderfully said, sweet friend, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Martin, thank you for sharing!



May love and light always shine upon you!

Love,
Noah Eaton

"Underneath your clothes there's an endless story..."

Shakira

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12 posted 2002-08-01 01:53 AM


You sent a very compelling message in your last line, ecrivan...sets me thinking quite a bit.  Very interesting write you've shared!

mycafe

Keep counting your blessings

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13 posted 2002-08-01 02:01 AM


Wonder where all the interest suddenly appeared from, for a while this poem had no comments and then presto..never underestimate the power of the pen I guess...

yes my cafe..there is a definite message at the end

Lyra,

Overprotective? A lot of mothers are..well at least
you realized what fear can do.
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ecrivan
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14 posted 2002-08-01 02:03 AM


Paladin,

there's nothing that can stop probability from taking its own couse

Sandra
thanks for sharing

Nancy,

no intent on adding to worrying lists..just to make people appreciate what they have before its gone.


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15 posted 2002-08-01 06:38 AM


ecrivan, yes, total wipe out bothers me, extinction of animal species bothers me, war bothers me...I live my life and raise my kids the best way I know how. And I love my day. Dying is part of living. Total wipe-out is something I think we all think about at some time or another...

from up in the sky, we look so small and insignificant, compared to what's around us.

ecrivan
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16 posted 2002-08-02 11:48 AM


maybe that's it from up there we're nothing more than a fleck of dust..and yet the way we behave is as if we can maintain total permanance...I'm also refering to socio-political status quo, how change is inevitable..and an asteroid entering our air apace is an extreme case but an example none the less.

[This message has been edited by ecrivan (08-02-2002 11:51 AM).]

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17 posted 2002-08-05 03:07 AM


point taken

there are so many things I would change if I could

this was a very good read and made for interesting conversation.

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