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iMMuNe
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since 2002-07-23
Posts 49
Maine, USA

0 posted 2002-07-24 04:34 PM



A hand lifts down to pick me up
As I try to find the hand,
I look up.

As I look up the sun glares down,
Suddenly the person takes away my frown,
Glorious as always I look upon her face,
Heart already pounding, it started to race.

For she was Sarah,
Her I knew,
Surely either her or I,
Did not know what to do.

As the wind bristles,
Her bangs revealed her gorgeous face.

Suddenly I woke up,
From this mysterious place,
Than I asked myself,
How true could it be?

For than I knew,
That she was the love,
For me.

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iMMuNe
Junior Member
since 2002-07-23
Posts 49
Maine, USA
1 posted 2002-07-24 04:36 PM


This is the second version:

Sarah,
There is a feelin inside me,
Deep within baby I love you
My rhymes can’t even describe you.

If it’s your luscious lips,
Those long legs, perfect hips
Or your pretty smile,
Whatever it is girl you make me wild.

I can’t stop thinking about you,
My heart beats everyday
Feelin` love for you,
This is why I pray

Pray to the lord to take me away
Away from this place and some way,
Put me in the perfect day,
When our love will be close.

Face to face.

wranx
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since 2002-06-07
Posts 3689
Moved from a shack to a barn
2 posted 2002-07-31 12:17 PM


Imune,
Try to keep this feeling close, no matter how it all turns out. THIS, is the important part.

~wranx

The shortest distance between two points...
is sometimes, intolerable.      

Bukowski

the_loner_23
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since 2002-06-08
Posts 5479
Jacksonville, Florida, USA
3 posted 2002-07-31 12:18 PM


Cold hands means a warm heart

bsquirrel
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4 posted 2002-07-31 10:45 PM


That was very sweet -- both versions.

Said if I only could ...
-KB

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