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RSWells
Member Elite

since 2001-06-17

Posts 2533

0 posted 2002-07-23 02:47 AM

The waxing gibbous Moon this early eve
seems partially submerged in pale blue sky,
her silent sultry stillness interweaves
the draw that I've to swim in rich brown eyes

Unknown to you the Moon's watched over me
whispering that in patience I abide,
you're to my heart as she is to the sea
as swelled in my emotion as her tide

While tawny, sinewed Queen Palm spine's are raised
elliptic leaves, lime fingered silhouettes,
hosannas to celestial light are praised
this Moon has shared with me Love's due kismet

Though I await the words from your lips phrased
the Moon, soon full, informs our souls have met,
through eyes of sparkling stars we Lovers gaze
intensity beyond this night's sunset

Impassioned sonatina birthed duet
bright blushing future's promised roseate.

Duncan
Member Ascendant

since 2001-08-07

Posts 5455

1 posted 2002-07-23 02:52 AM

Unknown to you the Moon's watched over me
whispering that in patience I abide,
you're to my heart as she is to the sea
as swelled in my emotion as her tide

Can't tell ya how much I wish I'd written this! Intense and universal!

please don't change, please don't break
the only thing that seems to work at all is you

MB 20

Mysteria

Member Laureate

since 2001-03-07

Posts 18328
British Columbia, Canada

2 posted 2002-07-23 03:31 AM

Oh sigh ~ simply beautiful that is all I can say. The images this piece brings to mind could not be painted any better by a master. I believe those rose-colored glasses suit you well

and your ears shall hear what patience bestows on you.

Nothing means more to me than faith,
family and my friends.

Proud Canadian

Bridget Shenachie
Senior Member

since 2002-01-23

Posts 1056
Kansas USA

3 posted 2002-07-23 03:49 AM

Breathtaking imagery!
Ditto Duncan.
Ditto Mysteria.

Shenachie

Janet Marie
Member Laureate

since 2000-01-22

Posts 18554

4 posted 2002-07-23 08:03 AM

The waxing gibbous Moon this early eve
seems partially submerged in pale blue sky,
her silent sultry stillness interweaves
the draw that I've to swim in rich brown eyes

Unknown to you the Moon's watched over me
whispering that in patience I abide,
you're to my heart as she is to the sea
as swelled in my emotion as her tide

While tawny, sinewed Queen Palm spine's are raised
elliptic leaves, lime fingered silhouettes,
hosannas to celestial light are praised
this Moon has shared with me Love's due kismet
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Yeah...*sigh* is a good start

and ya know I am smiling at that alliteration
and the unique imagery in that 3rd verse...very cool perspective.
But its the romantic intend of this inspire that pulls the reader like the moon tide--
your oh so lovely phrasing....

Unknown to you the Moon's watched over me
whispering that in patience I abide,
you're to my heart as she is to the sea

yeah ... *sigh*

How she loves me, I dont understand
If time wont change me, perhaps she can
And I feel her trying when were apart
God dont let me break her heart

Sven

Member Laureate

since 1999-11-23

Posts 14937
East Lansing, MI USA

5 posted 2002-07-23 06:38 PM

ahhh. . . finely penned verse from one of the best. . . thank you for this Sir. . .

well done. . .

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To the world, you may only be one person. But to one person, you may be the world.

the_loner_23
Member Ascendant

since 2002-06-08

Posts 5479
Jacksonville, Florida, USA

6 posted 2002-07-23 06:39 PM

Beautifully written

Cold hands means a warm heart

Enchantress
Member Empyrean

since 2001-08-14

Posts 35113
Canada eh.

7 posted 2002-07-23 07:37 PM

While tawny, sinewed Queen Palm spine's are raised
elliptic leaves, lime fingered silhouettes,
hosannas to celestial light are praised
this Moon has shared with me Love's due kismet
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All this and Kismet too!!
Kismet...which happens to be my most favourite word in the world!!
Do you know how much I love this piece!!
Egad, it's sooo beautiful!!
I am smiling from ear to ear!
~Hugs~

~Somewhere in my heart I'm always
dancing with you in the summer rain~

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