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Sven
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0 posted 2002-07-19 04:28 PM


poem know write quill ink blood vein heart passion sand time circle ending eternity holds
begin love find seek death
there are too many words right now lost heart this that other a
other may be know you
too many words for my pen to write picture paper card snow an
speaker screen glass slide
I don't know where exactly to begin control delete insert frame
tab lighthouse pin point prick
my heart says to begin then music poetry dance life light in
metal iron gold silver ruby
my soul says to begin now mute help sleep camera film flash
phone black tones pulses
and my pen just sits, waiting start end card world peace peas O
window view slide gleam sparkle
waiting for me to decide where booking strand piece to
coiled book paper spine
to begin, who to listen to, where to go follow map desire treasure
ship coast sail water waves
if it were only so simple, to take mouse cord frame to being
and thus seeing page first
the first step to find the words backspace lock enter end knows
shift walking strides go stop
and not look back at where the pen scroll parchment papyrus
service pony storage define
might fall or what it might leave behind track over under wit
pound leave mill reveal
but, the pen leaves tracks, or at least algebra rules numbers equal
letters make my hat fit band
traces of what's in our hearts, or our souls nine tee for four I
tree three thee leek leak
and then, that's when we look back glasses beard black teeth eye
red brown white blue
and find that there aren't so many words book open read speak this
page cover calendar bottle Divine finding card note staff key signature revealed this now


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To the world, you may only be one person. But to one person, you may be the world.

[This message has been edited by Sven (07-19-2002 04:30 PM).]

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the_loner_23
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1 posted 2002-07-19 04:29 PM




Cold hands means a warm heart

[This message has been edited by the_loner_23 (07-19-2002 04:32 PM).]

vandana
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2 posted 2002-07-19 04:32 PM


enjoyed
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3 posted 2002-07-19 05:13 PM


Sven This is exceptional writing....Well done my friend and clevery presented....Love the message within the message!
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4 posted 2002-07-19 05:15 PM


sven - so well written - such familiar feelings evoked by your clever poem and presentation - I loved this - Paul
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5 posted 2002-07-19 05:40 PM


wow......
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6 posted 2002-07-19 07:22 PM




(smiles) Oh Sven, this is wonderful, sweet friend, this is by far my favorite of yours yet, I always love how you paint these poetic "frescoes" and reveal deeper levels of thinking! (big hugggssssss) This is marvelous, sweet friend, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Sven, thank you for sharing!



May love and light always shine upon you!

Love,
Noah Eaton

"Underneath your clothes there's an endless story..."

Shakira

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7 posted 2002-07-19 08:33 PM


Sven, you are one amazing writer!
I appreciate and enjoy your work!
Nothing short of brilliant!
~Hugs~

~Somewhere in my heart I'm always
dancing with you in the summer rain~

paladin
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8 posted 2002-07-19 09:01 PM


Wonderful format.I really don't know how you could improve on it.

paladin

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9 posted 2002-07-20 01:54 AM


Sven, you've done a wonderful job with this!! I so enjoyed the way you tied so many words together and made them fit within your message~

Neat poem~

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10 posted 2002-07-20 02:18 AM


John,
     Superbly written and well crafted. It was the visual effect which pulled me in and the words that kept me there! Good job, my friend!

kaile
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11 posted 2002-07-20 07:29 AM


John,
i urge you to get yourself published...i will tear down doors to get a copy of your book...

have i ever thanked you for being the writer that you are? hmm...thanks!

p/s: the formatting, while great, is secondary..what is most important is how you presented those pesky sentiments, inherent in every poet's consciousness..good job!

Paul Wilson
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12 posted 2002-07-20 07:40 AM


A true work of art. REally Nice.

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13 posted 2002-07-20 11:32 AM


Very interesting write, John
Sandra

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14 posted 2002-07-20 11:52 AM


What a clever presentation!!!  Wow!!!

Neeraja

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15 posted 2002-07-20 03:31 PM


Well, I see you finally found some words, Sweet Man.

You know I love this, don't you? I'm with faterider. I'd be the first one there to get a copy of your book.

You surprise me every time you write something new.

I will not bend to the cowardice of a silent judgement.

Sven
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16 posted 2002-07-22 04:49 PM


thanks so much everyone. . . this one just sprang up on me. . . I really didn't know what to write. . . the thought, "too many words" just came to me, and I went with it. . . I imagined someone, surrounded by words. . . trying to find the ones that he needed to say what he was trying to say. . . the constant war between heart and head. . . and just wondering how we really do eventually find the words that we need. . .

and how they stand out from the rest. . .

thanks again, and faterider and Temptress. . . I'll be sure to give both of you the first two copies. . .

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To the world, you may only be one person. But to one person, you may be the world.

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