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Love among the storm

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bsquirrel
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0 posted 07-19-2002 12:51 PM       View Profile for bsquirrel   Email bsquirrel   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to Submit your Poem to Passions  View IP for bsquirrel


I cannot feel yr kiss in the rage of this rain.
Cannot touch your face through sky water's curtain.
Almost a ghost to me, impermanence, grace.
I cannot feel yr kiss in the rage of this rain.

I cannot find your eyes through the wind of your hair.
Cannot find their warmth in the red of this storm.
Almost broken down to ice and dead stone.
I cannot find your eyes through the wind of your hair.

I cannot fill your hands in this pressure of heat.
Cannot fall fast enough to reach you below.
Almost tornadic, a spell of dirt, leaves.
I cannot fill your hands in this pressure of heat.

I cannot sing to you above the calm of this storm.
Cannot follow the trace and curve of your hold.
Almost scared of the quiet, for what it might see.
I cannot sing to you above the calm of this storm.

I am fragile in the spread of her sea.
I am her.
You are me.

She said burn ... together.
-TON

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the_loner_23
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1 posted 07-19-2002 12:52 PM       View Profile for the_loner_23   Email the_loner_23   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for the_loner_23

Awesome words were just spoken.

Cold hands means a warm heart

bsquirrel
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2 posted 07-19-2002 12:53 PM       View Profile for bsquirrel   Email bsquirrel   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for bsquirrel

That's very cool of you to say. Thanks, t_l_23.

She said burn ... together.
-TON

Madame Chipmunk
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3 posted 07-19-2002 12:59 PM       View Profile for Madame Chipmunk   Email Madame Chipmunk   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Madame Chipmunk's Home Page   View IP for Madame Chipmunk

I love your writing Mr.Squirrel and I love storms....
That makes this poem, one of my favorites.
It seems that the rodents on this website must be somehow attracted to wet weather...
I wonder why.
I think its probably because Piptalk affords us a nice safe place to be, during a raging storm.
~ stormy hugs to another rodentpoet

Lyra

copyright2002 Lyra Nesius

"poetry is life distilled"  Gwendolyn Brooks

bsquirrel
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4 posted 07-19-2002 01:03 PM       View Profile for bsquirrel   Email bsquirrel   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for bsquirrel

Thanks, Lyra. One of my favorite songs is "I'm Only Happy When It Rains" by Garbage. Ooo, me so dark and shivery!

And how do y' hug by takin' off a hat? Oh, I get it! The rodent way! s back

Mikey

She said burn ... together.
-TON

brian sites
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5 posted 07-19-2002 01:15 PM       View Profile for brian sites   Email brian sites   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for brian sites

stormin'& warmin'
combo of thrills
bsquirrel payin'
them piptalkin bills
goodness!
good
BS.

I never aimed at reality; I aimed at truth. --Orson Welles

Anvrill
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6 posted 07-19-2002 01:30 PM       View Profile for Anvrill   Email Anvrill   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Anvrill's Home Page   View IP for Anvrill

Mm, I love you. You can get lost in my storm anyday.

Yr poetry is just so ..... can I find any word other than yummy? Hm... Apparently not today.

Love you, my sea-tossed squirrely-boy.

written in blood before everything went black

JCV

bsquirrel
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7 posted 07-19-2002 01:46 PM       View Profile for bsquirrel   Email bsquirrel   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for bsquirrel

Baby. Y' have forever confirmed and sealed yr cuteness status by even imagining the phrase "sea-tossed squirrely boy."

I love you. And yr storms. Um ... I'll stop before I get this post deleted for decency. I love you.

She said burn ... together.
-TON

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8 posted 07-19-2002 01:48 PM       View Profile for Anvrill   Email Anvrill   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Anvrill's Home Page   View IP for Anvrill

Grr. I hate it when I damn myself.

...

Oh, I love you too.

written in blood before everything went black

JCV

Martie
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Mike

You play the storm in words, well!
Neeraja
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10 posted 07-19-2002 02:15 PM       View Profile for Neeraja   Email Neeraja   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Neeraja

I enjoyed this poem!!  Very well written!!!

Neeraja        
Goodknight
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11 posted 07-19-2002 03:07 PM       View Profile for Goodknight   Email Goodknight   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Goodknight

it was wonderful riding out these storms - you write so well about the storm - is it a rodenteye view??? I enjoyed this poem very much - thanks Paul
bsquirrel
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12 posted 07-19-2002 03:14 PM       View Profile for bsquirrel   Email bsquirrel   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for bsquirrel

Thanks, bs, M, N, and G (or P). Yr all great, fun poets!

She said burn ... together.
-TON

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13 posted 07-19-2002 03:57 PM       View Profile for WhileIWasGone   Email WhileIWasGone   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for WhileIWasGone

Beautiful...

DeaDiAmore
bsquirrel
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Why, thank you, DD!

She said burn ... together.
-TON

Mark Bohannan
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15 posted 07-19-2002 04:20 PM       View Profile for Mark Bohannan   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Mark Bohannan

I believe you just found a way to make the storms at sea become more powerful yet with a more gentle touch.  I truely enjoyed this one much.  I especially liked the way each verse begins and ends with the same line.  Is there a special name for this style or is it just something you were playing with?  Either way, I found it a treat to these eyes.
bsquirrel
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16 posted 07-19-2002 05:26 PM       View Profile for bsquirrel   Email bsquirrel   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for bsquirrel

Thanks, Mark. I'm sure I didn't invent this style, but if it does exist, I don't know what the name is. It has kinda villanelle-ish elements, but simplified.

Oh well, form shmorm. Glad y' enjoyed.

She said burn ... together.
-TON

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17 posted 08-30-2002 02:35 PM       View Profile for Dragon Mistress   Email Dragon Mistress   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Dragon Mistress

Awesome poem.  Loved it.  As I do all of your others.  Thanks for giving me the link to read it.  Was it a good thing that mine reminded you or this one?? Just wondering!
-Tanya

~*~I'm only a dreamer, with broken dreams, and only words to fall back on~*~

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18 posted 08-30-2002 02:44 PM       View Profile for bsquirrel   Email bsquirrel   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for bsquirrel

Of course it's good, Tanya! I love seeing how different poets attack the same subjects.

Mike
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Yay! It is quite interesting to see just how people write about the same, or similar subjects!  Kinda nifty to see what turns out!
-Tanya

~*~I'm only a dreamer, with broken dreams, and only words to fall back on~*~

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How...did I miss this?  Thank you!
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always love your way
bsquirrel
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I thank thee both.
 
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