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me cielo, me infierno..(my heaven, my hell)
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me cielo, me infierno..(my heaven, my hell) |
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Dark Stranger Member Patricius
since 2001-03-19
Posts 13631West Coast 
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usted es mi cielo you are my heaven in woman skin you are god's place in sigh voice you are angel songs you bid me welcome in your gardens usted es mi infierno. you are my hell in woman skin you are the temptress in moan sounds you are seduction you dare me to enter your hidden grottos usted es mi recompensa you are my reward for the good of my dreams you are the pleasure that sleep walks and whispers to me with open eye willing usted es mi castigo you are my punishment for the wicked of my dreams you are the desire that waits outside the locked doors of all my tomorrows ©dark [This message has been edited by Dark Stranger (07-17-2002 10:15 AM).] |
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Joe Lamando Member
since 2001-11-20
Posts 124Massachusetts,USA |
Great! I like the idea of the spanish lines and the composition and thoughts are excelent. Joe Lamando |
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Sudhir Iyer Member Ascendant
since 2000-04-26
Posts 6943Mumbai, India : now in Belgium |
you are the pleasure that sleep walks and whispers to me with open eye willing ... ... you are the desire that waits outside the locked doors of all my tomorrows ... ... Great... I am liking this write... Regards, Sudhir |
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Dark Stranger Member Patricius
since 2001-03-19
Posts 13631West Coast |
Joe, THANKS MUCH, very much appreciate your review. Sudhir, thank you so much for the review and comments, am pleased that it is worthy |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
 I do believe you've even put the right touch of sound to every syllable...this read beautifully, so you must read it aloud sometime at a gathering, when all of Passions poets come together... |
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Dark Stranger Member Patricius
since 2001-03-19
Posts 13631West Coast |
ms sunshine... good morning sweet lady...or is it boney todayez. (grin) thanks babe, would be fun to do that...although I would enjoy listening to the others more. |
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Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. |
YES!!...Oh YES!! This one I'm hiding...keeping it just for me. Romantic, sensual... and I think I just drooled on my keyboard. ~Morning hugs~ ~Somewhere in my heart I'm always |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
DS You storm and you sun with equal feeling, it would make sense that you would be loved the same. Enjoyed the spanish/romantic feel and the dichotomy. |
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Dark Stranger Member Patricius
since 2001-03-19
Posts 13631West Coast |
ms e...please do hide it in a special place.. that is a gift of flattery that I will cherish, thanks ms ms martie..dicotahuh? iz that spainish too? wuzzit mean..izzit it naughty..(grin) thanks hon..you are so sweet lil neighbor..hugs to you..and thanks so much |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
usted es mi cielo you are my heaven in woman skin you are god's place in sigh voice you are angel songs you bid me welcome in your gardens usted es mi infierno. you are my hell in woman skin you are the temptress in moan sounds you are seduction you dare me to enter your hidden grottos que usted es mi recompensa you are my reward for the good of my dreams you are the pleasure that sleep walks and whispers to me with open eye willing =========================== Heaven? Hell? ...have mercy...I dont even speak spanish and I need to make a run for the border now... I do so enjoy a man who is bilingually endowed LOL  Exquisite write DS, in any language.  How she loves me, I dont understand |
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Gentle Spirit Member Patricius
since 2000-10-09
Posts 13989 |
damn Dark.... you make a gal swoon with words like that....... sighs* Enjoy life, this is NOT a dress rehearsal. |
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Dark Stranger Member Patricius
since 2001-03-19
Posts 13631West Coast |
janet... thanks little lady...some things just sound good that way...latin folks have a way... you are too sweet with your reviews. donna...thaks hon..swoons are good..got my swoon proof shirt on today,,,,well never did actually try it out before..(grin) |
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Kethry Member Rara Avis
since 2000-07-29
Posts 9082Victoria Australia |
Dark, you aren't going to have enough room to lay all those female bodies down if you keep writing like this...but let me give you a little hint you want them awake, not swooning. Keth Here in the midst of my lonely abyss, a single joy I find...your presence in my mind. Unknown |
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rwood Member Elite
since 2000-02-29
Posts 3793Tennessee |
usted es pecado divino habla maravillosamente Hmmmm..and a mind full o that.. Sincerely, Reg |
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Dark Stranger Member Patricius
since 2001-03-19
Posts 13631West Coast |
kethry...thanks hon, I would be glad to assist anyone feeling a touch of the vapors to some safe recline..(wink) regina, mi fiebre, gracias con pecado you pleasure me hon thanks to you |
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Mistletoe Angel 
since 2000-12-17
Posts 32816Portland, Oregon |
(smiles) Oh my gosh, this is soooooooo beautiful, sweet friend, not to mention sooooo delightfully sensual, your wonderful passionate words never cease to amaze me! (big hugggssssss) This is awesome, sweet friend, I LOVE IT, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet friend, thank you for sharing!  May love and light alwyas shine upon you! Love, Noah Eaton "Underneath your clothes there's an endless story..." |
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the_loner_23 Member Ascendant
since 2002-06-08
Posts 5479Jacksonville, Florida, USA |
I like spanish. Think you mixed it in very well. Enjoyed! |
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GOlDsparklESS Member
since 2001-12-13
Posts 428central nj |
oh my , this is delicious |
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Dark Stranger Member Patricius
since 2001-03-19
Posts 13631West Coast |
noah, humble thanks my friend, much appreciation sir loner, thanks so much, am pleased that you visit me here. Goldy, thanks to you so much... a pleasure it is to have your reply |
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devina Member Elite
since 1999-10-28
Posts 3539Cali |
Would love to hear you whisper this in softest tones of sexy... Hells flame of passion...at it's best you are!!! Open arms can be the most fragile in the world... |
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Dark Stranger Member Patricius
since 2001-03-19
Posts 13631West Coast |
ms devina... might get into trouble if I start whispering stuff..but it is a saxy thought...thanks hon for the reads |
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wranx Member Elite
since 2002-06-07
Posts 3689Moved from a shack to a barn |
Spellbound, yet again. I may have to stop commenting on your work, as I can never find the proper.....See? That's what happens. However, I'll NOT stop reading it. Maybe I should just give you one of them "thumbs up" thingagagigs. peace, ~wranx I have great faith in Humanity...It's just most of the Humans, I'm not too keen on. E.F.Rose |
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Dark Stranger Member Patricius
since 2001-03-19
Posts 13631West Coast |
wranx...humble thanks for your reads and replies...I do appreciate your visits, and your comments are perfect my friend |
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Corinne Member Ascendant
since 1999-10-28
Posts 5167state of confusion |
You just keep getting better and better, Dark One. Cor |
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BluesSerenade Member Patricius
since 2001-10-23
Posts 10549By the Seaside |
You speak the language so eloquently Mr. D~ Nice slice of the heavenly stuff! |
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