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bags123
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since 2002-06-06
Posts 128


0 posted 2002-07-16 09:53 AM




Cinderella Drunk

Tonight I am eternal
"Heavens gift"
almost supernal
with verbosity and diction
far above
most mortal men

With malignant  boring glory
I insist on telling stories
which you have heard
a thousand times
at least
since you were ten.

So if I must, or if you may
discourse
on what I have to say
Cinderella's slippers lost
just after
3 AM

With mornings celebration
I won't feel the same
elation
Tequila dreams don't linger
past the barroom's
closing call


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Kethry
Member Rara Avis
since 2000-07-29
Posts 9082
Victoria Australia
1 posted 2002-07-16 10:16 AM


bags,
I think this is very different for Cinderella, I particularly like the last bit although perhaps you should stop waiting for the tequila sunrise.
Keth

Here in the midst of my lonely abyss, a single joy I find...your presence in my mind.  Unknown



serenity blaze
Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738

2 posted 2002-07-16 12:55 PM


myself? I always like the drama of looking for that other damned shoe...but then? THAT'S JUST ME.
Madame Chipmunk
Member Rara Avis
since 2001-12-05
Posts 8296
Michigan
3 posted 2002-07-16 12:57 PM


A surprise twist on the Cindarella we are used to Bags...
I liked it
~ fairytale hugs

Lyra

copyright2002 Lyra Nesius

"poetry is life distilled"  Gwendolyn Brooks

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