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Martie
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0 posted 2002-07-15 11:58 PM


         Driveway Roots

The clouds like pink cheeks watched me
in tender look at sweet old trailer from the good old days
so long nested in driveway it grew roots
and they tangled in my feelings now

Too soon gone the cozy drifting time snuggle
against a somewhere else where fragile moon looked in
the slanted windows across the table where we sat
and talked into the lovely night of this and that

Just a step down was another place and more
the door to oceans meadows greens and pools of pearls
where just a toot and blow and turn around we found
the swerve of hitched up often scary moved along

We stored our dreams in one small space
where summer time would trace our days
across the world to fishing holes that pulled us
with their lure enclosed and trouble double hook release
an open fire and fish such feast no catch release

Too soon gone the cozy drifting time snuggle
against a somewhere else where fragile moon looked in
the slanted windows across the table where we sat
and talked into the lovely night of this and that

[This message has been edited by Martie (07-16-2002 09:44 AM).]

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the_loner_23
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1 posted 2002-07-15 11:59 PM


Very well written

Cold hands means a warm heart

Madame Chipmunk
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2 posted 2002-07-16 12:03 PM


Too soon gone the cozy drifting time snuggle
against a somewhere else where fragile moon looked in

Time passes much too quickly...
Another beautiful write, Marti...
You never cease to amaze me.
~ loving hugs

Lyra

copyright2002 Lyra Nesius

"poetry is life distilled"  Gwendolyn Brooks

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3 posted 2002-07-16 12:23 PM


We stored are dreams in one small space
where summer time would trace our days
across the world to fishing holes that pulled us
with their lure enclosed and trouble double hook release
an open fire and fish such feast no catch release

You are so good at this and that
when it comes to writing good poetry.
Once again you took me there Martie.
You're truly something else~  



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4 posted 2002-07-16 12:32 PM


lovely
I can find no more words, although I wish I could find better.

I will not bend to the cowardice of a silent judgement.

serenity blaze
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5 posted 2002-07-16 12:45 PM


This is gorgeous...although? I must confess...the title conveyed a different reality to me...grin..

mind if I confess? I've a friend...she is in the midst of divorce---(I swear it's my friend! I have never been married--to my knowledge) but yes...she decided to landscape the yard one year, and had the "goodies" put on her driveway--almost 10 years ago! The driveway split and cracked, as they MUST in La. and the crepe myrtle...grin...made itself right at home. IN THE MIDDLE OF THE DRIVEWAY. She blames it on HIM, for not clearing the yard. He blames it on her, for ordering what he did not want in the first place.

sigh.

No one lives there, but the fact remains? IT BLOOMED.

(see where ya lead me?)

I love ya for that. Love yer work.

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6 posted 2002-07-16 12:53 PM




(smiles) Oh Martie, this is sooooo beautiful, sweet friend, your wonderful words always make me feel like I'm standing out on the widows walk or looking out my window and seeing the peaceful beautiful earth beneath! (kiss on cheek) This is breathtaking, sweet friend, I love it, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Martie, thank you for sharing!



May love and light always shine upon you!

Love,
Noah Eaton

"Underneath your clothes there's an endless story..."

Shakira

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7 posted 2002-07-16 02:15 AM


Oh but I needed this before bed Martie, and I almost thought I was hiding behind a tree watching you it was so vivid.  You do "this and that" so very well, that I can only speak for me, but I feel part of it.  That oculd be great poetry, yes?  

Nothing means more to me than faith,
family and my friends.

      
Proud Canadian

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8 posted 2002-07-16 02:23 AM


We stored are dreams in one small space
where summer time would trace our days
across the world to fishing holes that pulled us
with their lure enclosed and trouble double hook release
an open fire and fish such feast no catch release

Too soon gone the cozy drifting time snuggle
against a somewhere else where fragile moon looked in
the slanted windows across the table where we sat
and talked into the lovely night of this and that

This poem was a bridge of sorts, for me.  If I could explain what I mean better, I would.  Maybe I should just say, I really like this poem.  


One blaze of glory - glory
find
glory
in a song that rings true
truth like a blazing fire
an eternal flame

Jonathan Larson 'Rent'

Mark Bohannan
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In the winds of Cherokee song
9 posted 2002-07-16 04:21 AM


The cowboy is thinking maybe you need a quick getaway to the "Kern".  I know of a rock that once saddled your thoughts in a gaze of wonder as life was presented to us through your finds.  Make the time......no matter what it takes.  Big hugs to you sweet petal pusher of my heart.  Yours is always the perfect way to end a night (morning) and catch my 2 hours sleep and thus now I shall.

Recognize love for the gift it is and not a need that is out of focus.

Dark Stranger
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10 posted 2002-07-16 07:09 AM


ms martie

you do some scenes in dvd babe

enjoyed this one

BloomingRose
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11 posted 2002-07-16 07:36 AM


Wonderful memories, beautifully expressed!

Deb

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12 posted 2002-07-16 11:26 AM


Martie - this is such a wonderful poem - I read and saw scenes - I listened and heard beautiful sounds - I just so enjoyed reading this - thanks Paul
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13 posted 2002-07-16 11:34 AM



...this and that...sounds of silk thoughts
and callused hands still willing to touch,
still reaching through the dark to warm

Marge Tindal
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14 posted 2002-07-16 12:48 PM


Sis~

'The clouds like pink cheeks watched me
in tender look at sweet old trailer from the good old days
so long nested in driveway it grew roots
and they tangled in my feelings now'


I hope you never get tired of hearing "AWESOME"~
Cause this is !!!!
*HUGS*

***Taylor !!!  Get inside and REST !!!
~*Marge*~

~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~
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Janet Marie
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15 posted 2002-07-16 06:29 PM


The clouds like pink cheeks watched me
in tender look at sweet old trailer from the good old days
so long nested in driveway it grew roots
and they tangled in my feelings now

Too soon gone the cozy drifting time snuggle
against a somewhere else where fragile moon looked in
the slanted windows across the table where we sat
and talked into the lovely night of this and that
===================================


that some backyard of memories and serene scenery ya got there my dear..
and some muse too

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16 posted 2002-07-16 08:58 PM


Ah, Martie, I spent several minutes just imagining the first line...what an excellent description that is!

(rest of it ain;t bad, either! )

Sunshine
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17 posted 2002-07-16 09:14 PM


"We stored our dreams in one small space
where summer time would trace our days"

now doesn't this pull my time back into the warm...a Martiesque mistresspiece...

Joe Lamando
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18 posted 2002-07-17 05:52 AM


Martie,
I really enjoyed this.  You brought me right into your sweet reverie, rooted in the driveway, rooted in your mind.  Great composition.
Hugs,
Joe

Sudhir Iyer
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19 posted 2002-07-17 05:56 AM


This is BEAUTIFUL poetry...

regards to you Martie,
Sudhir

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20 posted 2002-07-17 06:49 AM


Always there is so much in your work, I much enjoyed this.

Maybe all one can do is hope to end up with the right regrets.  ~Arthur Miller

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