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serenity blaze
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0 posted 2002-07-11 11:54 PM


something in the silences
pauses emphasizing more
something in a cricket's sing
rewinds the frames of days before...

there is thought within blue flame
hallowed yellow, reaching white--
something hesitates my name;
there's something dark within the light.

a lava road of green sap bleed
of branch--alive--to burnt curled leaf.
springtime pine to choke of smoke--
every ash a promise broke.

Embered eyes aglow in burn,
beg to me of lesson learned.
I throw moss to caution's wind--
signaled smoke in rings of whim.

I summon Gods in blanket's weave,
stitched by tears of Goddess' need.

My message in a star's spotlight
adrift within blue ink of night.

© Copyright 2002 serenity blaze - All Rights Reserved
the_loner_23
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Jacksonville, Florida, USA
1 posted 2002-07-11 11:58 PM


Awesome

Cold hands means a warm heart

Duncan
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Posts 5455

2 posted 2002-07-12 12:18 PM


Embered eyes aglow in burn,
beg to me of lesson learned.
I throw moss to caution's wind--
signaled smoke in rings of whim.

I summon Gods in blanket's weave,
stitched by tears of Goddess' need.

My message in a star's spotlight
adrift within blue ink of night.


This...I have missed.  

How many redheads will it take to get one little puppy to class?

CocoBaci
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since 2000-05-06
Posts 3043

3 posted 2002-07-12 02:14 AM


Another sweet read4me dearPoetFriendSerenity cuz ya know I so much enjoy reading your poetry...
Hugs2u
*~coco~*

Janet Marie
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since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554

4 posted 2002-07-12 10:18 AM


there is thought within blue flame
hallowed yellow, reaching white--
something hesitates my name;
there's something dark within the light.

a lava road of green sap bleed
of branch--alive--to burnt curled leaf.
springtime pine to choke of smoke--
every ash a promise broke.

Embered eyes aglow in burn,
beg to me of lesson learned.
I throw moss to caution's wind--
signaled smoke in rings of whim.

I summon Gods in blanket's weave,
stitched by tears of Goddess' need.

My message in a star's spotlight
adrift within blue ink of night.
======================================

now you know mothyme cant resist a candle dance ...
you know this ones a keeper, right?
you know youre awesome, right?

where theres smoke...theres pen of sen

Sunshine
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Listening to every heart
5 posted 2002-07-12 10:22 AM



You paint with a mighty fine
brush....

what pictures you leave behind!

Sudhir Iyer
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since 2000-04-26
Posts 6943
Mumbai, India : now in Belgium
6 posted 2002-07-12 10:42 AM


"rings of whim"

now that's a phrase I should quote...

so well written...

Regards O Serene One,
Sudhir

Goodknight
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since 2002-06-15
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Ohio, USA
7 posted 2002-07-12 10:53 AM


Such wonderful images and a great flow - I liked this very much - Paul
Kethry
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Victoria Australia
8 posted 2002-07-12 10:58 AM


serenity,
stunning images, perfect flow - all around a solid piece
Kethry

Here in the midst of my lonely abyss, a single joy I find...your presence in my mind.  Unknown



catalinamoon
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The Shores of Alone
9 posted 2002-07-12 09:30 PM


You always give something to dwell on. And in such an interesting style. Ya know, I can hardly remember a time in my life when your poems were not part of it
Sandra

Enchantress
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since 2001-08-14
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Canada eh.
10 posted 2002-07-12 09:33 PM


Beautiful images and flow...
Sounds wonderful read aloud..
Enjoyed so much!
~Hugs~

serenity blaze
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11 posted 2002-07-12 09:37 PM


You guys are the BEST ANTI-DEPRESSANT...it's hard to have a decent pity party with so many wonderful friends...I am a lucky lady! to FORUM! (sniff...damned hormones! )
Madame Chipmunk
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since 2001-12-05
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Michigan
12 posted 2002-07-13 12:20 PM


Your beautiful words and images are always so thought provoking, Karen...
~ burning hugs

Lyra

copyright2002 Lyra Nesius

"poetry is life distilled"  Gwendolyn Brooks

Mark Bohannan
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since 2000-06-21
Posts 7269
In the winds of Cherokee song
13 posted 2002-07-13 02:29 AM


I saw the smoke signals go up and I thought they were calling me back to tribal council.  I can't say as I am disappointed though as I have been treated to a message within YOUR stars instead.  Superb penning and your cadence carried from split rhyme to two line rhyme flawlessly.  Loved it much.
bsquirrel
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Posts 7855

14 posted 2002-07-13 03:00 AM


Nice sadness y' got going there!

She said burn ... together.
-TON

serenity blaze
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since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738

15 posted 2002-07-13 03:07 AM


an unserene explanation: This was written for a friend who won't talk to me. Thus, I am subjecting the forum to the carcinogens of my "second hand smoke."

sigh.

wish I knew what I did wrong now.

(serenity exits, bumping into stuff...)

(serenity enters)

Forgot to say "thank you."

(serenity curtseys..and exits again...bumping into the same stuff...)

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