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Broken Spirit, Broken Dreams
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Broken Spirit, Broken Dreams |
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Suetang Member Ascendant
since 2001-03-07
Posts 5187Melbourne, Australia 
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She had a face just like an angel And a heart made of pure gold But so much in her life was missing Each night her self was sold She had lost herself somewhere Desperately searching for her guiding light Her real life would be exposed As the day turned into night In black stockings and stilettos A mini skirt up to her thighs She would make herself available To total strangers passing by They could have her for an hour If they had the ready cash In the elastic of her suspenders Was where she kept her stash They used her and abused her As they satisfied their needs Then they left her all alone When they'd completed their deeds A life of faceless strangers Her body a vehicle for their lust Her hopes and dreams were shattered They had blown away like dust She'd never known real love 'tho she had so much love to give Her life was constantly a struggle Sometimes she'd give up the will to live She walks this well worn street A boulevard of broken dreams She feels so lost and helpless As life unravels at the seams * * * * * I tried to put myself into the shoes of a street walker to see what it must be like. I imagine it would be so soul destroying and I guess some girls feel they can't get off the merry-go-round once they are on it. I am in motion |
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the_loner_23 Member Ascendant
since 2002-06-08
Posts 5479Jacksonville, Florida, USA |
Beautifully written Cold hands means a warm heart |
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angelswing Senior Member
since 2000-02-10
Posts 705United Kingdom |
Your braver than me, I can't no ... not even can't -don't want to- even imagine what it must be like, there is so much pain and suffering out there ... Fantastic poem . L.of.L. Tom . XXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXX 'There is only a very thin line between genius and insanity, this is measured only on sucess; I am proud to be considered an under-achieving genius'. [This message has been edited by angelswing (07-12-2002 09:07 AM).] |
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Bridget Shenachie Senior Member
since 2002-01-23
Posts 1056Kansas USA |
Sue--This is a very compassionate poem. You write on such a variety of subjects and life situations with such insight. I applaud your efforts. Shenachie |
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Kethry Member Rara Avis
since 2000-07-29
Posts 9082Victoria Australia |
Sue, this shows incredible insight and compassion Keth Here in the midst of my lonely abyss, a single joy I find...your presence in my mind. Unknown |
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NewEnglandlazurlu Member Rara Avis
since 2002-01-04
Posts 7470A Mountain Paradise |
Sue, this is so moving. You have some insight into what the world around you is like. What a gift. I used to work in an area that was not the nicest part of Boston and on my way to work in the morning I would see the 'girls' waiting for their johns to pick them up. It always broke my heart -- some were so young. So many of them feel trapped and have no self-esteem and just cannot get out of this life. I think of them often and am so grateful for what I have. Hugs, Marti " My wrinkles are badges of courage and reveal that I am a Mother." |
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Mistletoe Angel 
since 2000-12-17
Posts 32816Portland, Oregon |
 (big hugggsssssss) Oh Sue, this is so very sad, sweet friend, you have such a gift at fitting into someones shoes and feeling the compassion for them and how they would feel! (sad sigh) God Bless You, sweet friend, you are a hug to anyone on every cloudy day, we all love you so much, my heart goes out to the homeless with you! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Sue, thank you for sharing! May love and light always shine upon you! Love, Noah Eaton "Underneath your clothes there's an endless story..." |
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Trillium
since 2001-03-09
Posts 12098Idaho, USA |
Sue: One always wonders why certain girls and women wind up this way. It's usually a sad story. Good representation Sue. Betty Lou Hebert |
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Music Maker Member
since 2002-07-07
Posts 152THE ORIGINAL !!!! |
As the Grandfather of a talented, educated, attractive everything to live for girl, who is now in prison for 6 years in the prime of her life, I can tell you all in just one word why they do it. D R U G S !!!!! Beautiful lines, all the same, Thank you. John Grass won't grow under feet that don't move. |
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catalinamoon
since 2000-06-03
Posts 9543The Shores of Alone |
I like what you did with this subject, Sue. Perhaps you would like to see one I did a year ago. /pip/Forum35/HTML/001072.html |
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JamesMichael Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336Kapolei, Hawaii, USA |
In many cases I believe an inability or undesirability to face up to lives problems creates an atmosphere that leads to these circumstances...undesirable family situations....runaways...lack of education...lack of favorable options... As you say broken spirits and broken dreams...and with this lifestyle comes the problems with alcohol and drugs and soon it becomes a way of life in which there seems to be no relief and no way out...James |
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Sunshine
Administrator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
You transfer your imagery very well, Sue... it's not easy to do! But you pull it off! |
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Kellie_Cantrell Senior Member
since 2002-05-22
Posts 1667New York |
wow. this is really good. The point of view and mindset are really neat to see put together like that.. I never thought about thinking what I would do in that situation. Neat write, thanks for making my mind wander and work. |
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Anvrill Senior Member
since 2002-06-21
Posts 710in the interzone now |
That's so sad... *sigh* "Silly bunny, there are no monsters in here." - Chrys, from Gloom Cookie |
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Madame Chipmunk Member Rara Avis
since 2001-12-05
Posts 8296Michigan |
This is a real tearjerker, Sue... It reminds me a bit of that song Tina Turner sings called "Private Dancer" You wrote this so very well. ~ teary hugsLyra |
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