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Duncan
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since 2001-08-07
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0 posted 2002-07-11 02:44 AM




I wonder
about these things
sometimes, at night
while you sleep
beside me

I wonder
write

love unscripted
finds a new playbill
in ink

is anyone in charge here
things
are getting out of hand

it shouldn’t be this much fun
it shouldn’t have come this far
it shouldn’t be why I wake
or how I rock myself to sleep
it shouldn’t be

it’s love, afterall
it never works out
it shouldn’t be

yet
you sleep
here beside me

I wonder
I write
I believe



I’ll go to puppy class…but Tracey has to wear the muzzle.

[This message has been edited by Duncan (07-11-2002 02:58 AM).]

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Mark Bohannan
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since 2000-06-21
Posts 7269
In the winds of Cherokee song
1 posted 2002-07-11 02:49 AM


She doesn't have orange and black fur does she?  

If you think it is nice at night, try waking up before she does and watch the morning sun dance on her face while she sleeps.  It will captivate you for all eternity.  

[This message has been edited by Mark Bohannan (07-11-2002 08:42 AM).]

Larry C
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since 2001-09-10
Posts 10286
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2 posted 2002-07-11 03:11 AM


Duncan,
Yup...you done real good here! Wow! Uh huh, uh huh.

Show you care to those you love...today.

Janet Marie
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since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554

3 posted 2002-07-11 08:10 AM


it shouldn't be this much fun
it shouldn't have come this far
it shouldn't be why I wake
or how I rock myself to sleep
it shouldn't be

==============================

when youre doing it right it should be

*smiling at you*
heart on sleeve sincerety distills quite nicely me thinks


*laughing* at the irony  behind the thought of a moth asking "who is in charge here"

the pretty blue flame ... of course.
silly silly boy  

Now for me some words come easy
But I know that they don't mean that much ...
Compared with the things that are said when lovers touch.

J.Browne

Seymour Tabin
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since 1999-07-07
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Tamarac Fla
4 posted 2002-07-11 08:22 AM


Duncan,
You lucky devil, good one enjoyed.

Enchantress
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since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113
Canada eh.
5 posted 2002-07-11 09:11 AM


Mmm Duncan...loved this!!
~Hugs~

~Somewhere in my heart I'm always
dancing with you in the summer rain~

Goodknight
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since 2002-06-15
Posts 2386
Ohio, USA
6 posted 2002-07-11 09:13 AM


a very good poem that evokes very nice feelings - well written - thanks - Paul
Martie
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since 1999-09-21
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California
7 posted 2002-07-11 09:41 AM


Duncan

It should be just like this....at least something should.  Very much enjoyed!

catalinamoon
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since 2000-06-03
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The Shores of Alone
8 posted 2002-07-11 10:07 AM


Glad some of us are experiencing the good stuff
Sandra

mycafe
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since 2002-05-23
Posts 584

9 posted 2002-07-11 11:39 AM


yet
you sleep
here beside me

I wonder
I write
I believe


...these words are really impactful ya know!  Very good read!

mycafe

Keep counting your blessings

devina
Member Elite
since 1999-10-28
Posts 3539
Cali
10 posted 2002-07-11 01:09 PM


Penning in ink
marvels concrete...

and you have wrote a beaut sweetie...

enjoyed this!!!

~D

Open arms can be the most fragile in the world...



Madame Chipmunk
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since 2001-12-05
Posts 8296
Michigan
11 posted 2002-07-11 01:13 PM


This is such a good feeling poem, Duncan...
You sound very happy...
and I am happy for you.

When I get too happy and things seem to go too perfectly, I always get slapped down by something horrible.....
I hope you have better luck than I have had.

~ happy for you hugs

Lyra

copyright2002 Lyra Nesius

"poetry is life distilled"  Gwendolyn Brooks

Encarta
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since 2002-02-14
Posts 101
My homeland is not of the world
12 posted 2002-07-11 01:22 PM


It shouldn't be that you think it shouldn't be.  Saying love shouldn't be is like saying angels shouldn't have wings
Very very very good poem   

Sunshine
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since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354
Listening to every heart
13 posted 2002-07-11 01:24 PM



Two words...
write more.

Pilgrimage
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since 2001-12-04
Posts 3945
Texas, USA
14 posted 2002-07-11 01:28 PM


Too good to be true? Enjoy it while it is. I love your poem.

Nan(Pilgrim variety)

Tracey
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since 2001-08-29
Posts 2808
where insanity meets breeding
15 posted 2002-07-11 08:56 PM


Remember once we wished on stars
For all our dreams come true
Someone must have listened then
For here I am with you
Holding tight, believe in love
In all our waking dreams
Wonder all you want my dear
We’ve got all that we need    

Waking to you…you’re poetry…what more could a girl ask for (okay, so it’s not morning now..but it was when I first read this!! Lol)

Puppy school 101...please teacher...make Duncan stop humping those poor girls legs!!!!

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