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Neeraja
Senior Member

since 2002-06-22

Posts 812
The Netherlands

0 posted 2002-07-10 04:27 PM

I keep my eyes closed
enjoying the magic moment
of nothingness
between sleeping
and awakening
before I hear
the birds
at the crack of dawn
welcoming the new day
with their best songs

Unfortunately…

it won’t take long
to feel
the void in my heart
because…
it’s again
an other day
without you…

the_loner_23
Member Ascendant

since 2002-06-08

Posts 5479
Jacksonville, Florida, USA

1 posted 2002-07-10 04:30 PM

That is how I feel when I am out of town and can't speak to Liam. Very good poem.

Cold hands means a warm heart

arthur
Senior Member

since 2001-08-14

Posts 678
england

2 posted 2002-07-10 05:19 PM

a brief moment of hope
before the memories flood back
and you know
today will be just like yesterday
arthur

Pilgrimage
Member Elite

since 2001-12-04

Posts 3945
Texas, USA

3 posted 2002-07-10 05:24 PM

How heartbreaking. The contrast between the emotions in the first stanza and the second makes it more powerful. Well done.

Nan(Pilgrim variety)

PoetryIsLife

Senior Member

since 2001-10-27

Posts 1763
...in my boxers...

4 posted 2002-07-10 05:29 PM

A very, very.... hard piece to read. Very real, and sad. The jump from hope to reality is very powerful, as was said. Thank you for the read. I hope.... the hope is soon reality for you.

~Titus

As I'm out there, walking, searching, for myself, for you.... won't you join me? Let's walk this journey together.

Daniel van Vliet
Member

since 2001-08-31

Posts 80

5 posted 2002-07-10 06:25 PM

"enjoying the magic moment
of nothingness"

..... [smile] .... endlessly true.

mycafe
Senior Member

since 2002-05-23

Posts 584

6 posted 2002-07-10 09:37 PM

...the feeling of emptiness at the end of it. You've expressed it so well Neeraja.

mycafe

Keep counting your blessings

Mistletoe Angel

Member Empyrean

since 2000-12-17

Posts 32816
Portland, Oregon

7 posted 2002-07-10 09:59 PM

(big hugggsssssss) Oh neeraja, this sounds so very sad, sweet friend, my heart goe sout to you and I hope now your love sings like the songbird to your heart and has erased that void in you! (kiss on cheek) My thoughts are with you, sweet friend, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Neeraja, thank you for sharing!

May love and light always shine upon you!

Love,
Noah Eaton

Balladeer

Administrator

Member Empyrean

since 1999-06-05

Posts 25505
Ft. Lauderdale, Fl USA

8 posted 2002-07-11 12:50 PM

Possibly the greatest moment of the day is the one after sleep and before full consciousness.....before reality sets in

snowpants
Member Elite

since 2000-09-16

Posts 2061
KS

9 posted 2002-07-11 02:09 AM

'I keep my eyes closed
enjoying the magic moment
of nothingness
between sleeping
and awakening'

Those are some really clever lines...I, too, love to savor that part of the day...very good write...

sp

I want to wake up to the sound of waves
crashing on a brand new day;
keep the memory of your face
but wipe the pain away...

Goodknight
Member Elite

since 2002-06-15

Posts 2386
Ohio, USA

10 posted 2002-07-11 10:42 AM

such a ppowerful image of the voids in one's heart - thanks for the emotion of a well written poem - Paul

Neeraja
Senior Member

since 2002-06-22

Posts 812
The Netherlands

11 posted 2002-07-12 01:15 PM

I feel so happy with all your sweet response to my poem!!!

Neeraja

(I have to find out how to use those emoticons... smile...)

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