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LilTai
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since 2002-06-08
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0 posted 2002-07-09 06:06 PM



blurry eyed kids sit in a cold kitchen
young and skinny with tired
eyes locked on a still clock
watching their breath drift from their nostrils
cuddled together peering at the door
praying for a shifting knob
and a mother to step through the door
with a bag of groceries and some love
they haven't eaten in days
and there is no hot water
they sleep on a single mattress curled together
for the warmth
forgotten by their mother
abandoned by the world
"prisonerz of circumstance"
and still we dwell on our problems
when these children may not survive to have their own

   Tai

I'm an idealist..I don't know where I'm going, but I'm on my way =)

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the_loner_23
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since 2002-06-08
Posts 5479
Jacksonville, Florida, USA
1 posted 2002-07-09 06:16 PM


Very good write. I enjoyed reading this.

Cold hands means a warm heart

Pilgrimage
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since 2001-12-04
Posts 3945
Texas, USA
2 posted 2002-07-09 06:22 PM


I didn't enjoy reading this, but it was written very well, and the image is vivid. I just wish it wasn't an image of a true thing, that happens all over the nation.

Nan

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3 posted 2002-07-09 06:25 PM




(tears fall down my cheeks) This is so very heartbreaking, sweet friend, my heart goes out to all the children of the world who don't get the love and attention they need, this is powerfully heartaching! (sigh) My thoughts go out to them all, sweet friend, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet LilTai, thank you for sharing!



May love and light always shine upon you!

Love,
Noah Eaton

"Underneath your clothes there's an endless story..."

Shakira

Kethry
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since 2000-07-29
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Victoria Australia
4 posted 2002-07-09 07:50 PM


this was heartachingly real.
Kethry

Here in the midst of my lonely abyss, a single joy I find...your presence in my mind.  Unknown



MidnightSon
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since 2002-05-15
Posts 312
between the gutter & the stars
5 posted 2002-07-09 10:27 PM


rough and edgy...the style reflects the content....great job.
and the message is all too true.

it's our struggle for identity that leaves us all unknown

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