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Elan
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0 posted 2002-07-09 05:18 PM




Intermezzo

It was but that once,
           the briefest interlude in time

a moment transcendent of plane
          and space,

I stepped up to him
           felt his embrace,

In slow motion, fingers
           defined his face,

My heart, fulfilled,
           I then let loose

This man of my heart,
           to hear thunder of Zeus

the rain then fell
           to fill earth’s lakes

that matched the sound
           of my heart’s break

Does he see me ever
           in his mind?

Do his thoughts run gentle
           to that time?

Did that interlude
          make him mine?

Or did only my heart become
          passion, defined?


© Copyright 2002 Elan - All Rights Reserved
Toerag
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1 posted 2002-07-09 05:21 PM


this is really good.....
Marsha
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2 posted 2002-07-09 05:38 PM


Élan darling heart how utterly utterly perfect is this, words warm  and delightful flow over my soul from your pen. How beautifully you write, how clear the images of  yearning and soft memories are. This is very special your writing is always a cut above this is hauntingly tender. I can only say this is perfect, truly beautiful writing and you are incredible.


Love and warm stuff
As always
Mushy

Breathe through the heat of our desire
Thy coolness and they balm
Let sense be dumb let flesh retire
Speak through the eathquake wind and fire

Balladeer
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3 posted 2002-07-09 10:54 PM


If your touch is a delicate as your words, he will remember
the_loner_23
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4 posted 2002-07-09 10:55 PM


I really like this. I can feel the love in this post.

Cold hands means a warm heart

Enchantress
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5 posted 2002-07-09 11:01 PM


Elan~This is so soft and sensual
with such a longing to know how he feels...
beautifully penned m'dear.
~Hugs~

Martie
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6 posted 2002-07-09 11:33 PM


Elan

I think Balladeer knows what he's talking about.  This is lovely!

Duncan
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7 posted 2002-07-10 12:07 PM


Does he see me ever
           in his mind?

Do his thoughts run gentle
           to that time?

Did that interlude
          make him mine?

Or did only my heart become
          passion, defined?


Sometimes I enjoy wondering what I may have left another with, mostly I just hope they've lost the number...lol.  This part really flowed well.

I’ll go to puppy class…if Tracey will go to cooking class

Elan
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8 posted 2002-07-10 08:44 AM



You are all very kind, thank you so much
for the tender comments...

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