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MidnightSon
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between the gutter & the stars

0 posted 2002-07-09 04:04 PM



*roundabout*

Spin me 'round now in a circle
Spin my heart like only girls will
feel the world tilt
further blurred still
'Til it makes all of my words spill...

Drivin' through a roundabout
You won't stop the turnin' 'round
we're burnin down
the here and now
The going-nowhere-journey now.

Your love is splendid dizziness
Our lives become a busy mess,
but a willingness
to do our best
Drives us 'round the craziness.

It's not as easy as it seems,
But it's more fun than anything
sweet ecstacy
of bein' free
Circumvent life's big machine.


Driving in circles
roundabout and turn-around
Living on miracles
dizzy love; won't come back down


A pretty girl and a weary boy
A petty world full of eerie noise
the clever ploys
the world employs
To keep genuine love destroyed.

So drive in circles to no end
We'll never lose and never win
let's bathe in sin
with spirits bent
Where you stop, I will begin.

The world is flashing by so fast
It's there and here and in the past
and we just laugh
at people passed
And spend more of your Daddy's cash.

People keep on asking "Why?"
Wondering how we survive...
driving blind
but we don't mind
God, it's good to be alive...


Driving in circles
roundabout and turn-around
Living on miracles
dizzy love; won't come back down

it's our struggle for identity that leaves us all unknown

© Copyright 2002 The Midnight Son - All Rights Reserved
the_loner_23
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1 posted 2002-07-09 04:08 PM


I like this poem.

Cold hands means a warm heart

devina
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2 posted 2002-07-09 04:32 PM


You've captured this chaotic world perfect here sweets...

the clever ploys
the world employs
To keep genuine love destroyed.


Yep...that'll do it...

and? I refuse to come down neither!!!

enjoyed this!!!

Open arms can be the most fragile in the world...



Mistletoe Angel
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3 posted 2002-07-09 05:54 PM




(big hugggsssssss) I understand this painful honesty so much, sweet friend, it hurts me to so many hope for miracles and not take the time to talk and interpret love sincerely heart-to-heart! (sigh) I wish love could be more understandingly taken to heart, sweet friend, this is powerful, we all love you so much!



May love and light always shine upon you!

Love,
Noah Eaton

"Underneath your clothes there's an endless story..."

Shakira

Gentle Spirit
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4 posted 2002-07-09 10:22 PM


People keep on asking "Why?"
Wondering how we survive...
driving blind
but we don't mind
God, it's good to be alive...


very emotional, and powerful writing.  This last line sums it up perfectly for me....
God, it's good to be alive......

TO TRUE!!

Enjoy life, this is NOT a dress rehearsal.

{on the wings of words are spirits fly...and our souls are free~me}


MidnightSon
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between the gutter & the stars
5 posted 2002-07-09 10:23 PM


loner: thanks for stopping by and bein entertained.  

devina: thanks very much. i'm honored that you dig it...i could learn things from a poet like you. hehe.

mistletoe: noah, your comments are always welcome. thanks for readin.

gentle spirit: snuck in on me there as i was writin this....but i appreciate it. and you said it.
too true, indeed.


it's our struggle for identity that leaves us all unknown

[This message has been edited by MidnightSon (07-09-2002 10:24 PM).]

passing shadows
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6 posted 2002-07-10 03:57 AM


oh my goodness...I'm sorry, I don't mean the poem, just things I'm going through now...this piece means quite something big to me...thank you, and I'm glad I clicked here...if you only knew...
passing shadows
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7 posted 2002-07-10 04:00 AM


had to read it again...I'm sobbing... I sware, you did this one good!
MidnightSon
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8 posted 2002-07-10 04:12 AM


shadows: always glad to connect with a fellow poet.
i hope whatever it is, i helped  
and i hope you're gettin through it.


i didn't mean to make your eyes leak.
this is a happy poem!

it's our struggle for identity that leaves us all unknown

[This message has been edited by MidnightSon (07-10-2002 04:14 AM).]

passing shadows
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9 posted 2002-07-10 04:07 PM


MS, you know there is a place where happy and sad mix together and the emotion is so powerful, that you can't do anything but sit and let it hold you. That's where you took me last night with this one. And yes, you helped Thank you.
devina
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10 posted 2002-07-11 05:27 PM


a poet like moi...???

so you wanna be a *nut* ??

big freaggin grins here sweets...

Open arms can be the most fragile in the world...



Martie
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11 posted 2002-07-11 05:38 PM


MidnightSon

A very uplifting swirl whirl!  Enjoyed!

Seymour Tabin
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12 posted 2002-07-11 05:53 PM


MidnightSon
There is a time in life that this is very true, good write, good read.

Goodknight
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13 posted 2002-07-11 06:49 PM


great insights and a good read and write - thanks Paul
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