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Dark Stranger
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0 posted 2002-07-09 02:36 PM



I own but the minute of this flicker dim display
that plays for hours in rewind wound
as metier with  artful sincerity
and the ending is the first scene again

this savanna of celluloid argy-barge
would I solicit it for those eternal instants
in minute rice water without pretending
thrummed like a dozen heartbeat monotones

drum hum, strummed  rhythm  rum'd
sipped with guzzle grunting glower row
I beg to ameliorate my improvement now
but with godless amending my efforts at best

are only the better break of spoiled less
and my punter pole will not have the length
to journey this tall ship of my wish boat reach
to the stargaze aspirations in daydreams reek..

and on the dawn of my imbecility, shall I teach?

©Dark
  
  
  
  


© Copyright 2002 ©Dark 2k - All Rights Reserved
the_loner_23
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1 posted 2002-07-09 02:38 PM


Awesome

Cold hands means a warm heart

Seymour Tabin
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Tamarac Fla
2 posted 2002-07-09 03:02 PM


Dark Stranger
You write like a black swan rather than a
anserine in blanco. Enjoyed

Dark Stranger
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3 posted 2002-07-09 03:34 PM


loner thanks for that awesome..much appreciated


sy, thanks me amigo...am proud to have your reviews

Martie
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4 posted 2002-07-09 04:03 PM


DS

You take me to confusion door and lead me by the word..it is a remarkable place.

Mistletoe Angel
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5 posted 2002-07-09 05:10 PM




(smiles) Oh my gosh, this is sooooooo beautiful, sweet friend, your poems always have an incredible word usage and a mysterious tone to it unlike any other, sweet friend, this is excellent, I love it, we all love you so much, YAY!!!



May love and light always shine upon you!

Love,
Noah Eaton

"Underneath your clothes there's an endless story..."

Shakira

Elan
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State of Wide Eye
6 posted 2002-07-09 05:21 PM



I own nothing but the
beat of my heart
which lost a thump or two
in this read...

well done, Poet...

Dark Stranger
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7 posted 2002-07-09 05:59 PM


ms martie...

lol confused?  just playin with some psych stuff..you know how they say to get your "stuff together".. just a vision of how funny it is for the person that messes it up to try to fix it too...then to help others with their mess also..

friend noah, thanks sir for your review and comments, glad the words were fun.


elan, ms it is grand to have you celebrate my sillysack with your read.  Thanks ms



Martie
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8 posted 2002-07-09 08:18 PM


Awwww....now I understand!

and on the dawn of my imbecility, shall I teach?

rwood
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9 posted 2002-07-09 11:10 PM


and on the dawn of my imbecility, shall I teach?


I am late for class Professor Dark. Your art compels..word search frenzy. Perhaps a few feathers in my velvet purse..will only tickle. Hug you hard.

Sincerely,
Reg

Dark Stranger
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10 posted 2002-07-10 05:38 AM


reg...
thanks for the hugs babe..you may have to stay after since you were late (grin)
was just playin in the big book some

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