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bsquirrel

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0 posted 2002-07-09 01:25 PM

I wore white at my funeral.
The sun shone crystal rain.
Fragile songs within their bells,
wind among the baby's breath.

I wore white at my funeral
like birthday frosting paste,
the glue of a cloud's ache.
Icicles on eves.

I wore white at my funeral
as if to earn my bones.
The hard-won, long-fought dream
to never die uneyed, alone.

I wore white at my funeral.
The earth wore winter green.
They also wore her footsteps,
the imprints of her knees.

She said burn ... together.
-TON

Janet Marie
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1 posted 2002-07-09 01:38 PM

I wore white at my funeral.
The sun shone crystal rain.
Fragile songs within their bells,
wind among the baby's breath.
================================
the glue of a cloud's ache.
Icicles on eves.
==============================
as if to earn my bones.
The hard-won, long-fought dream
to never die uneyed, alone.

I wore white at my funeral.
The earth wore winter green.
They also wore her footsteps,
the imprints of her knees.
==================================

How did do you do this time and time again?
the imagery...the angst...the pure beauty of your unique poetry....
damn I love the way you write

Now for me some words come easy
But I know that they don't mean that much ...
Compared with the things that are said when lovers touch.

J.Browne

serenity blaze
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2 posted 2002-07-09 01:45 PM

I may be taking this too far in my head--but I love the inference of white as purity and re-birth--indicating to me a metaphorical death and spiritual rebirth. To call this a "deep" poem would sound like a bad pun--but hey? why should I break a trend? *grin*

(oh, I am back for a bit today...have missed ya)

Amazing brain you have there Mike.

bsquirrel

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3 posted 2002-07-09 01:49 PM

Glad you both enjoyed.

It's inspired by reading an account of someone who wore black for years, who then had a close friend die, and decided to wear white instead at the funeral (and then the essay goes on to decry why she wore black in the first place).

That's a pretty confused person, but who cares? It gave me a good idea for a poem.

Thanks for readin'.

She said burn ... together.
-TON

[This message has been edited by bsquirrel (07-09-2002 01:50 PM).]

Duncan
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4 posted 2002-07-09 02:10 PM

I wore white at my funeral.
The earth wore winter green.
They also wore her footsteps,
the imprints of her knees.

Quite a powerful write, squirrel. Particularly liked this verse. Interesting origin of an idea.

I’ll go to puppy class…if Tracey will go to cooking class

devina
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Cali

5 posted 2002-07-09 02:19 PM

Now this is the stuff I like seeing from you Mikey!!!

I wore white at my funeral
as if to earn my bones.
The hard-won, long-fought dream
to never die uneyed, alone.

amazing here...and I had just begun to wonder about you!!!

The whole ending image you leave us with is excellent as well (yep...in a mood to compliment today- so SUCK it up!!) The whole imprint of her knees...just genius!!!!

take care you!!
capital T~
Open arms can be the most fragile in the world...

serenity blaze
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6 posted 2002-07-09 02:26 PM

I like the source of your inspire...but not so sure if white is a confused choice...without sounding too morbid? considering the symbolism, maybe it's always been backward.

Dunno...grin, I'm a pretty confused person myself!

bsquirrel

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7 posted 2002-07-09 02:41 PM

Thanks, everyone! (and you're in a good mood d/T)

And Sen, I didn't mean that white's a confused choice. I meant, in the context of the essay, it seems strange how she uses white -- to say that she's now beyond black, which she wore for years before with no problem until something "serious" happened, so it's time to put away the toys. That seems confused, and a bit naive. (but grief's a weird thing)

I think white at a funeral would be cool.

And how about more black at weddings? Heh heh.

She said burn ... together.
-TON

Enchantress
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Canada eh.

8 posted 2002-07-09 03:19 PM

I wore white at my funeral.
The earth wore winter green.
They also wore her footsteps,
the imprints of her knees.
------------------------------
Tanfastic write here Mike!
Love this closing stanza!
Man can you write!
~Hugs~

~Somewhere in my heart I'm always
dancing with you in the summer rain~

devina
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Cali

9 posted 2002-07-09 04:49 PM

ditto the black weddings here...
(from my own of course!)
but um...we had some purple in the midst of that...which I'm sure works just as well!!!

so..Mikey...you gonna wear a black dress to your wedding??? THAT is something I think Karen and I would have to drive down for!!! Oh yes...

Open arms can be the most fragile in the world...

bsquirrel

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10 posted 2002-07-09 04:57 PM

Thanks, Nancy.

D -- hmm, interesting suggestion.

Uh, how would driving from either California or Louisiana to Calgary be considered driving down?

Mike, somewhere around (and pondering the idea of "Black wedding" for a poem now!)

She said burn ... together.
-TON

[This message has been edited by bsquirrel (07-09-2002 05:00 PM).]

passing shadows
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11 posted 2002-07-10 05:16 AM

you always got a way about you *sigh*

Anvrill
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12 posted 2002-07-10 06:44 AM

Hey, if anyone's wearing the black wedding dress, it's me.

Nothing less than velvet and chiffon will be accepted, and I think that'll blow any budget our wedding will have right there... But still.

I think this poem's too goth to be in Open, baby, but hey, yr choice.

And the end REALLY reminds me of something I wrote... Peter on his knees in front of Krys' coffin. Y'know. Only minus the entire flipping out part.

God, I'm smiley. I should go to bed. It's almost 5 in the moooorning. And I have discovered my two bondage bracelets, when clasped together, make a collar.

Yep, bedtime.

"Es ist Folter, aber ich bin fast dort." Robert Smith's Torture in Deutsch.

devina
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Cali

13 posted 2002-07-10 11:05 AM

Up-Down...WHATEVER...

you always get me on the damn directions...stop that????

Open arms can be the most fragile in the world...

nakdthoughts
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Between the Lines

14 posted 2002-07-10 11:12 AM

I read this yesterday but didn't get to respond..I actually wear black most of the time..I think I like the idea of wearing white to a funeral and may do so the next time...

hugsssss my friend..
M

bsquirrel

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Posts 7855

15 posted 2002-07-10 12:02 PM

Glad you all enjoyed.

Yes, Devina, I'm slippery like that.

Maureen, I'm glad you liked it.

How are you feeling? Mail me.

Passingshadows -- wow, thanks!

Lori, you're silly an' cute an' awesome. And who said goth can't go in open?

Love y'.

M.

She said burn ... together.
-TON

Madame Chipmunk
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16 posted 2002-07-10 01:44 PM

I wore white at my funeral
like birthday frosting paste,
the glue of a cloud's ache.
Icicles on eves.

I read this one over and over, Mr.Squirrel...I even read it out loud to my husband.
We both agree, it is brilliant....so very thought provoking and full of vivid imagery.
But, I hope you aren't planning to have your funeral any time soon....
I think the wedding would be a better idea.

~ hugs from the other rodent here

Lyra

copyright2002 Lyra Nesius

"poetry is life distilled" Gwendolyn Brooks

Kellie_Cantrell
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17 posted 2002-07-10 02:00 PM

again the color gives me goosebumps

bsquirrel

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18 posted 2002-07-10 02:01 PM

She said burn ... together.
-TON

wranx
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19 posted 2002-07-13 07:31 PM

Ya know? I heard through the grapevine that this and Wedding Black were "Must Reads".

Yes.
Indeed.

~wranx

"Writing is a perfectly natural thing to do...provided it's done in private and you wash your hands afterward"....Heinlein.

bsquirrel

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Posts 7855

20 posted 2002-07-13 08:57 PM

Wranx! Glad t' see you! Thanks!

She said burn ... together.
-TON

Kethry
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21 posted 2002-07-13 09:20 PM

Wow, this is vividly black and white, no shades of grey in your imaged write
Kethry

Here in the midst of my lonely abyss, a single joy I find...your presence in my mind. Unknown

Chanson
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22 posted 2002-07-13 09:26 PM

Fabulous imagery, bsquirrel. Loved it. *s

When you think you have read it all,
read some more.
~Dorene

Anvrill
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Posts 710
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23 posted 2002-07-13 10:04 PM

This thing's getting kinda popular, baby.

And you realize that this whole idea of Funeral white is gonna work its way into the Kissably saga, right? Ebony, anyone?

"Silly bunny, there are no monsters in here." - Chrys, from Gloom Cookie

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