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Professor Gloom
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since 2000-07-23

Posts 3082
of Depression

0 posted 2002-07-09 08:29 AM

Listen now,
There’s laughter in the alley,
Between brick,
Giggles quick,
In the dirty walled valley
Of shadow,
No window,
No door enters in it’s dark,
Someone’s there
Passage rare,
From dirty street to worn park,
Listen now,
Quiet returns with a thud.

Dare I look,
To see whom made laughing sound,
That is gone,
That is done,
Will I find them on the ground,
Not about,
Or passed out,
Was it just a drunken fool,
Fears now lost
With conscience,
Mouth running rabid with drool,
Dare I look,
Will there be body in blood.

Why should I bother with discovery,
What difference could knowing mean to me
It’s only some stray laughter in the night,
Everything is just fine and all is right.

Listen now,
There’s crying in the alley.

Gloom

1slick_lady
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since 2000-12-22

Posts 6088
standing on a shadow's lace

1 posted 2002-07-09 08:46 AM

p...you stir as well as chill me...helen

Seymour Tabin
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since 1999-07-07

Posts 31720
Tamarac Fla

2 posted 2002-07-09 09:00 AM

Professor Gloom
An interesting read, enjoyed.

Sunshine

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since 1999-06-25

Posts 63354
Listening to every heart

3 posted 2002-07-09 09:18 AM

Somewhere from some long ago notebook, I have something akin to this...I think I shall go on a treasure hunt, just to see if on some plane, our minds crossed...

Martie

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since 1999-09-21

Posts 28049
California

4 posted 2002-07-09 01:07 PM

Professor

I live on an alley...and often hear things at night that I'd rather not think about or know the reason for. I enjoyed the atmosphere in this.

Professor Gloom
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since 2000-07-23

Posts 3082
of Depression

5 posted 2002-07-09 01:20 PM

Thank you, 1slick_lady,
I guess on a warm day, a chillin’ might be a good thing,
Pleased you liked it.

Thank you, Seymour Tabin,
Glad you enjoyed

Thank you, Sunshine,
I have lots of things like this, you show me yours
And I’ll show you another of mine.

Thank you, Martie,
I also live on an alley, actually have alleys on two sides,
But this isn’t about either of those,
Just a make believe story of things that go thump in the night,
Glad you liked it.

Gloom

MidnightSon
Member

since 2002-05-15

Posts 312
between the gutter & the stars

6 posted 2002-07-10 04:22 AM

you've expounded so well on a split second decision that we're all guilty of making.
looking the other way, assuming it's all okay.

wonderful words.

it's our struggle for identity that leaves us all unknown

Pilgrimage
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since 2001-12-04

Posts 3945
Texas, USA

7 posted 2002-07-10 05:42 PM

This was okay, til you creeped me out with the what-if's. Then it scared me. Then it worried me. Good writing!

Nan(Pilgrim variety)

Anvrill
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since 2002-06-21

Posts 710
in the interzone now

8 posted 2002-07-14 11:31 PM

There's that sort of pent up, almost empty feeling of The Cure's A Forest in this, only this narrator's too smart to go down the alley.

I love how the laughter turns to crying at the end. Shivery.

written in blood before everything went black

JCV

[This message has been edited by Anvrill (07-14-2002 11:33 PM).]

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