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Dark Stranger
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West Coast

0 posted 2002-07-09 05:33 AM



I was a book when I dreamed
now I see the pages blank behind
I was just a few short stories
of david and a lady there
taking a bath
on a room at night
pretending she didn't know
anyone was looking

she asked for five stones
for her fish tank
and wore my sling leather
round her belly when she danced
said no one believes in giants
since the dodgers have the pitching
and did I want to stay over
since her husband wouldn't be home

at least that way
for the rest of his life
I felt sorry for him too
goliath or not, his sword
was plastic with batteries
and my gang banged sniper noise
that made him smaller, still
he seemed taller to me then

something about being king
is not all it was said to be
the plasma is nice
and the tunes seem fine
but time is still rude
and talks out of turn
usually too loud to ignore
and really just a book,

is all I ever wanted to be

©Dark

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rwood
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Tennessee
1 posted 2002-07-09 07:10 AM


You are a book..leather bound and embossed.. Priceless. I love this expression of you.

Sincerely,
Reg

Seymour Tabin
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Tamarac Fla
2 posted 2002-07-09 07:33 AM


Dark Stranger
Your symbols do a dance macabre
But do a very good job.

Dark Stranger
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3 posted 2002-07-09 07:38 AM



Regina thanks babe....that makes me feel special
leather bound?  mmmmmm what are you wearing?
(grin) not the black outfit with the whip?


Sy, thanks sir..just was doing some psalms compares to modern "days of our lives" scripting...kinda (smile here)

[This message has been edited by Dark Stranger (07-09-2002 07:39 AM).]

Elan
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Posts 382
State of Wide Eye
4 posted 2002-07-09 08:23 AM


...and really just a book,

is all I ever wanted to be...

the imagery and metaphor
makes me want to see into the gray...

good morning, Sir...
an interesting way to start the day...


1slick_lady
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since 2000-12-22
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standing on a shadow's lace
5 posted 2002-07-09 08:27 AM


ink of blood written on onioned skin...helen
Enchantress
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Canada eh.
6 posted 2002-07-09 08:43 AM


Very interesting concept, Dark.
Enjoyed this on my otherwise gray morning.
~Hugs~

~Somewhere in my heart I'm always
dancing with you in the summer rain~

Dark Stranger
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7 posted 2002-07-09 08:58 AM


ms Elan
thanks so much for your review
of this mushin in gum wrappers

ms slick, thanks lady with hat and smile, for your read and touch

Enchantress, thanks babe, a spot of joe
to light you some dawn colors?

Martie
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8 posted 2002-07-09 10:25 AM


DS

"something about being king
is not all it was said to be
the plasma is nice
and the tunes seem fine
but time is still rude
and talks out of turn
usually too loud to ignore
and really just a book,"

Your imagination goes to incredible places, some of them hit hurt.

Dark Stranger
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9 posted 2002-07-09 02:33 PM


ms martie..thanks hon, was not a bad thing
just me getting my self talked to by self...hell I will forget what self said pretty soon anyway..(wink)

Mistletoe Angel
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10 posted 2002-07-09 06:02 PM




(sigh) I could feel a tinge of sadness in these words, sweet friend, sometimes it never benefits trying to get someones attention so we'd rather be read like an open book resembling some kind of autobiography! (big hugggssssss) This is powerful, sweet friend, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet friend, thank you for sharing!



May love and light always shine upon you!

Love,
Noah Eaton

"Underneath your clothes there's an endless story..."

Shakira

the_loner_23
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since 2002-06-08
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Jacksonville, Florida, USA
11 posted 2002-07-09 06:03 PM


Love the expression.

Cold hands means a warm heart

Marsha
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12 posted 2002-07-09 06:19 PM


DS darling heart this is Fabulous writing  utterly utterly fabulous, never do you fail to supply my eyes with food for thought. Wonderful writing and I love it, the flow as smooth as silk excellent writing absolutely excellent. I’m left mouth agape and the images and the way you write it is incredible. Utterly utterly perfect. Well done my friend


Love and warm stuff
As always
Mushy

Breathe through the heat of our desire
Thy coolness and they balm
Let sense be dumb let flesh retire
Speak through the eathquake wind and fire

Dark Stranger
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13 posted 2002-07-09 06:34 PM


noah, thanks my friend

loner friend, thanks for your read and reply

ms marsha, you are so sweet with your pink ink and utterly you give me treasures with your touches

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