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ecrivan
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my own state

0 posted 2002-07-09 04:02 AM



It pays to write under midnight oil
leave your bed and let juices toil
work up a sweat to reduce those abs
weave that carpet of words, press tabs

with goals in mind after how many times
must reduce that waist and look streamlined
the mind does exercise..innervates the hand
now must make a stand for new shape demands.

have always carried a little pot
no reference intended to cooking alot
now the presence of that fills me with disgust
I prime my brain for strategies of exercise musts.

has to be done, I've made it public
sit too much on my rear end and buckets
it takes three times a week
twenty minute periods
a new figure... I seek
to draw serious sketches

Will you do it too
or feign the flu?






[This message has been edited by ecrivan (07-09-2002 04:07 AM).]

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ecrivan
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1 posted 2002-07-09 11:57 PM


I not only have eyes, I have a body too!This one didn't catch any attention so far...what other body part I can work on..hehe
the_loner_23
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since 2002-06-08
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2 posted 2002-07-10 04:24 PM


I liked this poem. Maybe you should do your next one on legs or something.

Cold hands means a warm heart

Martie
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3 posted 2002-07-10 04:29 PM


Feels good sometimes to laugh at myself...and it takes more calories then just sitting.  Enjoyed this!
Krissy
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kent England
4 posted 2002-07-10 07:16 PM


Martin hi there Thank goodness mum had Paul’s computer she could fall back on, I don’t know how she would have managed without it, or for that matter how I would have managed, if she could be trusted I’d lend her mine but she can’t she is death to anything that has circuits and electronics. Maybe now she will treat it a little better when it returns to her desk but who knows with mum.

Wonderful writing I’m so glad I got the opportunity to reply to you, you are one of my favourite writers and I always enjoy your writing, and this is exceptional, I can’t understand why it has so few replies. The thoughts this conjure are amazing, wonderful writing

Love and warm stuff
As always
Krissy



And while thy willing soul transpiers
at every pore with instant fires
Andrew Marvell 1621-1678

[This message has been edited by Krissy (07-10-2002 07:17 PM).]

ecrivan
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5 posted 2002-07-10 11:35 PM


Why Martie,

I think a good laugh works away at fatty tissue...you stress less and eat less..there you go. To be honest it all comes from the heart, hope you're having a good summer in spite of the heat

Krissy

your Mom has passion down so well in her poems..I am amazed at the eloquence of her passages that results..and she's modest about it. Just keep writing as I do..I know for a fact I have changed styles over the years.


ecrivan
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6 posted 2002-07-10 11:37 PM


Loner_23

legs or something coming up then why leave out a part like that!


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