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The Storm (repost from Dark poetry)
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The Storm (repost from Dark poetry) |
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the_loner_23 Member Ascendant
since 2002-06-08
Posts 5479Jacksonville, Florida, USA 
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I can feel the rain in the air I can smell it The weather is still fair The clouds start to thicken I hear the thunder in the distance The clouds turn black as night I see the light Of the lightning coming down it strikes the tree trunk of brown A fire starts But the rain starts pouring from the sky And puts out the fire It does not deny The clouds start to swirl A tornado touches down I go under ground Hopefully my house will still be around After a hour The wind dies down The rain stops The thunder doesn't pop The storm is gone And I am still around Cold hands means a warm heart |
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BluesSerenade Member Patricius
since 2001-10-23
Posts 10549By the Seaside |
There is a peaceful stillness that fills the air when the clouds pass and we find our calm again. Enjoyed this! |
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Madame Chipmunk Member Rara Avis
since 2001-12-05
Posts 8296Michigan |
I enjoyed this very much, Julie...but I have a suggestion... Why don't you try doing this in free verse. I think you can capture more of the drama of a tornado if you lose the rhyme... Just a suggestion.  ~ tornadic hugsLyra |
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