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BluesSerenade Member Patricius
since 2001-10-23
Posts 10549By the Seaside 
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When I wasn't looking you appeared as if out of no where you came to me when I least expected it knocking on my door you stood with the sun behind your back asking me if I might like to walk through the park and after dark. I will always remember how easy your hand was to hold my eyes blinking under the flash of your strobe like flowers freshly cut highlighting the color of my blush. My curious mind longed to know just where you planned on taking me and far you wanted to go instantly I knew I could have danced all night with you. Like a young girl, I was nervous maybe unsure of your intentions and the reason why you came in all honestly I never saw it coming and I like to think, when looking back it was a simple twist of fate that doesn't need to be explained. And yet the more things change the more they remain the same these days with you are the best of times my love has ever spent But it seems we're not the same~ Melting down beneath the heat leaking into the air flowers wilting on my night stand. skimming the surface across the sand like a circle game complete a secret lover on demand. But every time you wrap around me and catch me in your hold you fill me up all over placed between the folds. Still, I miss the urgency where time was of the essence and the hours were ours to spare seems hard to come by after dark. If only we could go back again and fly away by night instead of counting minutes making time that's not our own. But in my mind I travel taking comfort in the fact how far we both have come and that we're both still here keeping close where we belong. And as strange as it may seem there is a special meaning to it all a private place to call my own that fits into my dreams and in my dreams come true I love you dearly just like and more..... |
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Duncan Member Ascendant
since 2001-08-07
Posts 5455 |
you stood with the sun behind your back asking me if I might like to walk The blindness of love...perfect! ...and so it begins |
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Sunnyone Member Ascendant
since 2000-07-06
Posts 5334Staffordshire, England |
This is fantastic!!!! It takes me on a journey that starts when love is so new, then shows how time may change some things, but the feelings remain the same. Oh, I like this one very much!! Open the door and let your adventure begin!!! [This message has been edited by Sunnyone (07-08-2002 03:22 AM).] |
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Dark Stranger Member Patricius
since 2001-03-19
Posts 13631West Coast |
bluezy, lovely work babe, enjoyed walking along in the images. |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
There is a comfort-in-the-familiar mood to this--watching a couple this at ease with each other is akin to watching "water ballet" A warm, loving poem here. Enjoyed.  |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
BluesSerenade Well done I enjoyed taking the stroll. |
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Greeneyes  
since 2000-09-09
Posts 9903In Your Poetic Mind |
LOve is so full of emotions....well done Lori....good to see that smile here.... HUGSSSS and  Lauren~ The ocean looks like a thousand diamonds strewn across a blue blanket |
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the_loner_23 Member Ascendant
since 2002-06-08
Posts 5479Jacksonville, Florida, USA |
Love is a wonderful thing. Great poem. Cold hands means a warm heart |
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Mistletoe Angel
since 2000-12-17
Posts 32816Portland, Oregon |
 (smiles) Oh Lori, this is soooooo beautiful, sweet friend, I hope everything works out alright and you get the love you desire so much always! (kiss on cheek) This is fabulous, sweet friend, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Lori, thank you for shairng!  May love and light always shine upon you! Love, Noah Eaton "Underneath your clothes there's an endless story..." |
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Madame Chipmunk Member Rara Avis
since 2001-12-05
Posts 8296Michigan |
Melting down beneath the heat leaking into the air flowers wilting on my night stand. skimming the surface across the sand like a circle game complete a secret lover on demand. Its always wonderful to have a secret lover on demand... I love the poem, Lori. ~ hugs from the heartLyra |
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Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. |
Ah, I love this Lori! Nice comfortable feel to it. Enjoyed so much! ~Hugs~ ~Somewhere in my heart I'm always |
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vandana
since 1999-10-22
Posts 10463USA |
enjoyed |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Blues A love story...my favorite kind of poem. Enjoyed watching the the opening of it and the shared feeling. |
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catalinamoon
since 2000-06-03
Posts 9543The Shores of Alone |
I like your story, and the way it travels through time. Sandra |
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BluesSerenade Member Patricius
since 2001-10-23
Posts 10549By the Seaside |
Ah Duncan~ you summed it up in so few words! Love is blind and a many splendored thing when it's done right, not saying I done it right though. Thanks for that thought! Sunnyone~ Yes, some things never change....love simply evolves and we find our way. Thank you so much for your warm thoughts. DS~ Thanks for walking by and taking in the scenery. If you could only see the view through my eyes, it's pretty there where my heart lies. serenity~ Thank you for your lovely thoughts on the subject, I so appreciate them. Mr. Tabin~ It's always good to see you here, thank you sir~ Lauren~ Thank you so much for sharing your smile and always leaving a hug for me! Sometimes the emotions that love stirs is like a pot that boils over! It's so hot here today it's no wonder I'm wilting fast!!!  Thanks you~loner~ Love is all that...thank you for coming by and letting me know you were here.... It is much appreciated. Noah~ Thank you kind sir, love doesn't come with a guarantee but I wouldn't turn it in for the world, even if it doesn't always work the way I'd like it to. Lyra~ Love is impossible to put demands on, it just comes to us even when we know darn well we're asking too much! That's my 2 cents anyway. Thank you muchly dear heart! Hi Nancy~ I'm glad you made yourself comfy, after all that was my intention, and I'm grateful to you and the kindness you share with me. Hugs~ vandana~ I'm so glad you did and that you took the time to let me know. Thanks~ Martie~ Even your replies are poetic, and I thank you for sharing them with me. Sandra~ My original title was 'Day One' I suppose I was getting all sentimental with this. Even though things don't always remain the same, what's important is that the feelings remain at all. Thank you always~ |
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