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JP
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0 posted 2002-07-05 09:18 PM


An ache beneath your words
a pain that underlies
the happy face you show
and the cheerful smile lies

You touch our hearts today
you stroke our souls
you wrench our hope away
to thrust upon winter's coals

Flames ensnare your heart
but never leave ash
the smoke of nothingness
the stench of emoliated dreams

Pity you for pity's sake
yet praise you to your face
touch your spirit vicariously
through your tortured scribblings

Bask in the glory of anonymity
cursing yourself all the while
for desiring the fame
that befalls all around you

Cut deep the veins thought
spilling its inky lifeblood  
upon eternity's parchment
and cry havoc in your soul.

Yesterday is ash, tomorrow is smoke; only today does the fire burn.
Nil Desperandum, Fata viem invenient

© Copyright 2002 JP Burns - All Rights Reserved
serenity blaze
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1 posted 2002-07-05 09:24 PM


hey JP--it's a pleasure to see you out here in the Open!

You write the truth about writers, and I often call writing "the cutting of a vein"--so I can very much relate to this...

I enjoyed this much--please post more?

[This message has been edited by serenity (07-05-2002 09:25 PM).]

Balladeer
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2 posted 2002-07-05 09:25 PM


Ouch!
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3 posted 2002-07-05 09:28 PM



I've got the bandaids somewhere...
when you write raw, you cut deep...
Where've you been?  'Bout time you got yourself back here...

Poet deVine
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4 posted 2002-07-05 09:41 PM


You know I love this..and it's nice to see you on THIS side of the blue line!
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5 posted 2002-07-05 09:54 PM


WOW!!  Good stuff here!!!
More please??!!
~Hugs~

~Somewhere in my heart I'm always
dancing with you in the summer rain~

JP
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6 posted 2002-07-06 01:20 PM


Thanks friends!  It really does feel good to come back out into the Open after so long an absence.

Yesterday is ash, tomorrow is smoke; only today does the fire burn.
Nil Desperandum, Fata viem invenient

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7 posted 2002-07-06 03:47 PM


Giving this a bump because its your work, and your work, after all is genuis. Right?


Loved this.

I will not bend to the cowardice of a silent judgement.

Seymour Tabin
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8 posted 2002-07-06 03:53 PM


JP,
I think ouch about says it. Enjoyed

JP
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9 posted 2002-07-06 04:37 PM


Thanks Tempt, Seymore... means a lot really :P

Genius eh?  Has the potential for inspiration.  Let me see what I can do with the assumption of genius.... be back later.

Yesterday is ash, tomorrow is smoke; only today does the fire burn.
Nil Desperandum, Fata viem invenient

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10 posted 2002-07-07 05:27 PM




YAY!!! Oh JP, this is wonderful, sweet friend, we have all missed you so so much in Open, I am so glad you are back with a bundle of lovely words to share like these! (sigh) This is excellent, sweet friend, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet JP, thank you for sharing!



May love and light always shine upon you!

Love,
Noah Eaton

"Underneath your clothes there's an endless story..."

Shakira

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