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catalinamoon
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The Shores of Alone

0 posted 2002-07-05 06:32 PM


Lately I ride close to the ground
with a sorely tired spirit
and a body almost used up

The view from down here is harsh
feet walking over me are large
and standing feels impossible

Low down, I gaze up briefly
a misted dream passes overhead
and once more, my heavy heart rises.



© Copyright 2002 Sandra - All Rights Reserved
nakdthoughts
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Between the Lines
1 posted 2002-07-05 06:33 PM


we can always rise again Sandra...
hugss
M

Enchantress
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Canada eh.
2 posted 2002-07-05 06:52 PM


Beautiful write Sandra.
Chin up sweetie.
~Hugs~

ethome
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3 posted 2002-07-05 06:56 PM


Whew! I thought I was going to have to come over there and prop you up!
But you got the heavy heart off the ground with this clever poem from dark to light!
A misted dream might be the saviour of all of us some day.

Kethry
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4 posted 2002-07-05 07:04 PM


Sandra,
rise up on wings of morning.
Keth

Here in the midst of my lonely abyss, a single joy I find...your presence in my mind.  Unknown



Balladeer
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5 posted 2002-07-05 10:04 PM


Hey, as long  as the heart still has the desire to rise, there's hope, Sandra
Gentle Spirit
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6 posted 2002-07-05 11:24 PM


and once more, my heavy heart rises.

and it will Sandra, as many times as it needs to sweetie.  Hugs to you..

Enjoy life, this is NOT a dress rehearsal.

{on the wings of words are spirits fly...and our souls are free~me}


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7 posted 2002-07-05 11:27 PM


There for a sec.  I thought I was going to
have to break out a shovel and scrape you
up off the sidewalk....

Glad your heart rose......

Nicely written Sandra...nice...

Duncan
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8 posted 2002-07-06 12:12 PM


Though, I wish the subject was a happier one for you, this is one of the best poems I've read from you.  Very good!


Forgetting all I'm lacking
Completely and complete
I'll take your invitation
You take all of me

Lifehouse

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9 posted 2002-07-07 12:27 PM


Rise up, dear Sandra....your life awaits...
but, I guess I didn't have to tell you that,
you found it out for yourself and wrote a lovely poem about it.
~ hugs for feeling good

Lyra

copyright2002 Lyra Nesius

"poetry is life distilled"  Gwendolyn Brooks

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In Your Poetic Mind
10 posted 2002-07-07 12:30 PM


Peace...Hugssssss you....


Lauren~

The ocean looks like a thousand diamonds strewn across a blue blanket
I lean against the wind pretend I am weightless and in this moment I am happy

wranx
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11 posted 2002-07-07 12:34 PM


Ya got down there pretty low, Sandra
I believe I've gotten me trousers dirty whilst accompanying you. Glad you allowed me back up.

~wranx

"Writing is a perfectly natural thing to do...provided it's done in private and you wash your hands afterward"....Heinlein.

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12 posted 2002-07-07 03:55 PM




(big hugggssssssss) Oh Sandra, keep your chin up, sweet friend, let your heart rise and believe that you will fly and find all your heart desires! (kiss on cheek) This is wonderful, sweet friend, our thoughts are with you, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Sandra, thank you for sharing!



May love and light always shine upon you!

Love,
Noah Eaton

"Underneath your clothes there's an endless story..."

Shakira

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13 posted 2002-07-07 06:17 PM


This is beautiful, as always.  Even when you express your pain or sorrow, it is always done so eloquently.  I hope your heart is lifted soon.

Beth

What is past is prologue;
what to come,
In yours and my discharge.



Tracey
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where insanity meets breeding
14 posted 2002-07-07 09:53 PM


Always reach up for your dreams Sandra. For sometimes they really do come true. Great poem.

All donations to Duncan’s puppy training classes gratefully accepted

Mark Bohannan
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In the winds of Cherokee song
15 posted 2002-07-08 12:23 PM


Sometimes I feel as low as a snake's belly in a wagon rut, but as long as you keep getting up, then there is always hope.  I know that your endurance and your persistance will pay off in the end.  Hang in there.  Very cool write to show your strength.
the_loner_23
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16 posted 2002-07-08 12:26 PM


I know the feeling. Good poem.

Cold hands means a warm heart

ThisDiamond
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17 posted 2002-07-08 12:35 PM


One of the most precious gifts of your writing is the "real" of it. You face the world as it is and I see you have wings.
All blessings. ThisDiamond

Sunnyone
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18 posted 2002-07-08 02:09 AM


Oh, lil sis, this is so poignant in it's despair.......beautifully sad, somehow, but makes one realize that there are times when we all must be low, times when we must rest and take a break from flight. But you will spread your wings again!!  

Open the door and let your adventure begin!!!
  
    


cherrypoptart
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state of wordthiness
19 posted 2002-07-08 02:18 AM


Be encouraged by the fact that you don't have to prove you're still you. People here love you for many reasons each in their own way.
Auguste
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By the sea
20 posted 2002-07-08 12:25 PM


Sandra, rise up and don't let the world beat you down, or how will we be able to look into the depth of those wonderful eyes. Big *hugs* my friend!
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