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Seymour Tabin
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0 posted 2002-07-05 07:21 AM


Clouds

Rain clouds shroud and gray my mind
They reign within the mirrors glass
A spider’s sanguine web of kind
That chains me in its sticky mass

Bound by thoughts of memories tie
Merry-go-round the rays of sun
Where flowers bloom of lily lies
A vine matured of youthful fun

Roots grown down to waters level
Making rough and tough the vine
Deep enough to hear the devil
And make it grow a nasty spine.

Spines rain down my head within
Bringing reign of sorrows pain
What once was fun has grown to sin
And draws the blood of sound and sane.

Be opine what you groom and plant
Some vines may bloom to disenchant.


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ethome
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1 posted 2002-07-05 07:30 AM


I know I got into some wine from a vine that made me very disenchanting but I hungover it till it passed.

This is delightful Sy.....Always look forward to reading your daily when I get the chance (not working)

"Roots grown down to waters level
Making rough and tough the vine
Deep enough to hear the devil
And make it grow a nasty spine."

I didn't know you knew my ex!

The devil came to me once and said
"I can make trouble for you, BIG TIME!"
I said, "I know!"
He said, 'aren't you afraid?"
I replied, "uumm NO!"
"Why?" he asked.
"Well," I said, "I been married to your sister for fifteen years!"

Seymour Tabin
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2 posted 2002-07-05 07:36 AM


Thank you ethome,
I see we get the same Email I read that joke the other day. But it sill brought a smile. Have a good one.

Kethry
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3 posted 2002-07-05 07:36 AM


Sy,
this was not a nasty pine, whine or spine but it did have backbone and character.
Keth

Here in the midst of my lonely abyss, a single joy I find...your presence in my mind.  Unknown



Seymour Tabin
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4 posted 2002-07-05 07:39 AM


Keth,
Funny, funny, funny..... Thank's alot.

Janet Marie
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5 posted 2002-07-05 07:49 AM


Rain clouds shroud and gray my mind
They reign within the mirrors glass
A spider's sanguine web of kind
That chains me in its sticky mass

=======================================
Deep enough to hear the devil
And make it grow a nasty spine.

Spines rain down my head within
Bringing reign of sorrows pain
What once was fun has grown to sin
And draws the blood of sound and sane.

Be opine what you groom and plant
Some vines may bloom to disenchant.

======================================

They reign within the mirrors glass

A spider's sanguine web of kind


Could those lines be any cooler??

I've said it before ... I'll say it again ...
there is magic in your pen.
Every verse a seed of wisdom's vine ...
You're like fine wine ... you get better with time.




*winkiewinkie*
  

We wish ourselves beautiful ... and cry in the night.
Its not the love you fear ... but the fall from the height.

E. McCain

Seymour Tabin
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6 posted 2002-07-05 09:57 AM


JM,
You are throwing rose petals again and Randy is dancing in the middle of them. Haven't forgotten the CD's my daughter was away and now she is busy, it's just a matter of time.
I hope all is well I'll try and write you tonight. WWRS

vandana
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7 posted 2002-07-05 10:54 AM


enjoyed
Decaflame
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8 posted 2002-07-05 10:56 AM



The all of me{s} are smiling over this one...

Seymour Tabin
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9 posted 2002-07-05 11:45 AM


Vandana,
Thank you.

Decaflame
Glad it's not part of you. Thank you

Martie
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10 posted 2002-07-05 11:56 AM


Sy

You are part of the day, and delightful.  

Seymour Tabin
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11 posted 2002-07-05 11:59 AM


Martie,

Pilgrimage
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12 posted 2002-07-05 12:07 PM


This has evocative images. I liked the rain/reign thing, too, and the construction is faultless. Altogether a great poem.

Nan

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13 posted 2002-07-05 01:13 PM


Something to the effect of we reap what we
sow.....Your wisdom always shines...
Thanx Sy...

Mistletoe Angel
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14 posted 2002-07-05 02:07 PM




(big hugggsssssss) Awwwwwww, I understand this kind of nostalgia so well, sweet friend, whenever I cloudgaze and see shapes that seem so familiar to me I too reflect on so many memories and it is miraculous to me how clouds can do such that! (sigh) This is very well said, sweet friend, I love it, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Seymour, thank you for sharing!



May love and light always shine upon you!

Love,
Noah Eaton

"Underneath your clothes there's an endless story..."

Shakira

catalinamoon
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15 posted 2002-07-05 03:01 PM


"Be opine what you groom and plant
Some vines may bloom to disenchant"

Telling the truth here!
Sandra

[This message has been edited by catalinamoon (07-05-2002 03:02 PM).]

Seymour Tabin
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16 posted 2002-07-05 03:22 PM


Pilgrimage,
I like the altogether.

Magnus,
Good comment, thank you.

Noah,
Enjoyed your reply.

Sandra,
As I see it, thank you.

Marsha
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17 posted 2002-07-05 06:10 PM


Seymour darling boy this is absolutely utterly perfect again you’ve been imbibing wisdom and truth, and the result is always special. You always manage to cloak my soul in an aura of delight. Your words fall like moonlit shadows that grace the ground with silvered light. This is purely an amazing write again by you.

I love it utterly utterly, YOU never cease to amaze me and always I value your writing. You can tell can’t you, drat I wonder what gives me away It must be my delicate hint of I love this utterly utterly that does it, hmmmmm?



Love and warm stuff
As always
Mushy

Breathe through the heat of our desire
Thy coolness and they balm
Let sense be dumb let flesh retire
Speak through the eathquake wind and fire
Oh

nakdthoughts
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18 posted 2002-07-05 06:46 PM


always interesting to read what you offer

I think I may not plant this year
then I can't be disenchanted by what does or does not bloom...

*s
M

Seymour Tabin
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19 posted 2002-07-05 10:47 PM


Maureen,
Thank you dear but I think I would plant.

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