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waiting on god |
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Dark Stranger Member Patricius
since 2001-03-19
Posts 13631West Coast 
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today is simple word glass without sun to make rainbows my hands are the mirrors of skin holding face sides of damp beard forests I walk there under the oaks with scuba fins on my shoulders the mist people write their grafitti with rain smell paint cans I talk to the cricket guide he smiles and grafites his knees lest his answer change fate sheets on the sofa of morning sky god notices my uniform and smile grins so many medals and only a toy gun where the soldiers of night so deadly or were they but shifts in the wind I will be the leaf now, and covert assigned ©Dark [This message has been edited by Dark Stranger (07-05-2002 05:57 AM).] |
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Gentle Spirit Member Patricius
since 2000-10-09
Posts 13989 |
god notices my uniform and smile grins so many medals and only a toy gun where the soldiers of night so deadly or were they but shifts in the wind I will be the leaf now, and covert assigned I think God notices all the uniforms DS......and blesses them. Touching and wonderful write from you today. Hugs. Enjoy life, this is NOT a dress rehearsal. |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
How many themes rumble through this how many eyes don't see how many hearts broken over bits of memories, like these |
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Dark Stranger Member Patricius
since 2001-03-19
Posts 13631West Coast |
G girl, thanks for that thought Donna, hugs to you on this fine friday ms sunshine, coffee and a sweet lady, thanks for the read and comments, hope your 4th was brightly festive. |
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ethome Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858New Brunswick Canada |
DS I could read your metaphorical extensions all day, they're marvelous! I never really understand exactly what you're trying to say but I love the perspective I get and that's the beauty of poetry. If you co-write with Serenity then I'll have to hire a poetic language translator to understand but the cost will be worth it! Until then.... I walk there under the oaks with scuba fins on my shoulders the mist people write their grafitti with rain smell paint cans I talk to the cricket guide" I'll use that for help! Have a nice day! |
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Kethry Member Rara Avis
since 2000-07-29
Posts 9082Victoria Australia |
I like the idea of mist people. It reminds me of something but I can't put my finger on it. Lovely images. Kethry Here in the midst of my lonely abyss, a single joy I find...your presence in my mind. Unknown |
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Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. |
Fantastic use of imagery and metaphors Dark. Enjoyed my morning even more... reading you. ~Hugs~ ~Somewhere in my heart I'm always |
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Dark Stranger Member Patricius
since 2001-03-19
Posts 13631West Coast |
et....thanks so much..well let me translate a bit of this for you. I was leaning on my hands and contimplating the quiet of dark before dawn...the oak trees misting and and the crickets growing quiet when I move by. scuba fins on shoulders was my brushing the overhanging limbs and swimming through the dew that marked my shirt.......I imagine myself as a leaf now, just waiting to see what god does next around me.....oh and the soldier with toy gun....when we look at our acomplishments we are so smug of the battles we have won..and when god looks at them....well you know. Thanks again ET, very much appreciate your reads. ms Kethry, thanks for your review. it is a place I think everyone can visualize from the encyclopedia of their surroundings..and yes it is a grotto of comforting thought. enchantress, hope your morning is a big fuzzy tickle skin blanket with spring farm house scents of honey spice and bisquit oven smells, thanks babe [This message has been edited by Dark Stranger (07-05-2002 08:57 AM).] |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
DS You turn the morning into a magic place, and I am spell bound. |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Dark Stranger Sounds to me like you were a supernumerary. Which doesn't take away from the good write. Enjoyed. |
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Dark Stranger Member Patricius
since 2001-03-19
Posts 13631West Coast |
ms martie..thanks lil friend for the lady eyes and reply. sy, humble thanks sir...just trippin' on the amazing of before daze...thanks again |
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Pilgrimage Member Elite
since 2001-12-04
Posts 3945Texas, USA |
Oh, to be a leaf in the wind, watching the works of God. I love this poem. Nan |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
You are so in tune... I almost wrote something similar. Yesterday I watched this tired yellowed leaf spinning in the wind. It was almost dead--but it just kept hanging on to the branch, spinning on its stem. It's amazing what we can see when we open our eyes. And you, luv, are an eye-opener!!!  |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
today is simple word glass without sun to make rainbows my hands are the mirrors of skin holding face sides of damp beard forests ========================================= the mist people write their grafitti with rain smell paint cans ======================================= quote: nothing that this mere moth could say could match the cool of that perspective...so I shant even try. I'll just read this again and let my minds eye fill with color and light(enlightenment)  Thank you for the view and hues of true. |
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Mistletoe Angel 
since 2000-12-17
Posts 32816Portland, Oregon |
 (smiles) Awwwwwwww, I just love this, sweet friend, ah, to flow gracefully like a leaf and sail uninterruptedly on the winds of dreams, this is beautiful! (big hugggssssss) This is excellent, sweet friend, I just love your surreal portraits in your words, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet friend, thank you for sharing!  May love and light always shine upon you! Love, Noah Eaton "Underneath your clothes there's an endless story..." |
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Dark Stranger Member Patricius
since 2001-03-19
Posts 13631West Coast |
pilgram' thanks so much for your review serene 1 thank you for such a treat of reply jm, you make me smile with your comments, and I sure enjoy them, thank you so much noah, thank you my friend for your warm words and your mind visit of this scene |
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snowpants Member Elite
since 2000-09-16
Posts 2061KS |
'god notices my uniform and smile grins so many medals and only a toy gun where the soldiers of night so deadly or were they but shifts in the wind' I will just stand by and join the many admirers of this fantastic poem...excellent images and metaphors as always, DS...I enjoyed this sp    I've been down this road forever, |
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Greeneyes 
since 2000-09-09
Posts 9903In Your Poetic Mind |
you are good at this, you know that right??  Lauren~ The ocean looks like a thousand diamonds strewn across a blue blanket |
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